@katie02

Yay, I’m so glad my suggestion helped! 🙂 And yes, I would definitely want to keep reading! (I’ve read a lot of books from that time period too, so I can totally relate with it becoming your style 😉 ) I saw that you mentioned The Hidden Hand in your introduction thread. It’s one of my favorites too! Your book so far reminds me a lot of…[Read more]

@Claire-h

Oh, and I forgot to mention that I do read a lot of books written in the 1800s and early 1900s, and that’s kind of become my style. 🙂 I don’t know if it’s annoying to most modern day readers, but I was hoping since the book was set in that historical era, that people’d be okay with it.

@claire-h WOW, thanks so much! This was super helpful.

I think one of my problems was that the Frys where so entertaining that I didn’t want to make light of the guy being shot and missing, and I overcompensated on the melodrama, whoops. I toned them both down a little now. I do want the story to be somewhat realistic, although I do have a fairly…[Read more]

@katie02

Thank you for sharing your work! I know it takes a lot of courage sometimes. 🙂 I really enjoyed this snippet! Great job with the characters …and the mysterious happenings. Mr. and Mrs. Bill Fry are so entertaining. XD So here are the few thoughts I had:

First off, this story reads like it was written in the 1800s. Have you read a lot…[Read more]