Jodi Janz

@rose-colored-fancy

Rose,

I love that yellow dress analogy!  Subtle interplay of hope. Very well done!  Nice finishing touch having Faye completing it. Bravo!

@this-is-not-an-alien

Cathy,

It goes even deeper than that, because when the remnant survive the plague, they purge the city by burning the outer rings, and courtyards, and they f…[Read more]

@obrian-of-the-surface-world
It’s so interesting how the city is literally rotting from the inside out with corruption! That’s really cool symbolism!

Rose your symbology of the Blood representing the duality of “guilt” and “sacrifice” is a powerful analogy, and the fact that these images and experiences come from Liorah’s dreams are also portentou…

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@obrian-of-the-surface-world
Ooh I love your symbolism with dead city of Azragoth, it’s got so many layers and demonstrates how passive we are about the sins right in front of our noses while we judge distant crimes we may not be a part of physically but are in our complacency. Especially how unconfessed sin grows and wounds and eventually d…[Read more]

@rose-colored-fancy
@this-is-not-an-alien

Hi Rose and Cathy,

Thank you Rose and Cathy for sharing your amazing examples. I have many examples of buried symbology in my WIP that are expounded upon and revealed later in the story.  The very place of “The Mid-World” and the Hidden Kingdom referred to as “Excavatia” all have this buried and later…[Read more]

@obrian-of-the-surface-world

Very cool topic! I love your use of subtext to imply the danger in the piece! It’s really interesting!

@this-is-not-an-alien

In my current WIP I keep using the image of a doll both to forward the witchcraft underlying plot and to symbolize manipulation or someone being dehumanized and I also use the word “doll” to…

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YOU RANG? *heheheh*
Oooh I love that clip of Chicago! Gave a perfect image of everything interesting, and kept a rather dull plot (some dude waking up in the middle of the night to normal ol’ Chicago gunshots :D) vivid and punchy and promising excitement.
I have several ways I use subtext. In my current WIP I keep using the image of a doll both t…[Read more]

@erynne

Great! Just send an email to this address tashavk06@gmail.com and I’ll ad you to the doc!

@melancholicwriter

Sure, I’d love to!

@erynne
If it’s something you would read, would you like to Alpha read for me?

@melancholicwriter

That’s going to turn out very cool! Totally sounds like something I would read

@erynne

Thank you for the suggestions!

yes there is a good reason for them to flee to the uncle. So at the ball Mia wanders off and sees her stepmother and the earl together. She hears them talking about an evil plot (haven’t totally figured that out yet) Mia goes and tells Gabriel, but him, the loyal son that he is, doesn’t believe her right…[Read more]

@melancholicwriter

Hope you don’t mind me popping in!

I really like everything about it! I do agree with Gracie though. If you made that change it would make it really neat! I do have a couple questions about it though. Is there a reason that Mia and Gabriel have to flee to the good uncle? And this is just pure curiosity, does Mia have something…[Read more]

@arindown

Ya the illegitimate is a way I’m changing it up and that is a reason the mother is so spiteful…but I could have it that her identity is just hidden. Actually I really like that! If you want to read it, I could add you to the doc and you could be an Alpha reader as I write it…if you would like that just shoot an email to this address…[Read more]

@melancholicwriter

Sounds cool to me. I love fairy-tale retellings, so I might be a little biased.😄

I’m wondering what the point of her being an illegitimate daughter is. Is it going to be important later in the story? Also…just a random idea…what if she wasn’t actually illegitimate, but her father was hiding her true identity?

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@jsclingman

I do have to agree with where @legomaiego is going. And even though I gave some books with romance that weren’t too romantic, they aren’t really romances. If you are going to read a romance you will most likely have to deal with kissing, romance, etc. It’s just kinda part of the romance part of romance…