luciusbraun

Oh boy, there’s a lot to go over here. Let’s dive in, shall we?

If you want a character to lose a lot of blood, not die, and have a decent chance for survival, go for gut/stomach wounds. That area will bleed a lot but not enough for someone to bleed out (usually.) If you want them to be shot several times, you can go with either upper arm or…[Read more]

Hello!  I have a few questions regarding gunshot wounds

I have a character who’s going to be gunned down in an act of revenge, and I’m trying to balance that fine line between drama and realism.

For a little bit of context, this is set in a fictional Cold War setting, so medical technology, ambulances, telephones, etc. are all present.  This c…[Read more]

@rose-colored-fancy no I got confused. I didn’t realize that Jared had brought Avin and Enydd to where the others were.

@jared-williams

ah. sorry, rose-colored-fancy, didn’t see your post till after I posted mine.

Don’t worry, same here 🙂 I like your idea better though! We can go with that one, I didn’t have anything planned beyond “Get the characters moving again”

ah. sorry, @rose-colored-fancy, didn’t see your post till after I posted mine.

but for those new on here, here is a photo of Abirami without his robe on, and below that is Ku’Aya. Both are generic but close renditions of what they look like.

Whoa… hang on I think I got confused XD Enydd, Avin, and Abirami are already with the others, Just ignore that bit XD

oomph…. yeah. Lol. Abirami saved you guys. lol… so, my post, I was shooting ice at the bugs to keep them at bay, then I transformed into a large worm, swallowed you guys up in the water and then transported you safely into the room everyone else was and spat you out, froze the hole I had made in the wall closed so the insects couldn’t get…[Read more]

@this-is-not-an-alien

Ophelia

“No problem! I can change my dreams!!” The boy blurted. He had a sheepish, awkward grin.

He tilted his head like an inquisitive bird and added,

“Well…I can change where I go in dreams like when dreams have like this plotted out path you’re supposed to go but I can go anywhere I want!! But if I try to change to…[Read more]

@emily-waldorf

Haha, thanks!! He’s one of my favorite POVs to write he’s just so adorable!

I’m hoping to start writing his comic sometime soon this year, I have a newsletter for it but I am not a reliable updater XDDD

@this-is-not-an-alien I love Ehud. He’s so awkward and lovable and dwaa!

*ginormous grin* Grosssss!

I’ll take ten!!!

“Ooh, I do!” A perky voice replied. “I don’t even understand it the second time but sometimes I know what’s coming!”

She said. She looked like a girl who had just stumbled out of an anime academy. Ehud instantly felt a connection, they were the same brand of weird, it was stunning and epic! After…[Read more]

“You remind me of someone I used to know…” Someone spoke, not loudly, but not in a whisper. “Nathair, at your service.”

Nithel glanced over his shoulder, brows quirked. Is he speaking to me? ‘Snake’ or ‘Serpent’ was looking at Nithel; Nithel wondered about the parents, that would name their child such. Nithel nodded to him, slowly. “Nithel,…[Read more]

Avin

He watched Enydd dive into the stream before following. He’d not been swimming for more than a few seconds before he began to collide with huge pieces of ice. One crashed against his shoulder, and he dodged away from another coming at his head. Through a blur, he thought he saw a shape swimming in the stream, spewing the ice into the dim…[Read more]

The blind one was grumbling about glass in his foot and threatening to pick a mirror at random.

His bleeding foot looked painful. (*Me: Go figure.*)

He’d observed that sometimes other people wince when someone else is in pain, even if they don’t know them too well. But, he’s never experienced that, it just fascinated him.

That boy Alessio alway…[Read more]

@this-is-not-an-alien

How much ya paying

No pay – this would legit be a free thing I put out on the internet for funzies.

You do remember you should do things for fun, right?

Right?!

Anyway, it’s a loooooong way in the future. If at all. Just seems like it would be fun. 🤷‍♀️

Ophelia

We were being attacked by a swarm of bugs. This was glorious, it was like something out of a dream or a storybook. I grinned.

Okay, so we were supposed to get up to that door. I paused to take off my shoes. I trusted my feet more than my shoes. I shoved them in my purse and swung it around to my back so they wouldn’t fall out.

Alaric…[Read more]

@jared-williams

That was a fun post! I think I might change Cal’s part in it, as she definitely wouldn’t let Abirami help her XD But it doesn’t really change anything about the story, so that’s not an issue!

Also I think you might have confused two characters! Cal has blue hair, @calidris ‘ Kit is the one with pink…[Read more]

@k-a-grey

Thank you so much for the critique!

Ah, yes- good point. I’ve been guilty of abrupt resolutions before. XD In fact, in just about all my recent short stories. xP

So that was really good advice, thanks! God bless you! ;D