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  • #116770
    Eitan
    @eitan

    A poem I’d written today while an uneasy time I had… Do you also pray through poetry sometimes?

    Anyway – The translation doesn’t contain much of the artistic beauty of the original (rhyme, meter, and – suddenly, when needed, English decided to not have enough words), but I think I should share it anyway. I hope it’ll help someone(s) there 🙂

    Thank @kimlikesart for the metaphor of desert / wilderness to those trials 🙂

    Critiques, likes and grammatical corrections are welcome!

     

    The fire fades in my soul

     

    The fire fades in my soul

    Only embers are left of my bonfire

    And my candle dies down inside me

    And my light goes out my heart

    Ignite my passion in me again

     

    Renew a clean, pure heart in me

    That is burning, hungry, thirsty for the light

    My God, please give in me thoughts

    That wander only towards You

    Renew a holy, white heart in me

     

    So I shall desire only You, please

    And shall wait and hope to Your presence

    Purify my head from meaninglessness

    And be the main thing in my life

    You redeemed me and I am Yours

     

    My God, to You I shall beg

    For I could not darn it

    I shall not renew my heart

    But only Your sovereign power will

    Renew in me a laughing, singing heart

     

    I will know, and remember – You are with me

    I am not alone against my trouble

    You will give me Your supreme power

    With which I shall pass through any trial

    Strengthen me in the heart of the desert

     

    When You will give an end to the wilderness

    I will lift up my eyes in humility

    I will know and remember and not forget

    You are with me – In You I will trust

    Embrace me in love

    • This topic was modified 1 year ago by Eitan.

    You don't need to see the wind itself in order to hear the rustling leaves.

    #116773
    Sam M
    @sam-m

    @eitan

    Hi, Eitan. I really liked your poem. It’s very relatable. Thanks for posting it. 🙂

    #116784
    Kimmi
    @kimlikesart

    @eitan

    It is very good. Though in the desert, and feeling alone, you choose to have faith that God is near. You choose to press harder into Him. You know that there will be an end to the struggle. That God has you, and will not let the dry times be wasted.

    Hebrews 11:1

    Thank you for sharing!!!

    • This reply was modified 1 year ago by Kimmi.

    Jominkreesa

    Passion = A Willingness To Suffer

    #116871
    Eitan
    @eitan

    Thank you too so much!


    @kimlikesart

    Thank you for sharing the verse!

    You don't need to see the wind itself in order to hear the rustling leaves.

    #117725
    Anne of Lothlorien
    @anne-of-lothlorien

    @eitan *hugs* Um, are you a hug person? I am. Sorry if you’re not. 😀 Just wanted to let you know you are not alone and never will be.

    What language is this translated from? Is English not your first language? Where are you from? If you don’t mind me asking…

    I'm short, I like words, and I love people.
    No, I didn't draw my profile pic.

    #117831
    Eitan
    @eitan

    @anne-of-lothlorien

    Oh, thank you so much! (:

    I’m Israeli, so the poem is translated from Hebrew.

    You don't need to see the wind itself in order to hear the rustling leaves.

    #117857
    Anne of Lothlorien
    @anne-of-lothlorien

    @eitan That’s so cool! I really wish I could hear it in the original Hebrew. It’s a beautiful sounding language, in my opinion.

    I'm short, I like words, and I love people.
    No, I didn't draw my profile pic.

    #117911
    Emberynus The Dragonslayer
    @emberynus-the-dragonslayer

    @eitan

    Sorry I just now saw this. This is beautiful! your poetry is so vivid and full of emotion. I love it! 🙂

    Sold souls and dead promises

    #117936
    Eitan
    @eitan

    @emberynus-the-dragonslayer

    Thank you very much!

    That’s so cool! I really wish I could hear it in the original Hebrew. It’s a beautiful sounding language, in my opinion.

    Hmm, I’ve never thought of Hebrew as beautiful, but maybe it’s because I’m used to it 🙂 The translation is excellent in general, but sometimes it does’t get all the details.

    You don't need to see the wind itself in order to hear the rustling leaves.

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