JennyKelley

it has an energetic three-part voice-shift

I’ve never heard of that before! Can you explain what that is?

*I looked you up to see (also YES IT’S THAT ONE I READ THE FIRST PAGE BEFORE MY INTERNET DIED AND I GOTTA KNOW WHAT HAPPENS!!!! I wanna know more about that convict’s past and how he got into that situation and his internal conflict with his…

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*a couple google searches and skimming over three sci-fi backs late*
The more I read over it the more I like it; it’s briefer than the backs I read in sci-fi but fits with the more dramatic/mysterious summaries that are getting pretty trendy especially in thriller and mystery styles in any genre and it has an energetic three-part voice-shift w…[Read more]

After some brainstorming with a friend, I think I have a blurb now!

He has created a dark and twisted strand in the cable of human existence, one that cannot withstand my caress without breaking and becoming no longer a man. You saw it just now. It saddens me.

Two men, condemned.

The pilot, betrayed by his AI god.

The convict,…[Read more]

Sounds good!

@winter_rose That’s really good. Yea I almost forgot about this XD

she has human ears like Kanan, so she doesn’t necessarily need the coverings over them… besides that, I think she’s good.
thank you so much!

@emma-walker
Ok sorry I’m taking so long, just been busy and distracted. Here’s an outfit I came up with for your character’s older version, let me know what you want to change so I can put that in the final illustration.

Is it ok if her younger outfit does not include the armor?

Alright!!! Thanks, lol my siblings love to be harassed about scientific stuff! I’ll take some time to think up some good beta questions and send my WIP as soon as that’s done!! I can’t wait to read your book!!!

@this-is-not-an-alien Hi Cathy, thank you for the interest! I’d be grateful for your siblings’ insight as well as your own, if you could harass them a little on my behalf =P

I’ll definitely take you up on that offer. I’d be happy to beta for your project in return. You can send that along with whatever beta questions you have to itaylorclogston…[Read more]

I have some experience beta reading and I specialize in character development, theme integration and nuances of foreshadowing, increasing tension and keeping flow in a scene. Working big-picture is one of my better skills especially in speed-reading and while I don’t have very much experience in hard SciFi I have two siblings who are huge on S…[Read more]

lol I’m so happy I liked it too 😛 And you must let be beta read morrrrrre!!!!

Lol all is good then (:
Haha tell Jake I wouldn’t trust him with a plastic water-gun within a ten mile radius. But I am fascinated by his character and really all the characters here I can’t pick a favorite they’re all so interesting!!! I’d probably love to hang ou…[Read more]

@obrian-of-the-surface-world

You’re welcome!

Thank you so much for your feedback! It’s really helpful for me, especially since sci-fi is an unfamiliar genre for the hopeless fantasy nut. 😊

Marian and Jake (at least for now) were in a relationship in the past, but Jake had been hiding his illegal lifestyle from her and when she found out she…[Read more]

@ScoutFinch180

Very good story, Dawn!

It had me engaged with it throughout.
I think I liked Fabian the best.  He had admirable qualities and a consistent action following his beliefs, and that is always refreshing.
Yes, it does count as Sci-Fi.

1. does this even count as sci-fi and how realistic do i need to be to write a sci-fi?  There is no h…[Read more]

@joy-caroline (I just saw you’d joined SE! I am @ScoutFinch180 on KP)

@arindown

Some of the tags didn’t go through 🤔:

@jbstanhope

@rose-colored-fancy

@devestate-lasting

@obrian-of-the-surface-world

@this-is-not-an-alien

Thank you for reading!

The next thing Jake knew was his breath coming in gasps. The blizzard had passed, and the stars in the darkening sky gaped at him.  He sat up, dusting a thin layer of ice off his suit. How long had he been unconscious? The unfamiliar peaks turned vivid red in the fading light, and he brought his knees up to his chest, shivering.

Jake’s vi…[Read more]

A metallic clank crashed Jake into consciousness. He stared at the dark ceiling, where was he? Then he recalled the fight with the thrid, and a shudder went down his spine… had the HSI found him after he failed? What would they do to him now? As he tried to turn his head he froze and cringed, waiting for the pain in his neck to subside. The s…[Read more]