I’d be happy to beta read for you.

That was fantastic, where is your book and when can I buy it?

Please let me know if it is hard to understand him and whether or not his intonation make sense or if anything contradicts my description of him…

I found it easy to read Hadwin’s dialogue; honestly it was fun because I don’t usually get to read phonetic speech.  I don’t think you contradicted yourself, and the scene was pretty en…[Read more]

[If you want to know more about frostbite, let me know and I’ll do a write-up on that too]

Since you offered, I’ll also inquire about frostbite

Thank you, that answer was wonderful.
Next question is might he get pneumonia from the experience and how would they handle that?

Could a drowning victim be resuscitated in medieval/renaissance times, and how did they handle hypothermia?

The character [a 15yo boy] fell through the ice of a frozen lake at night in the dead of winter and was able to find his way out of the ice before he passed out, but someone else managed to dive in, pull him out of the…[Read more]

So glad to see you again!  And thanks for your answer.

Another question: if someone were stabbed in the back with a stiletto [dagger], where would the best place be for the stab to be survivable and how long would recovery be?

Thanks!

Have fun torturing your characters! XD

I will, don’t worry!  This is only the backstory…

Nice to see you again!

Thank you so much, that answers all my questions.  I was aware that longswords are actually pretty light but it slipped my mind… 🙃.  So my boy will have bad bruising, a nasty cut, and lots of stitches.  Got it.

@the-inkspiller

So a character of mine (@anne_the_noob14 not Brendin, I swear) had a longsword thrown at his back when he was 17.  I’ve already decided that it miraculously managed to cut his back open from his right shoulder to his left hip, but my questions for you are:

1) Is it possible the impact from…[Read more]

Jango and Brendin exchanged a glance, considering.  “Well,” Brendin began with a wry smile, “last time I tried to negotiate with an eldritch being, I lost something.”  He lifted the golem arm to show them, the burnished argil glinting like…[Read more]

Brendin regarded the man, surprised at the address.  A Greycloak, and one of the Eya.  He must have known Bren from Isernbarre then.
“Call me Brendin,” Bren replied in Kith, and explained both that he did not recognize the man and the current situation.  “Don’t trust the dragon,”…[Read more]

Peace settled over Jericho.  Peace she’d not had in a long time.  With a faint smile she began to fade away, gently laying a hand on Alessio’s shoulder to assuage as much of his anxiety as she could before she vanished.  And then she was gone.…[Read more]

Brendin has a kinda rugged appearance and dark hair and brown eyes that turn gold when his power is activated and Jericho dresses kinda like a female Obi-Wan and has brown hair and dark eyes,

Where are you getting all the dark hair and dark eyes from!?  Brendin has very pale strawberry-blonde/red hair and pale grey-blue eyes…[Read more]

In the Fantasy Writers forum, there’s two threads for this stuff.  The Character Castle thread we are currently writing on, where we discuss characters and future ideas and also just chat generally, and the actual Fantasy Character Castle Chronicles no.1 where we write the story about the characters.

Y’know, reading that Alessio likes Bren so much, I think I’ll just swap Jericho out with someone else rather than both Bren and Jericho.  And I’ve thought of another option for who to swap in:

Jango Bastion, an Eya Greycloak (of the Falmarin tribe) that serves under Bren’s uncle Joffrey.  As one of the Greycloaks he’s an e…[Read more]

My particular symptoms are easily distracted, inattentive, quickly forgetting t…[Read more]

That’s so awful about mono, poor thing!

Yeah, it was pretty bad; I had to relearn how to swallow like a normal person afterwards (that was an experience).

Wait you mean an actual official diagnosis?!

Yes, I have severe attention-deficit type ADHD.  So severe my inattentive symptoms are almost off the scale.  It went com…[Read more]

Yes, and yes.

It did kinda die, didn’t it?

At any rate, I’d say you might want to use pronouns a bit more?  I didn’t read through the whole thing – it’s very long and I have a very small attention span (the joys of ADHD) – but I did read the first segment, and it seemed like you used Culvin’s first name an inordinate amount of times.  I would r…[Read more]

Sorry about the prolonged absence.  I was down with mono for all of August, and then school started September and I’ve been pretty wrapped up in that (and getting an ADHD diagnosis.  And possibly having an eating disorder).  Yeah…been bu…[Read more]

Jericho and Brendin merely listened to the various other conversations taking place around them.  Brendin winced at some of Nithel’s words; noticing, Jericho placed a hand on her friend’s shoulder.  She tensed when M…[Read more]

@rose-colored-fancy

Here’s my person (he’s from my Syne of Marring WIP, but a very different part of the story)

{Disclaimer: art is not mine}

I don’t think it’s a bad idea.  If bite-size pieces help you figure out the entirety, it may be helpful.

“That’s understandable,” Nadia muttered, probably loud enough to be heard.  Louder, she said “We should probably figure out what brought us all here.  Some magic is my guess, but what purpose or inten…[Read more]

I’m sorry, I lost track of this for a bit and then I was too busy to write anything…

I’ll be sure to post this evening so we can keep going.

“Let’s just all take a moment…to calm down…and divide our rations, and save our strength for the next disaster.” 

“Yes, that would seem wise,” Jericho said, somewhat wryly.  She sat down on the grass and watched quietly as Alessio and the wolf-girl – Lupa? – began conversing.…[Read more]

@everyone So I have one vote for Ekavir and one vote for Acantha.  Any other votes?

Brendin regarded the dragon a moment.  Memories of wyve…[Read more]

Actually, Brendin wasn’t going to take Malvat up on his offer.  And Brendin really isn’t the type to mutter reassurances to anyone, ever.  So I think you’ll have to rewrite your post a bit (sorry).

Jericho quickly strode to the center of the c…[Read more]

Don’t feel bad about Chantara!  Þorunn is an interesting villain in her own right, but she loses some of that when I can’t contrast her with the heroes of her story.

Also of the three characters you expressed interest in, Galen actually isn’t a villain.  He’s more of a hero.  Morden and Acantha are both villainous, alt…[Read more]

The key to good species names is in part researching real mythologies.  All the ones I listed I got from actual legends, and I didn’t make any up.

The ribbons aren’t a major plot point – I’m not sure how they could be honestly – but it’s just one of those small details I like to have.

The Hunters are a global organization of monster hunters.  Anyone who wants to become a Hunter can; they’re most often humans who have survived monster attacks, come from hunter families, or monsters/entities the Hunters have persuaded to helping the cause.  Most of the Hunters focused on in the stories are humans, but there a…[Read more]

I have two brands of fantasy I guess?  At the least I have two fantasy worlds.
One is more of an urban fantasy akin to Percy Jackson or Supernatural; all the myths are true and teams of Hunters go around killing monsters to protect humanity.  I do still take some liberties with the mythos of various cultures, or certain c…[Read more]

And no, I do not have a website or newsletter unfortunately.  I’m just a fledgling author and my fulltime occupation is learning as a student still.  I’ll probably have to start a website at some point though considering the amount of stories I plan to pen, and when I do I’ll be glad to put a link on here.

Technically Ekavir is from my second WIP, A Syne of Marring, in a way.  That’s part of the same world that A Syne of Marring takes place in, though on a different part of the continent and a few centuries back in time.  That world is really large and there’s lots of stories in it.

<span style=”font-weight: 400;”>The Lady’s breath caught in her throat as her eyes landed on him.  “Brendin–”</span>

<span style=”font-weight: 400;”>“He’s dead.”  The words were soft.</span>

<span style=”font-weight: 400;”>“What?”  </span>

<span style=”font-weight: 400;”>The man lifted his eyes to meet hers for only a moment. …[Read more]

Yeah, souls are really important to the stories involving Haven.  And Brendin has a very long, complicated and messy character arc involving trying to reconcile his past as a mære under Ingor with who he was before and who he is now (which he really is not at all sure of).  I as the author find it kinda heartbreaking to see him go…[Read more]

As for who I want to bring in, I have a few ideas:
Casurus, a side-character hero who wears an eyepatch but not because he’s blind
Acantha, an empress who seems either benevolent or evil depending on how y…[Read more]

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I guess you posted that while I was typing…sorry.

So in Haven (the nation/world Brendin is from) every human generally has a soul, which is formed of several components; personality, memories, spark (the part that gives you life), etc.  When someone suffers mental or emotional trauma (like Alessio’s C-PTSD), this…[Read more]

I never took an official class, but my sister was very interested in ASL at one point in time so I learned a fair bit (I can sign Jesus Loves Me) but not enough to be conversational.  Most of the time she and I use it to talk across a room when we don’t want to gain attention or have other people understand.  If I’m painfully b…[Read more]

Jericho smiled at Alessio in approval as he took charge of the situation.  Brendin meanwhile quickly got out of the bed and summoned a small flame in his palm.  He hoped he needn’t use his syne now; the fire w…[Read more]

Clearly you are a genius

“Wait,” Jericho called, catching his hand.  “Do not go out alone.  Please.  Wait a moment more.”

She strode back to where Alessio and Nithel had placed Brendin on the bed with Alessio’s wrist still firmly in her grasp.  “You misunderstand,” she mur…[Read more]