Anna S.

@eitan @beth20
<p style=”text-align: center;”>~a time to be born, and a time to die; a time to plant, and a time to pluck up that which is planted~</p>
<p style=”text-align: center;”>II</p>
Joab ben Elizer, of the tribe of Judah owned a large, one roomed home with a wide guests’ courtyard in Bethlehem. It was a small, though not unimportant t…[Read more]

@eitan

Oh! Do you want me to start a new topic for every chapter?

@eitan

I’m sorry you had to start over. 🙁

Okay, pre-prologue has disappeared. 🙂  The Roman scene it is.

I watched the video you linked, and might again. (:

Another, smaller problem I had with the pre-prologue is the POV. As a general advice – don’t use omniscient POV.

So, you likely don’t want me to do this in the prologue (: First chap…[Read more]

Oh, I wrote a whole comment and then the electricity fell…

Your writing is really good! Descriptions, punctuation, etc., you do it great. Good job!

You’ve also portrayed good the relationships in the family. Malachi sounds like a real elder brother, and I say it as an elder brother 😉

The main problem with the pre prologue is that……[Read more]

@beth20

I think this is the one you already read. *embarrassed look* I haven’t edited yet. Sorry.

I’ll make sure to read this lol!

It was definitely worth the time. Thank you for sharing this. I think I am too scared to share my poems. After reading yours, and others’…It makes me want to be brave.

You are not alone in your doubts, your fears. We all have had trials and tears. You are strong, you are brave. You are called by name. He loves you. Don’t give up. I’ve been…[Read more]

Really good job. It was really good. It is amazing what God can say through poetry.