Story_Guardian

Tullian

For a moment he couldn’t see anything. Then, gradually, his eyes cleared. He was standing in a library. Or, it ought to have been a library. But it was very small and dusty compared to the ones he was used to.

There weren’t libraries in Cuth, where my parents still live.

He wished he had more spare coins to send them. He shook himself,…[Read more]

@inkhorn

XD The fourth wall is made to be broken! I wonder how the term “fourth wall” came around.

Oohhh, I actually know this! It comes from plays. Whenever characters were in a room, it was open on one side so the audience could see them. However, the characters only “see” the fourth wall of the room, which separates the audience from the cha…[Read more]

@rose-colored-fancy @obrian-of-the-surface-world

Thank you for the great advice! It definitely helped. The most common themes and words I have noticed so far are dawn, knights, hope, and champions.

A few ideas I thought of so far: The Rising of Valor, The Fight for Hope, From Desolation to Hope, The Call for the Valiant, The Valiant Few, and The…[Read more]

Tullian

Age 24ish

of medium build

Brown hair and olive eyes.

His gift is that of an Empath, which means that he can feel others’ emotions. He’s still in training, so he hasn’t quite mastered it yet. (He’s still confused about what emotions he feels, and it’s hard for him to keep from being overwhelmed, b/c people are feeling things all the…[Read more]

No, not too critical. Thank you for your considerate reply! I think your story themes sounds great! It reminds me a lot of Pilgrim’s Progress. The parallels are very easy to see, and it sounds like a really interesting story.

@jared-williams

Hey Jared!

Its an interesting idea, and the skeleton of the story is great. I think something you would need to ponder, however, is the biblical themes you portray. Now I know no novel, written by a Christian or not, is imperfect, but it would do Christian authors well to portray biblical truth as best they can.

Now maybe you…[Read more]

@obrian-of-the-surface-world

XD Though I wouldn’t be surprised if Ophelia has a cat in her bag…@rose-colored-fancy?

Hehe. Nice question.

My high fantasy has a lot of normal creatures you’d find here on earth, but also plenty of new fantasy creatures. The legendary ones are called the creatures of Myf, and they are pretty spectacular. I’ve only created a few of them so far, however.

Saliero (name derived from the latin word for frog – Salientia) – also known…[Read more]

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I, the Psalter

Rolling peaks in the bleak void,

Dizzying repetition of the mind it toyed.

In soaking misery of the waters endless rush,

The heart heaves a futile hope lost in the hush.

Eternal feelings envelop the waters falling,

Lost to the vastness of the failed…[Read more]

Hope this works.

Moniker: @Jared-Williams

Words (1,215) Minutes (6:54)

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1sQJgI8KhJ0KuWNCBAzLKGj5Pga_SzcCa/view?usp=sharing

“It smells good.”

I turned in surprise. Hanniumm was on his feet, leaning up against one of the chairs.

I dropped the stirring stick and rushed to his side. “Hanniumm! How are y…[Read more]

“I hear snakes don’t like cats.  Does somebody have a cat we could toss down there and…” [looks around at all of the glares and frowns] “What? Okay…okay! Just brainstorming here. I’ll see myself out.” 😉

@jared-williams

Hi Jared,

I totally agree. I am a writer-in-progress with much need of help from fellow authors and readers.
This is my second pass through the “editing” of my WIP, and I’ve taken to doing dramatic recordings of it with atmospheric background and music.  I think it helps me visualize not just what is going on in the foreground,…[Read more]

@inkhorn

No worries, the Castle has a great personality xD I don’t think it needs to do anything to Erik to be entertained by him, so I will leave him to his own devices until an opportunity for interaction arises xD