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Beth Darlene replied to the topic Ninjanaria Chapter Three: Ninjanaria 😉 in the forum Fantasy Writers 5 years, 9 months ago
@kristianne-hassman Yeah okay good idea!
It’s my friend’s name lol! I have all my friends except one in there!
@eitan Oh just really saw your profile pic!! Awesome!
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Beth Darlene replied to the topic Ninjanaria Chapter Three: Ninjanaria 😉 in the forum Fantasy Writers 5 years, 9 months ago
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Kimmi replied to the topic Coronavirus drawings! in the forum Art Critique 5 years, 9 months ago
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Gracie started the topic Chena’s Story Chpt. 3 in the forum Historical Fiction Writers 5 years, 9 months ago
a time to kill, and a time to heal; a time to break down, and a time to build up
III
Eight years later…
Caesar Augustas declared a census that stated everyone had to return to the land of their ancestors to be counted with 12 Roman months to do so. Bethlehem was never particularly bustling with people traveling for the c…[Read more]
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Beth replied to the topic Ninjanaria chapter one in the forum Fantasy Writers 5 years, 9 months ago
Awesome!
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Beth replied to the topic Ninjanaria chapter one in the forum Fantasy Writers 5 years, 9 months ago
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Beth replied to the topic Ninjanaria chapter one in the forum Fantasy Writers 5 years, 9 months ago
I also revised chapter two. You could read that one. But don’t feel pressured! 🙂
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Gracie replied to the topic Chean’s Story Chpt. 2 in the forum Historical Fiction Writers 5 years, 9 months ago
No, you’re good!
I’m so sorry about the POV! I tried to put a break whenever it switched, and got rid of a lot of thoughts several people had… Do you think I should just leave out Rachel’s part or something?
Hebrew words,.. I changed all Eloha to G-d.
I like the idea of the nick-name. I will have to think of one. I am embarrassed, (to…[Read more]
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Beth replied to the topic Ninjanaria chapter one in the forum Fantasy Writers 5 years, 9 months ago
Awesome! Thank you!
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Gracie started the topic Chean’s Story Chpt. 2 in the forum Historical Fiction Writers 5 years, 10 months ago
a time to be born, and a time to die; a time to plant, and a time to pluck up that which is planted
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Joab ben Elizer, of the tribe of Judah owned a large, one roomed home with a wide guests’ courtyard in Bethlehem. It was a small, though not unimportant town, two miles from Chena’s home. Joab had a wife, named Rachel, and one…[Read more]
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Emberynus The Dragonslayer replied to the topic Hello from Israel! in the forum Introduce Yourself 5 years, 10 months ago
I’m glad you’re doing well.
Aww. Don’t give up on it! It was a great idea!! And I would definitely read it! But if you don’t think God wants you to do that. . . It’s between you and God 😊
I’m doing pretty good. Everything’s crazy over here😵 you never know what’s going on!!
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Beth replied to the topic Ninjanaria chapter one in the forum Fantasy Writers 5 years, 10 months ago
Did you read the revised chapter one? I feel like the first chapter is REALLY important…but I can’t seem to make it…perfect lol!
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Beth replied to the topic Ninjanaria Chapter Three: Ninjanaria 😉 in the forum Fantasy Writers 5 years, 10 months ago
Ohhh….! Yeah, makes sense…I’ll look into trying to fix that!
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Beth replied to the topic Ninjanaria Chapter Three: Ninjanaria 😉 in the forum Fantasy Writers 5 years, 10 months ago
Okay!
Thanks! I’ll try to post chapter four today!
Okay, I’ll try to find those…
Yeah…I’ll try to change their reactions to more of unbelieving.
Not exactly sure what that means…could you elaborate?
Yeah…your right! I should change that lol!!
Thanks for the critique!! 🙂
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Emberynus The Dragonslayer replied to the topic Hello from Israel! in the forum Introduce Yourself 5 years, 10 months ago
Hey. Just checking in again! (hope these check-ins aren’t bothersome. It’s just so crazy in the world rn)
How have you been? What have you been up to? How’s your writing going?
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Beth replied to the topic Ninjanaria Chapter Three: Ninjanaria 😉 in the forum Fantasy Writers 5 years, 10 months ago
@eitan @purpleturtle @claire-h @kristiana-hasseman @olivia @katja-r @kimlikesart @melodyjoy @shiningscribe
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Gracie replied to the topic Pre-prologue in the forum Historical Fiction Writers 5 years, 10 months ago
@eitan @beth20
<p style=”text-align: center;”>~a time to be born, and a time to die; a time to plant, and a time to pluck up that which is planted~</p>
<p style=”text-align: center;”>II</p>
Joab ben Elizer, of the tribe of Judah owned a large, one roomed home with a wide guests’ courtyard in Bethlehem. It was a small, though not unimportant t…[Read more] -
Gracie replied to the topic Pre-prologue in the forum Historical Fiction Writers 5 years, 10 months ago
Oh! Do you want me to start a new topic for every chapter?
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Gracie replied to the topic Pre-prologue in the forum Historical Fiction Writers 5 years, 10 months ago
I’m sorry you had to start over. 🙁
Okay, pre-prologue has disappeared. 🙂 The Roman scene it is.
I watched the video you linked, and might again. (:
Another, smaller problem I had with the pre-prologue is the POV. As a general advice – don’t use omniscient POV.
So, you likely don’t want me to do this in the
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Gracie started the topic Pre-prologue in the forum Historical Fiction Writers 5 years, 10 months ago
Six year old Chena Batjehoshaphat laughed as she and her two brothers chased a plump frog.
“Hurry! Hurry! Before he reaches the stream!” Nine-year-old Malachi rushed ahead, shoving his little sister aside.
Far behind them Levi, his chin only reaching a finger over the tall grass began to cry. Chena glanced back, her shoulders low…[Read more]
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