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Hi!! I’m from the Character Castle 2.0 roleplay. I moved that one to this website (sadly, you have to be 18 to join). So if any of you would like to take your characters to a new castle, hop over and view it. It’s in “groups”.
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https://silverpenstrokes.wordpress.com@abrielle Aw, shucks! I’m sorry; I forgot about that rule. :'( Make sure you come–I’ll be waiting for you! In the meantime, my email is emilywaldorf2021 at outlook dot com (at and dot are the appropriate symbols. Apparently spelling it out keeps your information safe from malevolent robots online??? IDK 😀 ) If you want to reach out. If not, that’s totally ok!
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https://silverpenstrokes.wordpress.com@denali-christianson made!
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https://silverpenstrokes.wordpress.com@this-is-not-an-alien Thank you!!
Also, everyone: I’m hoping to start a Character Castle 2.0 on this Christian writer’s site, if I get enough people from SE interested.
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https://silverpenstrokes.wordpress.comI am part of Christianwriters.com, which is a great writing site with many options for both informal fellowship, and constructive critique etc. Please check it out–I would love to meet some of you on there!
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https://silverpenstrokes.wordpress.comp.s. the only social media I have is Facebook and a probably-soon-to-be-abandoned blog called Silver Pen Strokes
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https://silverpenstrokes.wordpress.comThanks @calidris for starting this thread. As far as I can judge on a spur-of-the moment decision (I only just now figured out about the forums’ closure), I will not have much to say on your blog, but thank you so much for the offer, and I would like a link to your blog. 🙂
I also wanted to say, I know of this really great christian writers’ site where y’all should go. It’s called ChristianWriters.com and here is the link. I encourage you all to come on over; we could even make a character castle there, in the “groups” section. There is such a great community there–please, join us! (it will obviously be a little different than SE, b/c it is a different site, but different doesn’t = bad, nor does it mean it’s completely dissimilar.)
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https://silverpenstrokes.wordpress.comThis CC went to Discord, right? Or is it just inactive for a while?
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https://silverpenstrokes.wordpress.comI’m so sorry I took so long! I completely understand if you’ve moved on and don’t want this anymore, but for the sake of promise-keeping I’m going to answer anyway. 🙂
So, this is more of a writing tip than a structuring tip, but make sure that you show the characters and theme developing instead of just showing it. I could see a potential temptation to have them sitting and chatting during bible study, and again when Jade is laying out the problems involved in rebellion–long conversations tend to bore readers. I think your idea of how to introduce characters is really good, though!
Could Mr. Nightingale get natural gas? Idk how you’d store/transport it, but it does burn.
False victory, joy New mindset works when Jade starts to worry about her mom (though God gave her a very forcible reminder!). Jade the proud actually apologizes to Finch and works harder at her weak spots. This results in her becoming the prima ballerina. She’s overall a happier person. Instead of pushing Rosemary and Tray to change who they are for their “safety,” she talks about their qualities in front of the teachers in a way that would help her friends.
I’m not totally sure what her new mindset is, but this is going really well! (You don’t need to tell me what it is unless you want to.)
Relations between Mara and her old friends are now strained,
I feel like it would be downright shattered between Jade and Mara, after what Mara did to Jade’s dad. That could even set up some good things for the next book. If you build Jade’s feelings into hatred for Mara, that could serve as a subplot/undercurrent for the rest of this book, and be brought to a head and resolved in the next book! (I’m getting excited and writing your story for you, lol).
She must give up something. Maybe her obsession w/ protecting everyone? Control?
Control is a good one. I don’t how fearful of a character you’ve made her, but she could give up her fear. Or, conversely, she could actually and finally give up her pride here. But I prefer control. I think that’s a really cohesive sacrifice.
That could be a good set up for stage fright, but instead she conquers this by what she learned from the theme and dances for God in defiance to him.
Ooh, ooh! If fear is a character trait, this is a fabulous moment and could be what the entire book is working toward. Now, when she is scared for herself as well as all her friends, she gives it up once and for all…or something. (Fear is my default character flaw, as it is something I struggle with a lot.) If you decide to go with pride or control for what she sacrifices, I would advise that you have her actually give it up in a real, physical way. (Such as at this performance, the way I was talking about her giving up fear.) If there is some way that dancing for the big baddie can be a chance for her to overcome pride or release control, then make the most of it. That way we see the quieter, mental resolve/sacrifice in the plane, and the real test of her resolve and her sacrifice acted out. (Hope this is making sense!).
Isaias tells her about all
nit-picky writing advice again, but make sure this isn’t an information dump. I imagine it would be fairly easy for Jade to see those horrible things, their effects, aftermath, or destruction, as well as have Isaias tell her.
Sorry again this is so late. Let me know if you need anything else–what you’ve got here is really good! Good luck and happy writing!
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https://silverpenstrokes.wordpress.com@lady-grace do you want to give me your email or shall I give you mine?
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https://silverpenstrokes.wordpress.com@E-n-leonard @lady-grace Joelle and I are already doing an email thread, I’d be happy if you joined! @e-n-leonard , please don’t feel obligated to join unless you want to. We’d be perfectly happy to have you, though!
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https://silverpenstrokes.wordpress.comAnd thank you all so much for your patience and participation. 😀
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https://silverpenstrokes.wordpress.com@everyone (I’ll tag you all later if you don’t see this),
Looks like Discord it is! I am not getting an account at present, but if I ever change my mind I will come knocking at your server door.🙂 Calidris and/or Ethan created a server, so however you join that, go ahead.
Happy sprinting everyone!
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https://silverpenstrokes.wordpress.com@Calidris perfect! I had ideas of overlap, too, so I’m glad you mentioned it. 🙂
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