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Eitan started the topic Translated poem in the forum Poets 5 years, 11 months ago
I wrote this pretty long poem today while praying, and I felt like God is speaking through me (please don’t get me wrong, by no means claim my poem to be holy!). The original Hebrew poem was of course much better than the translation, with meter and rhyme. Anyway, I do think that God wants me to share it with others. If I encouraged even one of…[Read more]
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Livi Ryddle replied to the topic Does anyone want to read this slightly depressing poem? in the forum Poets 5 years, 11 months ago
(Wow, I’m late to this thread…) This poem pretty muchly sums up how I’ve been feeling lately.
As everyone else has said, I have no negative critique. And I totally understand the “not 100% comfortable to share personal poems”… But I’m happy you felt strong enough to share it 🙂
Um… other than those couple thoughts, I don’t…[Read more]
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Livi Ryddle replied to the topic A Poem, I Guess in the forum Poets 5 years, 11 months ago
Oooh, I really like this! Very nice! 😀 I don’t consider myself to be an expert on critiquing poems, but I see nothing amiss. (And I like the syntax as well 😛 ) Full of emotion and… *makes vague gestures at nothing in particular*… stuff. *nods*
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Eitan replied to the topic A Poem, I Guess in the forum Poets 5 years, 11 months ago
My English isn’t good enough to actually understand the poem, but I really loved the meter and rhyming!
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The Inkspiller started the topic A Poem, I Guess in the forum Poets 6 years ago
I don’t write poetry all that frequently, and I’ll be honest it’s a medium that I struggle to read and understand / appreciate, let alone write competently in. Yet it seems like God has a tendency of speaking through that medium during the darkening nights – of which the last four have felt like some of the longest.
Anyways, out of that long dark…[Read more]
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The Inkspiller joined the group Poets 6 years ago
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Very nice! I didn’t follow all of your thoughts in this, but I got the main idea. This line is very nice: “His death atones, His rising redeems!” I also love the whole last stanza. Indeed, He shall never let us go. Beautiful truth.
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Gra Sar posted an update in the group Poets 6 years ago
Does anyone have any suggestions on writing haikus? I have always hated writing them but it is a great practice of micropoetry.
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Ooh! Um, yes. (Haikus are my favorite poems to write besides free-verse.) Don’t get caught up in the “I ONLY HAVE FIVE SYLLABLES TO USE FOR THIS LINE” mess 😛 If a word you’re trying to use doesn’t work because it’s too long, open your mind to different words that you could use to convey the same thing, even if they might not be the “conventional”…[Read more]
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Thank you! I like playing with words so it worked out haha
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Livi Ryddle replied to the topic Writing free verse poems in the forum Poets 6 years ago
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Eitan replied to the topic Writing free verse poems in the forum Poets 6 years ago
Very nice poem! I like it.
I do not write poems that much, but I’m studying now Biblical literature (which’s always free-verse), and it’s main uniqueness is in it’s use of parallelism between lines – it allows you to hide meanings in the lines without directly say them. Parallelism works best in free-verse, because you aren’t limited in your…[Read more]
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Eitan joined the group Poets 6 years ago
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Evelyn replied to the topic Writing free verse poems in the forum Poets 6 years ago
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Livi Ryddle replied to the topic Writing free verse poems in the forum Poets 6 years ago
@emma-starr Thanks! I had a ridiculously fun time writing it XD
*nods thoughtfully* Aah, I see! Yeah, that’s all helpful! I’ll see if I can work some poetic wording and sounds in 😀 Thank you!!
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Emma Starr replied to the topic Writing free verse poems in the forum Poets 6 years ago
@anne_the_noob14 Such a fun poem!! I liked the banter. ;P
For tips….free verse is, well, free. I used to think that meant that you wouldn’t use any poetry techniques in free verse, but now I realize that free verse really opens up my writing to use the full variety of tools.
I use free verse as an opportunity to ruthlessly cut out any…[Read more]
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Emma Starr replied to the topic Does anyone want to read this slightly depressing poem? in the forum Poets 6 years ago
@urwen-starial Thank you so much for being strong enough to be vulnerable and share this. I think all poets have a poem that in some way reflects the theme of this one. It’s raw, and you understand exactly what is going on in your mind. I really respect that. 🙂 It’s also great poetry, so I think this is a powerful poem–not necessarily…[Read more]
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Emma Huckabee (Emma Starr) joined the group Poets 6 years ago
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Gra Sar joined the group Poets 6 years ago
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Caseybold replied to the topic Does anyone want to read this slightly depressing poem? in the forum Poets 6 years ago
@urwen-starial Thanks for sharing this! It puts into words what I, and I’m sure a lot of other people going through COVID-19-related social distancing, am/are feeling right now too. The emotions expressed here are raw and real, and help me see that I’m not alone.
The meter could be tighter, if you’re looking to improve on it. I loved the imagery!…[Read more]
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Naiya Dyani replied to the topic Does anyone want to read this slightly depressing poem? in the forum Poets 6 years ago
@urwen-starial OKAY, get over here, it’s hug time! *cri*
I totally feel you. It’s kind of scary to put such sensitive pieces of yourself out there, but it feels so good to finally share it. We’re all here for you. I’ll be praying for you. <3 You know you can always talk to me when you’re having a hard time.
Kedori gives hugs, too.
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Dakota replied to the topic Does anyone want to read this slightly depressing poem? in the forum Poets 6 years ago
@emberynus-the-dragonslayer Thanks for tagging me! That post wasn’t boring. 🙂
@urwen-starial I don’t think I have any negative critique either. Great job!! 🙂 *hug*
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Emberynus The Dragonslayer replied to the topic Does anyone want to read this slightly depressing poem? in the forum Poets 6 years ago
You might want to read this. Being a poet and all 😉
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