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Kimmi replied to the topic You Are in the forum Poets 5 years, 6 months ago
Thank you @sam-m . (:
I’m glad you liked it!
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Sam M replied to the topic You Are in the forum Poets 5 years, 6 months ago
Hi, Kimmi! I really like your poem. 🙂 Some of my favorite lines were: “Do you not know, you rival the stars? Do you not know, who you are?”
Thanks for sharing!
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Kimmi started the topic You Are in the forum Poets 5 years, 6 months ago
You Are
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You are loved my friend.
Do you not know your worth?
Do you not know, you rival the stars?
Do you not know, who you are?
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You’re worth is more than the sun.
More than the flickering lights of the heavens.
Your heart is pure, cleansed by the blood of the Lamb.
You are clean. He loves you.
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My friend, do you not know it w…[Read more]
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Beth Darlene replied to the topic Drowning in the forum Poets 5 years, 7 months ago
=)
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Dakota replied to the topic Drowning in the forum Poets 5 years, 7 months ago
@beth20 You’re welcome!
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Beth Darlene replied to the topic Drowning in the forum Poets 5 years, 7 months ago
@dakota Thanks so much, Dakota!!!
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Dakota replied to the topic Drowning in the forum Poets 5 years, 7 months ago
@beth20 Good job on this poem! 🙂
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Beth Darlene replied to the topic Drowning in the forum Poets 5 years, 7 months ago
Thanks Sam! It’s one of the only two poems I’ve ever written.
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Sam M replied to the topic Drowning in the forum Poets 5 years, 7 months ago
Hi, Beth. You did a great job of writing an emotional piece in masterfully concise way. I like you’re writing style and thought it was cool how you ended the poem with a thought-provoking question. Great job!
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Sam M replied to the topic I Would Be in the forum Poets 5 years, 7 months ago
Yeah, I can see now how that would be confusing. Thanks for the feedback! 🙂
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Sam M replied to the topic The Party Tree in the forum Poets 5 years, 7 months ago
Hi, Jenny! I like your vivid writing style and how the first lines of each stanza were parallel to each other. The way you ended it was cool too. I can’t think of any recommendations for improvement. Sorry. 🙂 It looked great to me.
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Beth Darlene started the topic Drowning in the forum Poets 5 years, 7 months ago
Drowning
In doubt,
In hesitation.
Submerged
In my uncertainties
It’s wrong.
.
Hiding
My face,
All my feelings.
Deception
To cover
My anxiety
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Fighting
To open,
To unbolt.
Conflicting
Emotions,
I’m confused.
.
Am I a closed door?
No.
But will this door ever open more than a crack?
No.
You think you know me.
Do you?
-Beth Darlene
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Beth Darlene replied to the topic A poem – I want to weep in the forum Poets 5 years, 7 months ago
Nice poem @eitan!!
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Gracie replied to the topic The Party Tree in the forum Poets 5 years, 7 months ago
That was really good @jennythefaun !!
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JennytheFaun replied to the topic I Would Be in the forum Poets 5 years, 7 months ago
I don’t know if you’re still looking for feedback on this or not, but just in case you are:
I thought this was really good! The main suggestion I have is that in the very first line, “was and am isn’t” really tripped me up. I understand now what you’re saying, but it took me two or three glances to piece it together.
My favorite line was “I…[Read more]
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JennytheFaun started the topic The Party Tree in the forum Poets 5 years, 7 months ago
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1ZMIEA7d_LkfwEGUxcdqGM8-R5j_CZ5cJqDDVSxv6Nxs/edit?usp=sharing
I haven’t written much poetry, but this is one I’ve been working with recently. I feel like it still needs some changes, but I’m not sure how to move forward with it. Any critique would be great, especially comments on the doc.
Also, as I think…[Read more]
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