Sir Leeds

My apologies for not responding sooner. I was out of state and away from my computer this weekend.

I’d agree with the general consensus here. Story #1 gets my vote.

Hey @scribbles !

Here’s the meaning I get out of this one:

The narrator starts out hopeful in adversity, then the match and flint metaphors seem to explain how adversity can produce hope, and the last part kind of puzzles me with the word “even”.

Candles burn. That’s their thing. So the word “even” seems out of place to me unless this is a…[Read more]

Hmm…what about a historical fiction short story about the British Empire using “the sun never sets on the British Empire” as a play on words?

It might be cliche, but what if we had a noteworthy British historical figure who lived to see the Empire in it’s glory days and then fall apart into the Commonwealth watching the sun set and thinking…[Read more]

Hey @brandon-miller sorry I’m a little late to the party too!

I’ve written more of a sad poem about sunset. I’ve seen a lot of happy ideas and themes around sunset here, so maybe something sad could add to the creative mix.

In the poem, I use the sun going down on the evening of  autumnal equinox as a setting for a story of a family coping with…[Read more]

Hi @scribbles

1) Haha nice pun! And I agree with you, there is a lot of leeway. I’ll experiment with both.

2) I guess I wanted to communicate the feeling of being a big fish in a little pond and a little fish in the ocean. When you’re the big fish, I feel like it’s really easy to feel good about yourself and where you are in life, but it’s also…[Read more]

Hi @archer360 !

It does pull me in. I want to know what happened to the sister, why only the brother can calm her down, etc. and that pushes me forward. Do you plan to answer those questions in the future or leave them as they are? I know there are different schools of thought on this, so there is no right or wrong answer. I’m just curious.

I…[Read more]

Hi @emma-starr !

I agree with @rolena-hatfield on this one. He’s made some bad decisions, but there’s an attraction to someone who’s good and in a “world of light” so he tries to bridge the gap and (it seems like) he fails.

From the line “But I’m too ruthless to be tamed,” I get the vibe that he’s not willing to give up his dark ways to get what…[Read more]

Thanks for the feedback @scribbles !

It really depends on the poem for me. Some poems have titles that come so naturally while others are harder to come up with than the poems themselves. I have a friend who numbers his poems but also has titles for most of his poems, so if he ever struggles with a title, he substitutes the number until he can…[Read more]

Hey @gracelivingston , nice to “meet” you!

Sounds like you’ve got some cool ideas in the works! I’d love to see them sometime, no matter how complete they are.

The consistency struggle is real. I tend to write a poem every 2-4 weeks on a very inconsistent basis, even though I have an accountability group, though I will say they’ve really helped.…[Read more]

Thanks @kayla-joy ! I’ll be sure to do that.

I like to think that I cover a lot of genres with my poetry. I’ve written somewhat of a mythical or fantasy poem about an old Swedish woman who controls the weather with her mood swings, an everyday life poem about a family going through a divorce through the eyes of a child, and a historical fiction…[Read more]

Hi everyone!

@brandon-miller I’d fall under a mix of #1 and #2. I’m totally excited to be here, but I don’t really know what “here” is for.

Short intro: I write poetry and short stories probably mostly because I don’t have the patience to stick with one idea for the length of time it takes to write a novel, I can’t get enough of C. S. Lewis, T.…[Read more]

@daeus-lamb Wow! Thanks for the detailed feedback! I really appreciate you taking the time to get back to me on this.

1. I agree that “take to” seems kinda flat. I’ll try to find something stronger without bogging down the pace of the poem.
2. The yellow intertube does stand out for being metaphor-less in a section filled with metaphors, doesn’t…

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Thanks @elizabeth ! I think what’s going on here is really cool and I’d love to help out in whatever way I can.

You mentioned that you’re more into fiction. What kinds of projects do you have going on? What kinds of genres do you like to write about?

I may not have the patience or discipline to write a full fledged novel (maybe a novella…[Read more]

Thanks @sam-kowal ! I appreciate any feedback I can get.

What kinds of literary projects do you have going on? Anything I could help with?

Sincerely,

Sir Leeds

Haha alright, just let me know if something comes to mind in the future.

Here’s my latest poem. It’s titled “Adventureland” after an amusement park here in Iowa:

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1FAYPxWyZA4ka4f5pT3PJCGDUAlD_sTHjOIIQn00tf1c/edit?usp=drivesdk

Sincerely,

Sir Leeds

Hi @daeus-lamb!

Nice to “meet” you. And thanks for the offer! What would be the best way to share my writing with you?

Is there anything I could help you out with?

Sincerely,

Sir Leeds