Ava Murbarger

@inkhorn

Cool idea! It’ll be fun to see them face off a dragon! (I’m guessing that most of the characters aren’t going to just leave the captive alone) I have an idea that I think would be fun to add to this situation. What if to each character the captive was someone they hated or are scared of?

Oh man YESS!!! That’s so brilliant! I want to see i…[Read more]

Pia smirked and said nothing more. Kallun rolled his eyes at her.

The younger girl’s brows furrowed. “I’m sorry. I will help if a can.”

@rose-colored-fancy

No need to apologize. Life can get really busy at times.

@rusted-knight

@everyone

Cool idea! It’ll be fun to see them face off a dragon! (I’m guessing that most of the characters aren’t going to just leave the captive alone) I have an idea that I think would be fun to add to this situation. What if to each character the c…[Read more]

@rusted-knight

All right folks, here’s the scenario. They are basically in the Lonely Mountain. At the end of the passage in the great hall and of course a sleeping dragon. That catch is, there is a captive there too. Freeing said captive will wake the dragon. So what do they do.

Ooohhh, that’s brilliant! I love it! I’ve been trying to think of s…[Read more]

Klein stood. He just couldn’t seem to start or join a conversation. He got along fine with his squad and a few officers. Few others really talked much outside of the usual debrief questions. Maybe it had something to do with how boot camp was?  Before Klein could continue the thought, the ground under his foot cracked loudly. Springing toward…[Read more]

She nodded, “One more on our side is always helpful.”

“We don’t know who he is or where he came from. He’s been destroying different kingdoms and killing people. We were having a party at the castle- Ellie’s a princess you know- when he just came in with a bunch of his… soldiers, I guess, they were all dressed in black, kind of shadowy looking.…[Read more]

Pia nodded. “My brother is on our side yes.” She glanced at Eliana. “I think he’d like you…”

K’Nika shook her head. “I do not.”

(hey sorry, my internet was all “nope” for a few days)

Everyone started going forward but continued talking. “Weinik? Is he on our side then?”

“soo… K’Nika, do you know anything about this wizard dude?” Julian asked scratching the back of his head

Okayyy, so SE is being funky.

I shall try to answer succinctly in case that is the problem.

@rose-colored-fancy

Thank you so much!! AND THE MEME IS JUST SO- 😂

@calidris

Thank you! He’s not all lines and edges, but he’s not a teddybear — I’m glad it got through like that. (:

Yes, that is Yulenna! The scene is their very first meeting. 😆

Oh…[Read more]

Um, no I don’t think so. Here’s a link: https://sistersthree3.wixsite.com/writers-vision It’s a pretty small site, but worth the time. 🙂

Is it vision writers international?

@joelle-stone

that’s sounds awesome! I’ll have to check it out!

@crazywriter,

Hehe, no problem!! If you want a more consistent group of critics, you should check out Writer’s Vision – it’s free, run by peeps I know, and is just a group of young writers helping each other out. 🙂

It’s not letting me post what I want to … *furrows brow*

@joelle-stone

thanks so much. This a really helpful, especially the format. I really appreciate the time you take to help me. I know you’re busy so I really am grateful.

@crazywriter,

The war council was nothing as exciting or nerve-wracking as Abner had expected. Mostly, it was bureaucrats arguing about the levying of taxes, the raising of militia, none of which concerned Abner. Hm, you might want to draw this out a bit. With all the sweating beforehand, you had the perfect set-up for a healthy dose of…[Read more]

@mamaauthoress I can see you!

Uhm … something keeps blocking me when I try to post … maybe if this gets through, I’ll try to write a response.

The user name is my pen name.

I have no idea what the plan is since I just got here, but I’m fine to do anything really.

@crazywriter,

TWO SNOW DAYS?!?! Lucky. XD Most days the high over here has been in the 30 degree range, with no snow and freezing winds. #desertwinter XD