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joshuareidwriter posted an update in the group Historical Fiction Writers 2 months ago
Hello everyone. My name is Joshua and recently, I embarked on writing historical fiction short stories centered on African-American history. I can’t wait to begin discussing this endeavor with you.
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joshuareidwriter joined the group Historical Fiction Writers 2 months ago
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Gracie started the topic Chena’s Story Chpt. 1 in the forum Historical Fiction Writers 3 months, 3 weeks ago
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<p style=”text-align: left;”>no man can find out the work that God maketh from the beginning to the end</p>
<p style=”text-align: left;”>I</p>
<p style=”text-align: left;”>She was only six, and yet her world was about to crumble.</p>
<p style=”text-align: left;”>The child’s chest steadily rose and fell, her coarse sheets just barely b…[Read more]-
Thanks for sharing the beginning of your story, Gracie! You’ve certainly got a dramatic opening and a lot of vivid, in the moment description. Well done. The one thing I’d watch for is to be sure you stay in Chena’s POV throughout the scene. That doesn’t mean you have to keep it for the entire story, or even the entire chapter, but the current…[Read more]
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Thank you.
I can just imagine Eitan, (the one reading it for historical accuracy), giving me a knowing look, /Haven’t heard //that// before, have you?/ Ahh well, need to work on that…
I emailed you…though my email was having trouble a few weeks ago. I’d like to check to make sure it went through? I’d love to read your next chapter!
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Kristianne Hassman joined the group Historical Fiction Writers 3 months, 3 weeks ago
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Eitan replied to the topic Chena’s Story Chpt. 4 in the forum Historical Fiction Writers 4 months ago
I’ll read it and give a critique this week 🙂
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Thank you. (: No rush, it’s kind of long.
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Gracie started the topic Chena’s Story Chpt. 4 in the forum Historical Fiction Writers 4 months ago
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<p style=”text-align: center;”>~a time to weep, and a time to laugh; a time to mourn, and a time to dance~</p>
<p style=”text-align: center;”>IV</p>
An hour before the sun the next morning Chena got up with Itta and they started making breakfast.To break several minutes of tired silence Itta asked, “Do you actually care about R…[Read more]
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Gracie replied to the topic Chena’s Story Chpt. 3 in the forum Historical Fiction Writers 4 months, 2 weeks ago
Good job! You excellently ”prepare a way” for the surprising arrival of the actual Messiah
You portray characters very well.
Thanks!
It’s way more likely that the teacher will be an older, charismatic man, who enraptures young, hot blooded people like Ruben.
I have an idea of how I can fix that. Thanks! (:
Don’t use brackets in a story…<…
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Eitan replied to the topic Chena’s Story Chpt. 3 in the forum Historical Fiction Writers 4 months, 2 weeks ago
Good job! You excellently ”prepare a way” for the surprising arrival of the actual Messiah 🙂
You portray characters very well.
Hmm… A 16 years old boy teaching the crowds? It’s way more likely that the teacher will be an older, charismatic man, who enraptures young, hot blooded people like Ruben.
Don’t use brackets in a…[Read more]
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Gracie started the topic Chena’s Story Chpt. 3 in the forum Historical Fiction Writers 5 months ago
a time to kill, and a time to heal; a time to break down, and a time to build up
III
Eight years later…
Caesar Augustas declared a census that stated everyone had to return to the land of their ancestors to be counted with 12 Roman months to do so. Bethlehem was never particularly bustling with people traveling for the c…[Read more]
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Gracie replied to the topic Chean’s Story Chpt. 2 in the forum Historical Fiction Writers 5 months ago
No, you’re good!
I’m so sorry about the POV! I tried to put a break whenever it switched, and got rid of a lot of thoughts several people had… Do you think I should just leave out Rachel’s part or something?
Hebrew words,.. I changed all Eloha to G-d.
I like the idea of the nick-name. I will have to think of one. I am embarrassed, (to…[Read more]
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AshleaAdams posted an update in the group Historical Fiction Writers 5 months ago
Hi, everyone! I hope y’all are having a great day!
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AshleaAdams joined the group Historical Fiction Writers 5 months ago
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Eitan replied to the topic Chean’s Story Chpt. 2 in the forum Historical Fiction Writers 5 months ago
Your prose is great, and the chapter is very good. I think you portrayed the time era very good, and I loved your subtle references to the Bible – The covenant of David and Jonathan, and Boas – the godly, not quite poor man, that take scare of a young woman / girl without a family. Maybe it was totally accidental though, but I still…[Read more]
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Heyo, just so you know my email is acting up…I can’t see new messages at this point…or send anything.
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Ok, I’ll send it here.
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Hi!
Hmm… I’m not sure. I’m pretty sure I have such things, but I can’t think about such right now… What about you?
Something I really admire in my secular friends is their tolerance. Even though we disagree about so many things, they tolerate and love me. Many people call themselves ‘’tolerant and progressive’’ when they’re so far from it, but…[Read more]
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Oh, I got that one last night. (: I also replied to it, (Not sure if it went through).
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It didn’t.
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I sent you an email from my dad’s email. (:
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Beth replied to the topic Chean’s Story Chpt. 2 in the forum Historical Fiction Writers 5 months ago
Awesome!! Will read this soon!
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Gracie started the topic Chean’s Story Chpt. 2 in the forum Historical Fiction Writers 5 months ago
a time to be born, and a time to die; a time to plant, and a time to pluck up that which is planted
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Joab ben Elizer, of the tribe of Judah owned a large, one roomed home with a wide guests’ courtyard in Bethlehem. It was a small, though not unimportant town, two miles from Chena’s home. Joab had a wife, named Rachel, and one…[Read more]
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Eitan replied to the topic Pre-prologue in the forum Historical Fiction Writers 5 months ago
I think it’s a better idea, so people can comment on each chapter without comments being confused.
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