J.A.Penrose

@anne_the_noob14 As long as criticism is constructive, it is accepted here! (Also, you may well like this little thread here.)

Feel free to do any of the lessons whenever. I’m trying to get back on top of things at the moment, and seem to be getting there, so I’ll be giving feedback more regularly.

@sarah-vdh Oooh, interesting. I kinda want to know more about this one…

Really well done with the dialogue. Have sentences that you know the ending of is really cool, because it shows that they’ve been dwelling on it. That it hurts. And the “blaming” inanimate objects is also lots of fun. Very real too.

Tip for this bit would be to work on…[Read more]

@julia Nice! I love how you’ve used a lot more emotive language in the second one. That really does help build the tension and make the reader want the protagonist to win.

My main point would be to try and show a bit more fear, and the fatigue. Describe little details to make it clear that he can’t win, and that could cost him his life.

But…[Read more]

Also, we generally do some brainstorming and discussing before writing anything on the doc. But could be stellar if you shared some of the ideas you were going with from what you put up there anyway? @obrian-of-the-surface-world

@e-jo3 Sweet! Can you give a basic rundown of the concepts in Inception?

@julia Yes! That is so cool. I love all of K.M.Weiland’s things. So much. When I’m in doubt, that tends to be where I go. *nods* I approve.

@steward-of-the-pen Some great starting ideas! (And Daeus is judging this one.)

@calebonline First of all, welcome to Parimi Alca! I…[Read more]

@anne_the_noob14 Just give me a heads up if life gets super chaotic for a bit and I can make sure we don’t remove you! *fingerguns*

@taylorclogston @obrian-of-the-surface-world Oh dear…people are starting to guess at ages. *nervous laughter* Nothing shall be confirmed from me.

And goodness. There’s an uprising of homeschoolers. I’m not sure…[Read more]

Eyyy, you’re back @e-jo3! Welcome!

A very special welcome to @anne_the_noob14! *cheers* (sorry, I couldn’t find your tag anywhere!)

Here is our mysterious sixth guilding everyone! Make her feel…[Read more]

@write-owl Stellar! It’s our goal to make you comfortable.

(And I approve of your book choice. I happen to be an elf who speaks Quenya, and our guild name happens to be in Quenya, soooo…)

@steward-of-the-pen *replies late* Ooooh, nice!

Ah yes. The emblems stay. They were all made by someone else to keep them kinda uniform. *nodnod*

Really well done! I love the sound of it a lot. You should read the Song Keeper Chronicles by Gillian Bronte-Adams. (I feel like I’ve told you this…)

@jade That’s so cool! I really love how you can tell he’s jotting it down as he goes. I can almost imagine he’s running while writing it, desperately hoping it won’t be needed. Really well done!

I’m kinda curious now. Are you writing the whole book in journal form? Because that’s the most realistic journal-story I have ever seen. *nods* Impressive!

@julia Nice! I really love how you’ve done this one.

Main tip would be to add some variation. Have some longer paragraphs tossed in there as well to make it more dramatic when we get the short, choppy ones.

@ariella-newheart Happy to be helpful!

Alll the Wingfeather Saganess. <333

@coggleton Sweet! That works well then. *nodnod*

Great to meet you @pursuewisdom!

Looks like you were put in the guild for a reason! Most of us here write speculative fiction, so we certainly have some common ground.

Also, timezones are not an issue. 😀 I am an Aussie, so we are kinda used to just operating by whatever time people go by.

@obrian-of-the-surface-world Amen. *nods* You have…[Read more]

Okay guys! GOOD JOB EVERYONE!

Please hand your TOTAL WORD COUNTS IN.

I managed 81073 all up.

You guys all did SO well and I am SO proud of you!

@cassie-hartfinh
@esjohnson
@coggleton
@julia
@silverclaw-bonnetfolly
@evelyn
@ariella-newheart
@sarah-vdh
@steward-of-the-pen
@e-jo3
@writercatherine
@thewanderingtypewriter
@jade
@taylorclogston

(NOTE: I am yet to find the right tag for ‘Anne’)

PARIMI ALCA. IT IS TIME TO INTRODUCE NEW GUILDLINGS!

@calebonline
@write-owl
@obrian-of-the-surface-world
@pursuewisdom
@azeline-d
@anne

Welcome you guys to Parimi Alca and I really hope you find it absolutely stellar! I’m sure we’re all desperate to meet you and get to know you, so introduce yourselves! Go mad!

Guys, make our newest…[Read more]