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katie02 replied to the topic Help with historical mystery fiction in the forum Historical Fiction Writers 5 years, 1 month ago
@claire-h WOW, thanks so much! This was super helpful.
I think one of my problems was that the Frys where so entertaining that I didn’t want to make light of the guy being shot and missing, and I overcompensated on the melodrama, whoops. I toned them both down a little now. I do want the story to be somewhat realistic, although I do have a fairly…[Read more]
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claire replied to the topic Help with historical mystery fiction in the forum Historical Fiction Writers 5 years, 1 month ago
Thank you for sharing your work! I know it takes a lot of courage sometimes. 🙂 I really enjoyed this snippet! Great job with the characters …and the mysterious happenings. Mr. and Mrs. Bill Fry are so entertaining. XD So here are the few thoughts I had:
First off, this story reads like it was written in the 1800s. Have you read a lot…[Read more]
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katie02 started the topic Help with historical mystery fiction in the forum Historical Fiction Writers 5 years, 1 month ago
Hey y’all!
I’m brand new here but I’ve been writing for quite a few years now… never finished any WIPs, but this time I’m bound and determined to. However, I was wondering if any of you would be interested in reading my “introduction” and first chapter. I honestly am not sure if I like it or if it is intriguing enough for readers to want to…[Read more]
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joshuareidwriter posted an update in the group Historical Fiction Writers 5 years, 7 months ago
Hello everyone. My name is Joshua and recently, I embarked on writing historical fiction short stories centered on African-American history. I can’t wait to begin discussing this endeavor with you.
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Gracie started the topic Chena’s Story Chpt. 1 in the forum Historical Fiction Writers 5 years, 9 months ago
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<p style=”text-align: left;”>no man can find out the work that God maketh from the beginning to the end</p>
<p style=”text-align: left;”>I</p>
<p style=”text-align: left;”>She was only six, and yet her world was about to crumble.</p>
<p style=”text-align: left;”>The child’s chest steadily rose and fell, her coarse sheets just barely b…[Read more]-
Thanks for sharing the beginning of your story, Gracie! You’ve certainly got a dramatic opening and a lot of vivid, in the moment description. Well done. The one thing I’d watch for is to be sure you stay in Chena’s POV throughout the scene. That doesn’t mean you have to keep it for the entire story, or even the entire chapter, but the current…[Read more]
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Thank you.
I can just imagine Eitan, (the one reading it for historical accuracy), giving me a knowing look, /Haven’t heard //that// before, have you?/ Ahh well, need to work on that…
I emailed you…though my email was having trouble a few weeks ago. I’d like to check to make sure it went through? I’d love to read your next chapter!
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Kristianne joined the group Historical Fiction Writers 5 years, 9 months ago
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Eitan replied to the topic Chena’s Story Chpt. 4 in the forum Historical Fiction Writers 5 years, 9 months ago
I’ll read it and give a critique this week 🙂
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Thank you. (: No rush, it’s kind of long.
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Gracie started the topic Chena’s Story Chpt. 4 in the forum Historical Fiction Writers 5 years, 9 months ago
@eitan
<p style=”text-align: center;”>~a time to weep, and a time to laugh; a time to mourn, and a time to dance~</p>
<p style=”text-align: center;”>IV</p>
An hour before the sun the next morning Chena got up with Itta and they started making breakfast.To break several minutes of tired silence Itta asked, “Do you actually care about R…[Read more]
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Gracie replied to the topic Chena’s Story Chpt. 3 in the forum Historical Fiction Writers 5 years, 9 months ago
Good job! You excellently ”prepare a way” for the surprising arrival of the actual Messiah
You portray characters very well.
Thanks!
It’s way more likely that the teacher will be an older, charismatic man, who enraptures young, hot blooded people like Ruben.
I have an idea of how I can fix that. Thanks! (:
Don’t use brackets in a story…<…
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Eitan replied to the topic Chena’s Story Chpt. 3 in the forum Historical Fiction Writers 5 years, 9 months ago
Good job! You excellently ”prepare a way” for the surprising arrival of the actual Messiah 🙂
You portray characters very well.
Hmm… A 16 years old boy teaching the crowds? It’s way more likely that the teacher will be an older, charismatic man, who enraptures young, hot blooded people like Ruben.
Don’t use brackets in a…[Read more]
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Gracie started the topic Chena’s Story Chpt. 3 in the forum Historical Fiction Writers 5 years, 10 months ago
a time to kill, and a time to heal; a time to break down, and a time to build up
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Eight years later…
Caesar Augustas declared a census that stated everyone had to return to the land of their ancestors to be counted with 12 Roman months to do so. Bethlehem was never particularly bustling with people traveling for the c…[Read more]
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