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Thanks for the feedback @scribbles !

It really depends on the poem for me. Some poems have titles that come so naturally while others are harder to come up with than the poems themselves. I have a friend who numbers his poems but also has titles for most of his poems, so if he ever struggles with a title, he substitutes the number until he can find a good title.

1) I had to look it up because I’ve always used “alright” instead of “all right” lol. Hey, you learn something new every day! It seems like “alright” is technically an informal variant of “all right” that’s used more often in dialogue. It’s a small change though, so I’ll definitely consider it.

2) I appreciate the input on “cyclops” vs “giant”, but “cyclops” was a meaningful choice. Maybe I can explain myself and you can decide if you’d still recommend changing it? I chose “cyclops” as a reference to the Odyssey (the one-eyed giant that lives in a cave and gets blinded by Odysseus’ fire), and I think it goes with the children’s floor’s setting and theme. The setting is bright, blinding, and closed in, like the cyclops’ lit up cave and ultimate fate. The theme of the children’s floor is the narrator’s pride and how much bigger and better and smarter he or she is compared to the little people on the children’s floor. So to me, the bad connotation works because I want the narrator’s pride to be seen for what it is. But maybe, to your point, it distances the reader from the narrator.

Thanks again for your honest, constructive criticism! I really appreciate it!