AshleaAdams

(Nice picture of your foot lol)

Kallun rolled his eyes, but realizing he was still slightly dripping wet. “I’m pretty okay, I think that’s what Julian means.”

K’Nika smiled, “Holpni.” Hello.

Pia smiled sweetly and took his hand. But she did curtsy, a smooth and simple gesture. “Pleased to make your acquaintance.” She was using her formal diplom…[Read more]

“Friend! We are of no harm” one of the figures yelled.

Eliana and Julian looked at each other wide eyed.

“Wait,” Julian said gesturing to the others. “Lacey?” He shouted.

“Julian?” The girl replied running forward.

A blonde girl about the same age as Ellie and a tall brunette boy came forward.

“Ellie!”the boy said scooping her in a hug.

“Who…[Read more]

Kallun stood and watched them, he could see them clearly. He put a wary hand on his sword, “Friend or foe?!” He shouted.

Pia crouched at the ready and gripped her pike.

(oh yeahhh they gotta come)

Ellie smiled.

Julian finished and stood up to find a good place to call it a night. “Hey, look over there” he said pointing over by the place Ellie had changed at. Two shadowy figures were coming towards them.

“It’s very good.” Kallun added.

K’Nika nodded.

(when do the friends show up?)

“What does everyone think of the fish?” Ellie asked.

“Good.” Julian said

“better than yours?”

“Enough.” He said with a small smile

Ookay guys here I go!

Lorcan

Lorcan was drifting in and out of darkness. Voices rose and fell, echoing painfully in his head. He could feel his laboured breaths heaving from his body, as he struggled to drag in air.

It wasn’t so much his actual wound, which was certainly quite bad, that was causing him pain. It was the feeling of sharp iron f…[Read more]

I whole-heartedly agree

sounds great!

@jared-williams

No offense taken! This article sums up what I believe of how we should use hard topics such as sex/rape in our stories as God would have us do. God gives us perfect examples in the Bible such as your example of Lot and his two daughters. God was simplistic with the details but clear enough to figure out what happened without…[Read more]

@jared-williams

No offense taken! This article sums up what I believe of how we should use hard topics such as sex/rape in our stories as God would have us do. God gives us perfect examples in the Bible such as your example of Lot and his two daughters. God was simplistic with the details but clear enough to figure out what happened without…[Read more]

@jared-williams,

AWESOME!! Lemme know when you start looking, and I’ll see if I can clear something out for you. 😀 Life has been hectic, so I can’t promise that I’ll be able to read for you, but I’d love to if I get the chance. 🙂

something else that may be worth mentioning is that there is a very big difference between descriptive and prescriptive.

I think a lot of the history in the Old Testament is a good example. Many, many stories in the Bible are descriptive – what happened, not prescriptive – what is good. And we can confuse the two very easily. For instance, the…[Read more]

@jared-williams

Thanks! I am glad it made sense. Though I did not explain it thoroughly as I should have.

Thank you for this idea! I will need to play it out and tweak it.  It would like make it more understandable to the reader if they saw the outcome and is able to pinpoint how it happened with kragvora…[Read more]

Oh, it’s a far cry from a zombie. I was just using it as an example.

I can understand Brian’s aversion to zombies, and I won’t push the point, but your creature doesn’t sound like reanimation or bringing the dead back to life, but nano-technology taking over a person, which could easily change a person’s personality, the way they think, and…[Read more]

@rose-colored-fancy

Have fun torturing your characters! XD

I will, don’t worry!  This is only the backstory…

Hi Jared (@jared-williams),

Yeah, I get it.  But the idea that anything but God can give life is where I diverge.  I have always hated zombie stories because it seems to imply a life after death that is wholly given credit to “devils”.  The only thing I might could concede is animated dead flesh with another entity in possession of the body.  But…[Read more]

@obrian-of-the-surface-world

Yes, I have 10 other races of good humanoids and 5 bad races. That does not include the countless hybrids of humanoids. lol  You have good points that I have personally wrestled with on a realistic level comparing animals and how venom works.

@jared-williams

Your idea is mostly correct, though I was hoping to avoid…[Read more]

@skylarynn

Nice to see you again!

Thank you so much, that answers all my questions.  I was aware that longswords are actually pretty light but it slipped my mind… 🙃.  So my boy will have bad bruising, a nasty cut, and lots of stitches.  Got it.

Glad I could help! 😀 Have fun torturing your characters! XD

@joelle-stone

wasn’t sure who else to call out to, but I remembered you did ask to be updated if I posted another section… This one isn’t too emotional, like the last one, but hopefully a bit of fun…