I am having the same problem actually. Really strange…

Okay thank you so much! I will keep this in mind when I go back and edit it  🙂

Thank you again!

@missfaeriekaiti Yay! I am so glad that you have more written 😀 I would absolutely love to beta-read it for you when you need it!

Enjoy your life outside the computer! 😉

I left some feedback on @missfaeriekaiti excerpt 🙂

@missfaeriekaiti Nice work! I really enjoyed reading this excerpt and definitely want to read more. 😀

The descriptions you have of the place where this scene unfolds is great! Just some thoughts to think about – Is is a small or big room (I am going to guess small because of how the action played out?), did the dog/werewolf fight break anything…[Read more]

@happyholly_c Yes, it is a bedroom. (If you want to be specific it’s my writing corner, aka my bedroom 🙂 )

1. Dirty clothes on the floor

2. Unkempt bed

3. Over stuffed drawers

4. Stacks of books

5. Papers in disarray on the bed, shelves, and floor

6. Open laptop

7. Breezy curtains

8. Photos on the walls

9. Scribbled in notebooks

10. Sound waves vibrating through the room.

What place am I describing?

@rolena-hatfield Yay! No problem! 😉

Yes. Just yes, yes, yes. You have no idea how you just tied a really cool plot element together. I might just do it. 😀 *happydance* #spoilers lol.

I was thinking that if that did happen, it would be sooo cool! Especially if you guided the readers to think that something else happened to the note. Haha, I am…[Read more]

Oh my. I totally want to know more! I was so sad when I got to the last page.

At first I was curious about note but after reading about the Light Giving scene, I am more curious about the Dark Father and the Light World with the interesting ceremony/event. And then the note’s relationship to that.

Hmm… I would expect that there would be a…[Read more]

Either sounds good to me! I think they all look good together 🙂

So after thinking about last night, I think have have to change my vote for story #2. Here’s why. It is unique and is definitely intriguing. Like it is not what you would expect of describing the sunset. It is like a shocking factor. It might surprise the readers with its unusual way to describe the sun.

But I am good with whatever you guys…[Read more]

I liked both as well but I also vote #1

Thanks! 😊

@missfaeriekaiti

Thank you so much for doing that! I really appreciate it! We need people like you 😉

Good to know.

It was totally an accident that he found her. In fact, as the novel progresses, you find out that there is a lot more to this prologue story that what I am actually telling. 🙂 There is a fine line with revealing too much and not…[Read more]

Everyone has such great ideas!! What are your guys’ thoughts on describing the multifaceted views of the sunset. We have already said a sunset can make us feel happy, complete, fearful, worrisome, expectant etc… Well what if in our description of sunsets, we acknowledge all of these aspects. Like how it can be interpreted in different ways? Like…[Read more]

The only time I can write with a song with lyrics is if I am listening to Christian worship music like Bethel. Other than that, I usually listen to movie soundtracks (just instrumental) and anime type music. Music helps me write emotion into my scenes. 🙂

Thank you so much guys for giving me feedback!

@missfaeriekaiti

some stylistic issues kept taking me out of the story

Do you mind if I ask exactly what issues drew you out of the story? Since this will be the first thing the readers will read, I want to make sure I keep them in the story. Colton actually finds Brianna on the ground. So they…[Read more]

When I think of sunsets, I think of pinks, oranges, yellows and reds all blending together. The colors are bright and vibrate. Like a warm summer evening. Or a fiery furnace. It is radiating the wonder and majesty of its creator

That’s all I got right now… 😛

Deserted.
Emma gripped her clipboard til her knuckles turned white.  Forcing herself to move, Emma slowly walked around the shop, shoes clicking on the white marble tiles, as she took in the scene; storing the facts to memory.

The sunlight filtered in from the tall windows, illuminating the small specks of chalk dust floating through the air.…[Read more]