Grace

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I am so happy with it! It’s much stronger, and still very true to the feel you were going for before. I love it!

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Beautifully written, Grace! 🙂 The characters are very moving, and I liked how you protrayed Death as a friend to the good. It was well done.

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It’s really good! Thank you for drafting it 🙂

I did get a little lost deciphering your feelings from Alira’s, and placing who was saying what. But overall, it had a great feel to it!

@literatureforthelight Grace I love it! It has a great aura about it and the 2nd person is seamless. Props to you because 2nd person is something I cannot write to save my life. 😛

I added in a few suggestions, mostly word-choice, show-don’t-tell stuff, and I did have a little bit of a hard time figuring out what was going on at the beginning (I…[Read more]

@literatureforthelight Yeah, I can lead up a quick editing initiative.

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Please draft it! I think you really have something! My only question is, why two men? Why not just one? It could leave it open for a “reunion” between the guide woman and the soldier.

@literatureforthelight Sorry I’ve been inactive. I was out of the house.

That’s neat! I grasp 90% of it. 😛 Are you wanting to draft this one then?

@literatureforthelight That’s a great premise! There would have to be some sort of conflict leading to a conclusion, but if you can think of one I’m on board.

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True! I didn’t think about it like that. I really like your idea about the reader being Death looking for people to take away. Very intriguing!

@literatureforthelight maybe sorta like one of the riddles where you have to figure out ‘who am I?’… Just an idea.

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Now you understand the struggle I go through for this one friend/beta reader. Yes, I go through a lot of paper for someone that doesn’t actually own a printer. 🙂

I’m glad to hear you’ve been encouraged in the details of your plot. 🙂 What was that one change?

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Thanks for posting this, it encourages me to keep up the struggle. 🙂

I’m definitely one of those that has been dormant on the forum recently, I’m not even sure where all my time has been going recently. Probably into things around the apartment, apparently those can be a lot of upkeep. I’ve been meaning to get some…[Read more]

@germaine-han Yay exams! 😀 *sarcasm sarcasm* I hope you have time for editing soon! I hate that feeling of wanting to write but having other responsibilities. It’s rather annoying.

@literatureforthelight Hi! I don’t know if we’ve officially met yet (unless I have short term memory loss) XD. I’m Gabrielle, at your service. *bows*