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J.A.Penrose started the topic Holiday Announcement in the forum Annual Theme Discussion 7 years, 5 months ago
We have been going for twenty-eight weeks now. Can I just say, that is insane. I honestly wasn’t expecting the guilds to take off like they did, but now, I’m definitely sold to it.
But anyways. I just wanted to tell you that there will be no more lessons from me until 2019. (I know. Huge break.) We’ll be looking at characters, and I think th…[Read more]
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ESJohnson replied to the topic Guild War…6? in the forum Announcements 7 years, 6 months ago
Also, I’m thinking what if Aleksander’s Son attacks before he has a chance to march out? That means the spirits lied and he now has to make a choice for or against them. Any thoughts?
(And @coggleton , I was going for that David/Absalom vibe…[Read more]
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Livi Ryddle posted an update 7 years, 6 months ago
So I’ve been working on a story recently, and I was wondering what you guys think of this part…
Cornelius had been walking for a while now and thirst threatened to get the best of him. He stooped beside the stream and cupped some water into his hands to drink.
Dang. This water tastes weird. Not bad, but weird.
Smacking his lips, he started…[Read more]
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Ooh, intriguing! 🙂
Does it seem more female or male? Hmm… It feels like it could go either way… it doesn’t feel like one or the other yet, reading through.
Once you pick one gender though, you probably will want to add a quick description in this clip to signify that. -
Oh ho, this seems good *rubs hands together in anticipation*
My mind automatically thought the sprite was male. I could visualize it being all dramatic: ‘Who DARES to summon /The Great Water Sprite/!?’ etc., etc.
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I don’t think it necessarily seems more male or female. Make it a dude though, I feel like all the sprites I read of in stories are girls =P
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@evelyn True.
@obrian-of-the-surface-world Maybe I should paste in the rest of the story. (Below) Me and my friends took turns adding a sentence or two to the starting sentence to write the first couple pages, down to where he knocks himself out, and then I write the rest. It’s kinda a mess right now, and I’m still working on editing it, but maybe…[Read more]-
I’m sorry, lol. I didn’t realize I made so many typing errors!
” he knocks himself out, and then I WROTE the rest.”
“The wad OF money appeared in…”
I think that’s all the ones, lol. I’m not usually this messy!
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Wow. That is hard to determine where any cues might come from because it shifts too many story threads into random directions. Not sure still if I can get a gender decision on the brief part where the Water Sprite shows up. Do you have a backstory in mind for the Water Sprite? That might give you a better idea of which traits might lend…[Read more]
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@anne_the_noob14 No problem! 🙂
By the way, next time it might be easier to start a thread in the Parimi Alca writing discussion section… it’s easier to read and respond to long messages that way. 🙂-
@evelyn Ah, you’re right! Lol I didn’t think of that soon enough 😀
@obrian-of-the-surface-world Right. I haven’t yet thought up a backstory for the Sprite yet. And yes! It does help 🙂 Thanks!
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@anne_the_noob14 I think that this seemed more like a girl. If you want it to be more masculine, though, maybe mention a deep/male voice or something? (I’m sorry it’s taken me forever to see this 😛 I got super behind on emails!)
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*thumbs up* It’s ok, lol. Holidays are always busy for everybody 😛
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Evelyn replied to the topic NaNoWriMo 2018 in the forum Parimi Alca Writing Discussions 7 years, 6 months ago
@julia I’ve never done Camp NaNo, but sounds awesome and I hope to do it 2019! 🙂
Sounds kinda similar to what my NaNoWriMo experience turned out to be though. I had three writing friends who were doing it was well so every day we’d text to check on each other and race and freak out together. xD
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J.A.Penrose replied to the topic You Have Arrived at Parimi Alca! in the forum Announcements 7 years, 6 months ago
Just dropping in to say, welcome to our new Parimi!
Everyone make sure we give a stellar welcome to our newest…[Read more]
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PursueWisdom replied to the topic Guild War…6? in the forum Announcements 7 years, 6 months ago
Hi all! I just wanted to take a second here to remind all of us Parimians to review/comment/edit/whatnot on our guild’s draft that the very talented ESJohnson and Darth Pen worked on. 🙂 I see a few of us have already commented which is wonderful; if you haven’t, please look it over so we can make it the BEST!! 😉 (In other words, we need you.…[Read more]
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J.A.Penrose started the topic Lesson 27 : Raving About Pacing in the forum Annual Theme Discussion 7 years, 6 months ago
Hopefully by now, (sorry newbies) you have got a fair grip on Pacing and Suspense.
Today, you have a super easy task. Name one text, (try to use one that you haven’t before in these lessons) and show how it used pacing and suspense well. Try to be spoiler sensitive!
To help clarify, a text can be a book, poem, movie, song, play, video game,…[Read more]
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ESJohnson replied to the topic Guild War…6? in the forum Announcements 7 years, 6 months ago
Okay, everyone, how about this? The first few paragraphs are coming together!
(And @silverclaw-bonnetfolly , I may be able to incorporate some of your ideas! WHEEE! 😊😊😊)
Father had always told him that there were only two things in this world–light and darkness.
When he dreamed he saw neither.He saw blood and skin and bones, porcelain s…
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Cassie Hartfinh replied to the topic Guild War…6? in the forum Announcements 7 years, 6 months ago
*rushes in from faraway land of Tennessee*
The downside to traveling is I enter the guild war late in the game.
Anyways, guys, I am seeing some STELLAR ideas here!! And now, for MY ideas.
The past three nights, I have dreamed of three things: the first night, somebody said to me “…if you are the New Mercy…”. The second, I was crushing…[Read more]
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J.A.Penrose replied to the topic Lesson 26 : Compare and Contrast in the forum Annual Theme Discussion 7 years, 6 months ago
@julia Nice! I love how you’ve used a lot more emotive language in the second one. That really does help build the tension and make the reader want the protagonist to win.
My main point would be to try and show a bit more fear, and the fatigue. Describe little details to make it clear that he can’t win, and that could cost him his life.
But…[Read more]
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J.A.Penrose replied to the topic Guild War…6? in the forum Announcements 7 years, 6 months ago
@e-jo3 Sweet! Can you give a basic rundown of the concepts in Inception?
@julia Yes! That is so cool. I love all of K.M.Weiland’s things. So much. When I’m in doubt, that tends to be where I go. *nods* I approve.
@steward-of-the-pen Some great starting ideas! (And Daeus is judging this one.)
@calebonline First of all, welcome to Parimi Alca! I…[Read more]
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Evelyn replied to the topic NaNoWriMo 2018 in the forum Parimi Alca Writing Discussions 7 years, 6 months ago
Thanks! You too.
Here’s a question for everyone… would you do it again? If so, what would you change?
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anne_the_noob14 replied to the topic Lesson 26 : Compare and Contrast in the forum Annual Theme Discussion 7 years, 6 months ago
@julia @sarah-vdh Woah! Y’all’s were good! (@j-a-penrose Yours was good also!!) I’ll try my hand at this as well as soon as I get a little time. But @sarah-vdh, I must correct your grammar… When you say “As if it were to blame for the lack of young pirate beyond it’s wooden frame.”… Wrong kind of “it’s.” “It’s” is a contraction of “it is”, w…[Read more]
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PursueWisdom replied to the topic Guild War…6? in the forum Announcements 7 years, 6 months ago
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Evelyn replied to the topic Guild War…6? in the forum Announcements 7 years, 6 months ago
Wow, this is cool!
@julia Thanks for the post! I’ll go and read that. 🙂
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J.A.Penrose replied to the topic You Have Arrived at Parimi Alca! in the forum Announcements 7 years, 6 months ago
A very special welcome to @anne_the_noob14! *cheers* (sorry, I couldn’t find your tag anywhere!)
Here is our mysterious sixth guilding everyone! Make her feel…[Read more]
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J.A.Penrose started the topic Guild War…6? in the forum Announcements 7 years, 6 months ago
Parimis to attention!
I know we haven’t gotten the results back from our NaNo word war yet, but the Prompt War of December has arrived!
Now, some of your are new to this, and that is okay! It’s fairly simple, and you’ll soon work it out.
1. We brainstorm our ideas regarding the prompt through this thread. Here is where we will discuss…[Read more]
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Sarah vdH replied to the topic Lesson 26 : Compare and Contrast in the forum Annual Theme Discussion 7 years, 6 months ago
@julia, I thought it was great! I’d like to read some more of this story 🙂
Ok, here’s mine.Not so good one
Aiden stared at Anne’s cabin across from him. He glared at the door in frustration. Already he felt fear for the coming loss of the little pirate girl who had gone to stay with her family.
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J.A.Penrose started the topic Lesson 26 : Compare and Contrast in the forum Annual Theme Discussion 7 years, 6 months ago
Again, this is a recap lesson to help you keep on improving your skills in Pacing and Suspense!
The goal today is to write a really slow, suspenseless snippet, then one that is full of suspense. BONUS POINTS if they are the same scene. Not that there are points, but that will help give you the right idea.
As always, keep it fairly short. I’m…[Read more]
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J.A.Penrose replied to the topic Lesson 20 : Pacing to the Paragraph in the forum Annual Theme Discussion 7 years, 6 months ago
@julia Nice! I really love how you’ve done this one.
Main tip would be to add some variation. Have some longer paragraphs tossed in there as well to make it more dramatic when we get the short, choppy ones.
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