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@jared-williams

No offense taken! This article sums up what I believe of how we should use hard topics such as sex/rape in our stories as God would have us do. God gives us perfect examples in the Bible such as your example of Lot and his two daughters. God was simplistic with the details but clear enough to figure out what happened without…[Read more]

@jared-williams,

AWESOME!! Lemme know when you start looking, and I’ll see if I can clear something out for you. 😀 Life has been hectic, so I can’t promise that I’ll be able to read for you, but I’d love to if I get the chance. 🙂

something else that may be worth mentioning is that there is a very big difference between descriptive and prescriptive.

I think a lot of the history in the Old Testament is a good example. Many, many stories in the Bible are descriptive – what happened, not prescriptive – what is good. And we can confuse the two very easily. For instance, the…[Read more]

@jared-williams

Thanks! I am glad it made sense. Though I did not explain it thoroughly as I should have.

Thank you for this idea! I will need to play it out and tweak it.  It would like make it more understandable to the reader if they saw the outcome and is able to pinpoint how it happened with kragvora…[Read more]

Oh, it’s a far cry from a zombie. I was just using it as an example.

I can understand Brian’s aversion to zombies, and I won’t push the point, but your creature doesn’t sound like reanimation or bringing the dead back to life, but nano-technology taking over a person, which could easily change a person’s personality, the way they think, and…[Read more]

@rose-colored-fancy

Have fun torturing your characters! XD

I will, don’t worry!  This is only the backstory…

Hi Jared (@jared-williams),

Yeah, I get it.  But the idea that anything but God can give life is where I diverge.  I have always hated zombie stories because it seems to imply a life after death that is wholly given credit to “devils”.  The only thing I might could concede is animated dead flesh with another entity in possession of the body.  But…[Read more]

@obrian-of-the-surface-world

Yes, I have 10 other races of good humanoids and 5 bad races. That does not include the countless hybrids of humanoids. lol  You have good points that I have personally wrestled with on a realistic level comparing animals and how venom works.

@jared-williams

Your idea is mostly correct, though I was hoping to avoid…[Read more]

@skylarynn

Nice to see you again!

Thank you so much, that answers all my questions.  I was aware that longswords are actually pretty light but it slipped my mind… 🙃.  So my boy will have bad bruising, a nasty cut, and lots of stitches.  Got it.

Glad I could help! 😀 Have fun torturing your characters! XD

@joelle-stone

wasn’t sure who else to call out to, but I remembered you did ask to be updated if I posted another section… This one isn’t too emotional, like the last one, but hopefully a bit of fun…

@obrian-of-the-surface-world, I took @storysmith ‘s venom scenario differently

A few drops = paralysis and infection leading to slow death

Small doses = death

Medium doses = death and reanimation into feral, mindless creatures – but not Kragvora.

Large doses = death and reanimation into a full-blown Kragvora.

I’ve seen zombie movies do this…[Read more]

@storysmith

sounds reasonable to me, and adds flavor and options to your writing style.

Hi Joshua (@storysmith),

Are the other characters (non-Kragvora) human?  I would think the lethality of the venom would increase with the dosage.  If a small dosage is lethal, then the victim would be dead before the venom had a chance to permeate its circulatory system or infect tissues.  There are a variety of factors as far as effects that wo…[Read more]

@obrian-of-the-surface-world @jared-williams

I have thought a little more into the Kragvora’s venomous abilities as they can turn someone into them with their venom. What would a small or medium-dose do to a person? I then came up with a full dose can change someone into them but a medium dose can turn someone into a mad and hungry feral humanoid…[Read more]

@emma-walker I was kind of thinking of switching between characters, depending on where Samantha goes.

It would start with her on a beach, a large city behind her with towering sky scrapers near its center.
I’m a bit busy at the moment, so I’m not sure how quickly I’ll be able to respond, but I will when I can.

Thank you. It’s actually a big part of his character. He regularly puts himself in danger in my stories to protect those he cares about, regardless of the danger to himself. In fact, my first story with Abirami ends with him taking very dangerous essence-boosting pills just to help his family escape the enemy, which puts him in a coma (which is…[Read more]

@joelle-stone

Aw, thank you! Will do

I am actually near the end of this novel. Just one more scene, then the final battle. (and any wrap up after it…) so I may be asking for beta readers soon…

Oh, who’s your chara btw lol 😂

@ajstoryteller Where do we begin?