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J.A.Penrose started the topic Characters | Lesson 3 : The Motive in the forum Annual Theme Discussion 7 years, 3 months ago
The motive of your character is important. The motive is what drives your character forward, and makes every scene feel strong and meaningful. The character’s motive is what brings about the theme, and what pushes the plot along. Your plot is driven by your character’s motive. Therefore, the character motive could be the most important f…[Read more]
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Taylor Clogston started the topic Check In – January Week 4 in the forum Parimi Alca Writing Discussions 7 years, 3 months ago
What I read – Emmanuel by Angela R. Watts, some of The Fall of Gondolin by J.R.R. Tolkien, WAR by Sebastian Junger, Homeland: Legend of Drizzt: Dark Elf Trilogy, Book 1 by R.A. Salvatore, some of Haroun and the Sea of Stories by Salman Rushdie
What I wrote – Concept and some paragraphs of a short story I intend to submit to SE, some copywork of T…[Read more]
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J.A.Penrose started the topic Characters | Lesson 2 : The Basics in the forum Annual Theme Discussion 7 years, 3 months ago
I’m planning on treating this topic as a mini way of making sure that we all can get a fair idea of everything about characters from the super easy things, to the hard things that we all struggle with. (If you don’t, then goodness. Please teach me.)
Pretty much, the first thing I wanted to talk about is going back to the very basics of what a…[Read more]
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J.A.Penrose replied to the topic No Lesson this Week, and Some Changes in the forum Announcements 7 years, 3 months ago
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PursueWisdom replied to the topic Check In – January Week 2 in the forum Parimi Alca Writing Discussions 7 years, 3 months ago
Wonderful discussion topic, sir! 🙂 Much thanks – this should help keep me more accountable in terms of my writing/reading.
What I Read: I’m currently reading The Brothers Karamazov and The Fiddler’s Gun by A.S. Peterson. Both are wonderful. I’ve not yet finished with either one yet though.
Also, I’ve been listening to an…[Read more]
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J.A.Penrose started the topic Characters | Lesson 1 : What do You Know? in the forum Annual Theme Discussion 7 years, 3 months ago
Happy new year guys!
To be frankly honest, I was not expecting so much to have changed between this time last year and now. I mean, Story Ember’s didn’t even exist then. But anyways. That’s not what this lesson is about.
Before I get stuck into our new topic, I’d love everyone to tell me what they think about a few things. As you know, I’m…[Read more]
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Taylor Clogston started the topic Check In – January Week 2 in the forum Parimi Alca Writing Discussions 7 years, 3 months ago
What I read – I finished reading Dune, started reading The Confession by John Grisham, Tenemental by Vikki Warner, and American Military History by Wesley K. Clark via The Great Courses. I picked up or was gifted a ton more book (biography, drama, essay, fantasy, magical realism, military scifi) but I doubt I’ll be reading these over the next t…[Read more]
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J.A.Penrose replied to the topic A General Apology in the forum Announcements 7 years, 4 months ago
I totally get not knowing how much time you can commit, and that’s fine. I understand the joys of commuting, and rain my kite, time just vanishes on the road.
Word wars are just seeing how many words you can write in a set amount of time. They work great for some people, but absolutely horribly for others. But…[Read more]
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J.A.Penrose started the topic A General Apology in the forum Announcements 7 years, 4 months ago
Well, you may have gathered this, but us guildmasters are now all seriously thinking about what we can be doing to help improve the guilds, and make them more active. I can clearly see that things have been lagging in Parimi Alca, and how it could actually be becoming more of a burden than it is a help.
If you are struggling with this in this…[Read more]
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Evelyn replied to the topic Parami Check In – December Week 3 in the forum Parimi Alca Writing Discussions 7 years, 4 months ago
@taylorclogston Cool thread! 😀
I have been wanting to read Dune for a while now, but haven’t gotten around to it. 😛 Do you like it so far?
That’s really neat! 🙂
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What I have read
I have read a lot in 2018 – too much to all write out, (and I’m having trouble thinking of them all 😛 ) but included in the list are: Agatha Christie…[Read more]
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PursueWisdom replied to the topic Guild War…6? in the forum Announcements 7 years, 4 months ago
Hi all!!
I’m not sure if you’ve seen this…
BUT WE WERE GIVEN AN HONORABLE MENTION IN THIS WAR!!!
See https://docs.google.com/document/d/1cELNYNDhdM5o1DcXvFwxkTE29p7MnZtcRzRobNuExzY/edit#
I found that Daeus’s feedback was super helpful – so please read it! 🙂
Anyway, thanks especially to ESJohnson (for doing most of the writing) and Darth…[Read more]
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Livi Ryddle posted a new activity comment 7 years, 4 months ago
@evelyn Ah, you’re right! Lol I didn’t think of that soon enough 😀
@obrian-of-the-surface-world Right. I haven’t yet thought up a backstory for the Sprite yet. And yes! It does help 🙂 Thanks!
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Livi Ryddle posted a new activity comment 7 years, 4 months ago
@evelyn True.
@obrian-of-the-surface-world Maybe I should paste in the rest of the story. (Below) Me and my friends took turns adding a sentence or two to the starting sentence to write the first couple pages, down to where he knocks himself out, and then I write the rest. It’s kinda a mess right now, and I’m still working on editing it, but maybe…[Read more]-
I’m sorry, lol. I didn’t realize I made so many typing errors!
” he knocks himself out, and then I WROTE the rest.”
“The wad OF money appeared in…”
I think that’s all the ones, lol. I’m not usually this messy!
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Wow. That is hard to determine where any cues might come from because it shifts too many story threads into random directions. Not sure still if I can get a gender decision on the brief part where the Water Sprite shows up. Do you have a backstory in mind for the Water Sprite? That might give you a better idea of which traits might lend…[Read more]
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J.A.Penrose started the topic Holiday Announcement in the forum Annual Theme Discussion 7 years, 4 months ago
We have been going for twenty-eight weeks now. Can I just say, that is insane. I honestly wasn’t expecting the guilds to take off like they did, but now, I’m definitely sold to it.
But anyways. I just wanted to tell you that there will be no more lessons from me until 2019. (I know. Huge break.) We’ll be looking at characters, and I think th…[Read more]
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ESJohnson replied to the topic Guild War…6? in the forum Announcements 7 years, 4 months ago
Also, I’m thinking what if Aleksander’s Son attacks before he has a chance to march out? That means the spirits lied and he now has to make a choice for or against them. Any thoughts?
(And @coggleton , I was going for that David/Absalom vibe…[Read more]
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Livi Ryddle posted an update 7 years, 4 months ago
So I’ve been working on a story recently, and I was wondering what you guys think of this part…
Cornelius had been walking for a while now and thirst threatened to get the best of him. He stooped beside the stream and cupped some water into his hands to drink.
Dang. This water tastes weird. Not bad, but weird.
Smacking his lips, he started…[Read more]
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Ooh, intriguing! 🙂
Does it seem more female or male? Hmm… It feels like it could go either way… it doesn’t feel like one or the other yet, reading through.
Once you pick one gender though, you probably will want to add a quick description in this clip to signify that. -
Oh ho, this seems good *rubs hands together in anticipation*
My mind automatically thought the sprite was male. I could visualize it being all dramatic: ‘Who DARES to summon /The Great Water Sprite/!?’ etc., etc.
And I agree with @evelyn. Once you decide, some description would be helpful 🙂 -
I don’t think it necessarily seems more male or female. Make it a dude though, I feel like all the sprites I read of in stories are girls =P
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@evelyn True.
@obrian-of-the-surface-world Maybe I should paste in the rest of the story. (Below) Me and my friends took turns adding a sentence or two to the starting sentence to write the first couple pages, down to where he knocks himself out, and then I write the rest. It’s kinda a mess right now, and I’m still working on editing it, but maybe…[Read more]-
I’m sorry, lol. I didn’t realize I made so many typing errors!
” he knocks himself out, and then I WROTE the rest.”
“The wad OF money appeared in…”
I think that’s all the ones, lol. I’m not usually this messy!
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Wow. That is hard to determine where any cues might come from because it shifts too many story threads into random directions. Not sure still if I can get a gender decision on the brief part where the Water Sprite shows up. Do you have a backstory in mind for the Water Sprite? That might give you a better idea of which traits might lend…[Read more]
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@anne_the_noob14 No problem! 🙂
By the way, next time it might be easier to start a thread in the Parimi Alca writing discussion section… it’s easier to read and respond to long messages that way. 🙂-
@evelyn Ah, you’re right! Lol I didn’t think of that soon enough 😀
@obrian-of-the-surface-world Right. I haven’t yet thought up a backstory for the Sprite yet. And yes! It does help 🙂 Thanks!
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@anne_the_noob14 I think that this seemed more like a girl. If you want it to be more masculine, though, maybe mention a deep/male voice or something? (I’m sorry it’s taken me forever to see this 😛 I got super behind on emails!)
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*thumbs up* It’s ok, lol. Holidays are always busy for everybody 😛
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anne_the_noob14 replied to the topic Guild War…6? in the forum Announcements 7 years, 4 months ago
@obrian-of-the-surface-world You made some very good points (if you’ll excuse the slight pun :D) with your arrow analogy. *thumbs up*
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J.A.Penrose replied to the topic You Have Arrived at Parimi Alca! in the forum Announcements 7 years, 4 months ago
Just dropping in to say, welcome to our new Parimi!
Everyone make sure we give a stellar welcome to our newest…[Read more]
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PursueWisdom replied to the topic Guild War…6? in the forum Announcements 7 years, 4 months ago
Hi all! I just wanted to take a second here to remind all of us Parimians to review/comment/edit/whatnot on our guild’s draft that the very talented ESJohnson and Darth Pen worked on. 🙂 I see a few of us have already commented which is wonderful; if you haven’t, please look it over so we can make it the BEST!! 😉 (In other words, we need you.…[Read more]
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anne_the_noob14 replied to the topic You Have Arrived at Parimi Alca! in the forum Announcements 7 years, 4 months ago
@obrian-of-the-surface-world Thank you! I love the movie!
“Some of the best people I know were and are homeschooled. One of them is a CEO and founder of a Marketing Firm in Dallas. Many millionaires and entrepreneurs in your group as well.” 😀 😀 Coolness!
@evelyn 😀
Ah, ok. I need to read them sometime. It seems as…[Read more]
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