Mel

CONROY

Everything is super quiet. I’m all by myself.

No castles guys, no crazy giants, no screaming people.

Just me.

I wipe at my eyes. They’re watering. A lot.

“Hello?” I call out into the empty hallway. My voice echoes.

It’s dark in here. I don’t like it.

Where is everybody?

“Miss Val? Mr. Abirami? Is anyone here?” I cry more…[Read more]

oh snap, I forgot about the future self thing, whoops 😅

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EVE:

“Hello?”

I whipped around, a little unsettled that the voice sounded a bit like mine.

A woman with completely white hair, yet with more middle-aged features, stood before me and Calix. The wrinkles around her nose and forehead were sunken and deep, indicating she was…[Read more]

@calidris

Also…I have a rather cursed idea for the next challenge: the characters have to participate in a very difficult challenge, and if they refuse or fail they have to walk in a fashion show as punishment XD

@rose-colored-fancy was thinking that the challenge could involve making the characters give up something valuable to them – not nec…

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Hii so I am stuck between Mayra and Lorcan for the challenge?

Cause it would be interesting to see Lorcán meet his future self as a wiser, even stronger warrior (he’s married at this point too!!) but also Mayra cause she’s going to be a dragonrider. So her particular dragon is gonna be by her future self’s side too I suppose XD

What do you gu…[Read more]

@inkhorn sounds good!  I’ll start working in his response XD

Also…I have a rather cursed idea for the next challenge: the characters have to participate in a very difficult challenge, and if they refuse or fail they have to walk in a fashion show as punishment XD

@rose-colored-fancy was thinking that the challenge could involve making the…[Read more]

Okay
I think I’m gonna make an entrance like this XD

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EVE:

The wind was cold and reeked of memories.

Flashbacks pummelled my senses as the Evenflow Tide’s air brushed against my body like a tantalising dancer. The cliff I stood on overlooked the Abyss and the Sky, along with the next Círrith Island, Tàme-tho’oa, floating just a few miles…[Read more]

@r-m-archer

You might not like this answer, but I’d say it’s whatever works best for your story. With some series, it’s definitely better to edit the first book first. I have a duology I’ll almost certainly refine book 1 in before I write book 2, or at least before I expect book 2 to offer a solid foundation to work from. Meanwhile, my plan fo…

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@e-n-leonard That was so sad!  I keep forgetting that Mara is an antagonist…so it was so heartbreaking seeing her being so harsh with her younger self 🙁  That…plus she’s a Benevolent now…

I’m assuming she has a negative character arc?  Will she ever be redeemed?

Agreed.

As an additional note here, it’s a good idea to set aside the book for a while if you’re in the latter camp when you finish. Some time and space will give you a clearer perspective on it once you read it over again after a few weeks or even months. Readers can also help, but it’s generally a good idea–especially if you haven’t done…[Read more]

@calidris

I actually had an idea that I could sub in Kit for that interaction instead, because he’s way more…umm…assertive than Val, with the added bonus of his own puffed up ego.  I think it would be funny to see them clash XD

Ooooh, that’s a good idea! I would love to write her reaction to him since she’s not really big on people seeing her as an equal.

@inkhorn I’d love that!

I actually had an idea that I could sub in Kit for that interaction instead, because he’s way more…umm…assertive than Val, with the added bonus of his own puffed up ego.  I think it would be funny to see them clash XD

If you’d rather work with Val, that’s totally fine too!  It would be a good exercise in a…[Read more]

@wingiby-iggiby

Looks like everyone had awesome answers, so I’m just popping in to recommend Abbie Emmons on YouTube for any writing/editing tips. She’s super helpful and straightforward and most (I’ll say most because she does use movie examples from films I would not watch XD) of her stuff is clean.

Kit:

My shoes clatter in the thick silence as I sprint towards the light ahead.  Compared to that last challenge, this honestly seems pretty good.  And that last challenge is really the last thing I wanted to remember, so that’s why I’m choosing to focus on our lovely dinner instead.  Specifically, that time Val said my hair looked soft and si…[Read more]

@wingiby-iggiby

*Hurtles into the room surrounded by a cloud of pink glitter*

BROOOKEE!!!! WINGIBY!!!! I MISSED YOU!!! *Gives you a huge hug*

I missed you so much, it’s so amazing to hear from you again! You have to tell me all about how your project is going!!

Your characters are not talking back, are they?

… It’s Liorah, what were…[Read more]

Hello @wingiby-iggiby

R. M. Archer put some really good advice in here, so I’ll just tack on this tidbit:

If you know that your first book needs major edits, definitely tackle that before you move on to the second. It’ll set the second book up with a better foundation in such a situation.

And I’d be happy to beta read your novel 🙂 I love beta…[Read more]

Hey! Welcome back!

You might not like this answer, but I’d say it’s whatever works best for your story. With some series, it’s definitely better to edit the first book first. I have a duology I’ll almost certainly refine book 1 in before I write book 2, or at least before I expect book 2 to offer a solid foundation to work from. Meanwhile, my…[Read more]

Crorie was briefly surprised that she said that out-loud. However, there was no taking it back. If she was going to be punished, there would be no escaping it. However, Leana was rather calm about it. She didn’t lash out.

The door opened.

Arsene peeked his head through the door, with a talon knife in his hand. There was a brief pause, as he…[Read more]

When the armored fighter left, Hades decided to get whatever rest he could get. He was unaware of what Beskar steel was, but he knew that it was not invincible. Even if he couldn’t penetrate it the armor itself, certain areas like the joints and neck likely consisted of a weaker material. Still, he didn’t want to test that theory, unless he had…[Read more]

CON

Con watched as Hades launched the pommel of his knife into his codpiece. It struck, but did nothing. This was then followed up with a kick to the same spot, which also did nothing.

“Your
armor may be resistant
to the energy of my
sword, but how many
physical blows can it
take?” Hades commented

“A lot,” Con replied as he pulled out a boo…[Read more]