AshleaAdams

<p style=”text-align: left;”>@crazywriter,</p>
Sure thing! Heh, I do that SO MUCH XDDD

@denali-christianson,

SHE LIVES!!!! (No problem. ;))

@joelle-stone

Ah, good guess! I have actually been on an extended research visit to Venus. I plan to take a brief trip to Mars as well! XD

@crazywriter

NO I’M NOT GOOD MY FRIEND!!!!!! Actually, that’s a lie. I’m fine, JUST INSANELY busy sorry about taking such a long trip to… not SE lol…

@joelle-stone

Thanks! I think I meant to add ‘over’ but it just flew over my head.
Regarding @denali-Christianson I wonder the same thing. You good, friend?

“Oh” Ellie barely whispered

@denali-christianson,

Have you fallen off the face of the planet or are you just taking a vacation to Mars?

@crazywriter,

*rubs hands* Ok, let’s get the rest of this puppy critiqued!!

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It was with baited breath that the council anticipated Abner’s decision. The young king stood, cleared his throat, and spoke.

“Lords of the Council, in response to the unexpected messenger, I have come to a decision.” Abner swallowed, mulling the weight of his f…[Read more]

@irishcelticredflowercrown

Haha it was a huge adjustment, but a good one too! I’m just gonna wait and see what God has in store for me. So I’m studying film   one is a research module where you get to pick your topic, and the others are animation and music in film. I’m really liking them so far!

Oh man that sounds like an awesome major!! That soun…[Read more]

@rose-colored-fancy

Wow, that sounds hectic! I can imagine it’s a big adjustment, but I’m glad you’re enjoying it! What are you studying?

Did you have any issues with the three big storms? I’m pretty sure they were over England as well. We certainly felt all of them, but praise God we barely have damages. It was definitely stressful though.…

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@irishcelticredflowercrown

I’m loving it thanks for asking! Living with strangers was hard at first but I’m getting used to it   I am also making some new friends plus I joined the gym so I’m busy busy! Aand I also get time to work on my WIP.

Wow, that sounds hectic! I can imagine it’s a big adjustment, but I’m glad you’re enjoying it! What ar…[Read more]

@irishcelticredflowercrown
Yeah I guess a character could have multiple motives. I mean us humans do so the people we create can too.

Klein slowly rounded the exit of the tunnel. The room beyond opened up exponentially. A stairwell, seemingly carved out of the wall led to the floor. Columns that made sequoia trees small rose up to a ceiling…[Read more]

Pia snorted, “He Can see just fine in the dark, when is humans see only black.”
“It’s just strange words and symbols that I do not know.” Kallun added.

@obrian-of-the-surface-world

Thank you so much for that advice! I’ll look into those things, it helps a lot! I’m really excited to keep working on it! 🙂

“Hm… maybe you will be able to tell when we can see better,” Ellie stated

“Yes, but they are so strangely put they don’t make any sense.” Kallun replied, studying the objects.

“Are you able to see any inscriptions on it in this light?” Ellie asked

Here’s just a little something I wrote which shows some misdirection:

Rathburn did not know what he was in for. We had found strategic positions and lay in wait for him. There was not a lot of cover, so we had to find safe positions behind the austerely furnished room. Getting access had taken months of planning. Rathburn often worked late nights…[Read more]

I am very glad to have helped. Your insights have helped me many times, so I am pleased to return the favor.

Another thing I would mention is to layer misdirection or false trails within the story. Sometimes these are called “red herrings” in the writer’s guides.
Have several characters have reasonable motives for wanting to off the victims. …[Read more]

(Lolol)

Kallun looked up. “As you are quite aware, I can mold rocks and metal. But this, no matter how hard I press, it remains its shape.”

”that’s queer.” Pia replied. Fingering her pike, made of metal and rock itself.

K’Nika watched silently.

(He held out his hands. He placed them in his hands. My mind read it like a robot and it was funny XD)

“What is it?” Eliana asked

@obrian-of-the-surface-world

Does this help?

A whole lot! Thank you so much, Brian! That’s exactly the kind of overview I needed!

I already know who the murderer is and I have a faint idea of their motivation, but this will really help me work it out! Thank you so much!