Germaine Han

Alright. I have to go to work.

Thank you all for your input so far. You guys keep editing if you can. I’ll probably be back tonight.

@kate Are you going to be submitting it? What time does it need to be submitted?

Whoever’s submitting it, be sure and take “Draft 2” off the title before submitting it. Or am I the only one who can do…[Read more]

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Hey, where is everyone? I’m working on the document right now. I would appreciate it if anyone could help.

Last day, guys. Let’s get this polished up.

Okay, guys. I went through it, and approved most everything. I left some things with comments, and some things I left for later. I’ll be back tonight to work on it some more.

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Just in case:

Misty Draft 2

@germaine-han

Okay, makes sense! Thanks so much! 😀

Alright, guys. Second draft is here:

USE THIS LINK→ Misty Draft 2 ←USE THIS LINK (Just so you don’t get it confused with the  first draft. 🙂

I’ve got to run, but I’ve put some comments on already. Also, I won’t be working on it until Sunday.

@kate Any idea when the exact deadline is?

Whenever it is, it’s just a few short days, guys. Be sure…[Read more]

Before I get too carried away, one thing I would really like to know: is there too much music theory?

If everyone could just tell me yes or no on that one, it would help me a lot.

Thanks.

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Alright guys, rewriting. Feel free to keep editing until I post the second draft. I’ll be referencing it as I rewrite.

Thank you, @germaine-han @sesi @chalice and especially @literatureforthelight for all your help.

Here we go again. 🙂

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@literatureforthelight

I’m glad you brought those things up. I think it’s a good idea to get the big things like that worked out before doing the little edits.

That’s a good idea, with the Christian lingo. There’s quite a bit out there. XD

I realized the other day, that this isn’t the first time this has happened. Where I think a story is…[Read more]

@literatureforthelight

1. Yes, we need to put in more indicators of it being a dream. I think we can have Ryan know he’s dreaming, because he knows she’s dead. Go ahead and edit it. I plan on working on it later this morning.

2. Agreed. I’ll try to explain each one here:

The hat: A friend of ours has looked extensively into common dream…[Read more]

@noahlitle Looks good! I think we have much of the structure down, and I definitely think we should keep those elements of regret in there, and intensify them. They contributed a lot to the feeling.

1. The definition of the prompt is a dream sequence, so we’ll want to either have him wake up or strongly hint about it being a dream. I think we can…

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I’m so sorry, guys. Here is the link to the document you can edit:

Misty, Draft 1 (Editable, please use this link)

I also plan on adding material on Sunday.

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Alright guys, here’s the first draft:

Misty, Draft 1

I imagine it needs some sensory details added. Also, I kind of skipped over the regret part. We either need to add that in, or completely eradicate all traces of it. And I think I may have left a few traces.

Anyway, there it is. Let me know what you think about it. If it doesn’t make you cry,…[Read more]

@noahlitle Awesome!! Great idea

@germaine-han I like the idea of her dying in a car crash, and maybe she was driving to a concert of his? Maybe that would be why he’d feel guilty, like he could’ve stopped it.

@literatureforthelight Okay, I think I can do that.

Here’s what I’m planning on doing:

Written in first person present tense. He’s a concert pianist that plays jazz. It’s backstage just before the first concert, and he can’t find his hat. And he’s deathly afraid of going onstage without his hat. But his tour manager comes up and urges him to go…[Read more]

A couple more ideas:

What if they were chefs? They were childhood sweethearts that both dreamed to be big chefs one day. She died before the dream could be fulfilled, and it’s the night before he goes in for the first day of being a real chef, and he’s afraid he won’t measure up… ? He wouldn’t necessarily have regret in this case, but maybe he…[Read more]

@corissa That’s a great idea.

What are some ideas for what he does in the dream?

I was thinking maybe a military type parachute jump, but I don’t know anything about that, so that’s probably not a good idea. What’s something that he would be nervous/scared to do the night before, and could possibly lead to guilt about his wife’s death?

That’s a…[Read more]

I really like @literatureforthelight ‘s idea. I really, really like that idea.

I think we could combine it with the regret idea, in the way that @corissa described.

So, he’s doing something in his dream, and through the course of his dream his late wife starts helping him in a way that is reminiscent of the moment he regrets, and the dream e…[Read more]

To throw a combination of ideas out there, what if we had a character who has a major event coming up, and he’s scared he’s going to fail. He dreams about doing it (you know, how we all dream about upcoming things we’re stressed about) but in the dream, his wife or someone else who he misses joins him and helps him succeed. He then complains to…[Read more]