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This is the prologue to my WIP that I have been working on for years. I haven’t really shared it with anyone so my question is, does it intrigue you? If it doesn’t, how could I make it have a stronger pull? Can you feel any emotion? Note: You should know that the rest of the novel is set seven years after this event takes place and is from the girl’s perspective.  I would love any advice you guys may have!

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1FzBP2h-UUjF2YAgdtS0t84miBXFBttQOzSyOkNVlrJU/edit