[Eitan]

A poem I’d written today while an uneasy time I had… Do you also pray through poetry sometimes?

Anyway – The translation doesn’t contain much of the artistic beauty of the original (rhyme, meter, and – suddenly, when needed, English decided to not have enough words), but I think I should share it anyway. I hope it’ll help someone(s) there 🙂

Thank @kimlikesart for the metaphor of desert / wilderness to those trials 🙂

Critiques, likes and grammatical corrections are welcome!

 

The fire fades in my soul

 

The fire fades in my soul

Only embers are left of my bonfire

And my candle dies down inside me

And my light goes out my heart

Ignite my passion in me again

 

Renew a clean, pure heart in me

That is burning, hungry, thirsty for the light

My God, please give in me thoughts

That wander only towards You

Renew a holy, white heart in me

 

So I shall desire only You, please

And shall wait and hope to Your presence

Purify my head from meaninglessness

And be the main thing in my life

You redeemed me and I am Yours

 

My God, to You I shall beg

For I could not darn it

I shall not renew my heart

But only Your sovereign power will

Renew in me a laughing, singing heart

 

I will know, and remember – You are with me

I am not alone against my trouble

You will give me Your supreme power

With which I shall pass through any trial

Strengthen me in the heart of the desert

 

When You will give an end to the wilderness

I will lift up my eyes in humility

I will know and remember and not forget

You are with me – In You I will trust

Embrace me in love

• This topic was modified 5 years, 8 months ago by Eitan.

You don't need to see the wind itself in order to hear the rustling leaves.

[Sam M]

@eitan

Hi, Eitan. I really liked your poem. It’s very relatable. Thanks for posting it. 🙂

[Kimmi]

@eitan

It is very good. Though in the desert, and feeling alone, you choose to have faith that God is near. You choose to press harder into Him. You know that there will be an end to the struggle. That God has you, and will not let the dry times be wasted.

Hebrews 11:1

Thank you for sharing!!!

• This reply was modified 5 years, 8 months ago by Kimmi.

Jominkreesa

'Forth now! And fear no darkness!'

[Eitan]

Thank you too so much!

@kimlikesart

Thank you for sharing the verse!

You don't need to see the wind itself in order to hear the rustling leaves.

[Anne of Lothlorien]

@eitan *hugs* Um, are you a hug person? I am. Sorry if you’re not. 😀 Just wanted to let you know you are not alone and never will be.

What language is this translated from? Is English not your first language? Where are you from? If you don’t mind me asking…

I'm short, I like words, and I love people.
No, I didn't draw my profile pic.

[Eitan]

@anne-of-lothlorien

Oh, thank you so much! (:

I’m Israeli, so the poem is translated from Hebrew.

You don't need to see the wind itself in order to hear the rustling leaves.

[Anne of Lothlorien]

@eitan That’s so cool! I really wish I could hear it in the original Hebrew. It’s a beautiful sounding language, in my opinion.

I'm short, I like words, and I love people.
No, I didn't draw my profile pic.

[Emberynus The Dragonslayer]

@eitan

Sorry I just now saw this. This is beautiful! your poetry is so vivid and full of emotion. I love it! 🙂

Sold souls and dead promises

[Eitan]

@emberynus-the-dragonslayer

Thank you very much!

Anne of Lothlorien wrote:

That’s so cool! I really wish I could hear it in the original Hebrew. It’s a beautiful sounding language, in my opinion.

Hmm, I’ve never thought of Hebrew as beautiful, but maybe it’s because I’m used to it 🙂 The translation is excellent in general, but sometimes it does’t get all the details.

You don't need to see the wind itself in order to hear the rustling leaves.

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