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No, you’re good!

I’m so sorry about the POV! I tried to put a break whenever it switched, and got rid of a lot of thoughts several people had… Do you think I should just leave out Rachel’s part or something?

Hebrew words,.. I changed all Eloha to G-d.

I like the idea of the nick-name. I will have to think of one. I am embarrassed, (to say the least), that Eliezer is spelt wrong…

Thanks for doing this!

I will try to put in new questions, and such at the end to not make it so closed. (:

I also feel I should warn you…there are 83 chapters…396 pages. And, well, I’d understand if you didn’t want to critique /all/ of it… or even /most/ of it…

I loved your subtle references to the Bible – The covenant of David and Jonathan, and Boas – the godly, not quite poor man, that take scare of a young woman / girl without a family. Maybe it was totally accidental though, but I still loved it And both of those characters are connected to Bethlehem, after all!

That’s so cool! (And it was an accident.) Thanks! (: