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Ok, so there is a bit of a story behind this romance before I tell my plot. So  a year or two ago I decided that I wanted to try my hand at writing a Cinderella retelling. The only problem was that I don’t really like the fairy fairytale with all the magic. So I decided I was going to write it in medieval England, Germany, France, or Italy. I put it on hold because I had just started a WIP and didn’t want two brand new ones right then. At the end of last year I decided to pick up my pen and start writing it. Then it hit, my friend recommended Melanie Dickerson’s fairytale retellings. So I read them and found that they were the same kind of idea that I wanted to do with the whole medieval times, no magic. I got depressed about this because I thought that I may have a slightly unique idea (I knew there probably was a no magic cinderella book out there but it was so close to what I wanted to do). So I stopped writing it. Then about a month ago I decided that I was just going to write it. I changed some of my ideas to be less like Melanie Dickersons and have kept writing. I have someone reading it as a write and they don’t seem to think it’s too much like Melanie Dickerson’s and so I want to get my idea critiqued here.

So the basic idea that I have is Mia (Cinderella) was the illegitimate daughter of a wealthy horse breeder who used to be a merchant. He died of an illness and right after her stepmother made her become a servant. Mia’s life becomes full of hardship and work with only Angelina, her youngest stepsister, and a few of the servants as friends. In whatever year this takes place, the earl of waterford starts making visits to all the widows in waterford with his oldest and heir, Gabriel, and his second oldest son, Colton. Mia catches Gabriel’s eye as the most beautiful maiden in all the land and grows to wish that she was the daughter of a wealthy man instead of a servant. At the ball that is thrown with Gabriel’s father’s not so secret hope of Gabriel finding a wife, Mia sees her stepmother and the earl intimately together. She was going to leave, but heard them discussing an evil plot. Mia tells Gabriel and as she was going out was grabbed and taken away; the earl had found out that she had heard. Gabriel must free Mia and then together they must flee to his good uncle and get aid and save many.