The Fledgling Artist

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The fact that it took ages is mostly my fault. I’m way too wordy. 🙂

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I hope I’m not tagging you to death!

If you try to edit one of your poems, I’d love to see what you do!

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Alrighty! I got myself a bit more free time, so let me try to help with your second poem. This is such a sweet poem…

So, when you have a more measured poem like this one, you need to decide on a pattern and stick with it. You have points where every line rhymes, and you have points when you alternate. You have sections…[Read more]

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When I have more time, I’ll discuss meter with you a bit. 🙂

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Have a bit of time now. Let’s see how far I can go.

I agree with Evelyn on your first poem. The thought behind it is beautiful.

I think the goal here is to Show, Not Tell. Right now, you are telling me what I should see, but you aren’t letting me feel it. Poetry is all about feeling something.

In order to help me feel the…[Read more]

Dagger K blinked, still processing all that had just happened. “Yeah. He’s even stranger than I thought he would be.”

The Immortal gave Dagger a pointed look.

“What? He is.” Dagger turned back to the viewing portal. “Oh look. He’s going to involve himself directly.”

The Immortal looked at the scene. “Hm. Just as long as he doesn’t do…[Read more]

@eden-anderson O thank you! Yes! I’m a Dutchie living in the Netherlands (:

@the-fledgling-artist That’s a big compliment! I actually am just as clueless as you are. The only time I ever rhyme (ha!) is at Sinterklaas. Which is a holliday in the Netherlands where we give each other presents and a funny poem to go allong with it. I think your Santa…[Read more]

@the-fledgling-artist What are you working on btw? Sorry! I had to reply and run : )

I’ve been working on it off and since last year, but I am really to try to make time and make a goal to finish the first draft and a couple of months.

@lin @the-fledgling-artist Thanks for commenting guys! It makes me feel so much better to know I’m not alone! ❤️

@evelyn

Aw, thanks! You are so encouraging and inspiring! *squishes you to death with hedge-hugs*

Thanks so much for the advice!! THIS IS SO AWESOME!!! I can’t wait to try out what I’ve learned! Thank you, thank you, thank you!!!…[Read more]

( @the-fledgling-artist She can essentially sense it. She doesn’t need Avery to tell her, but she doesn’t see and hear and such in the traditional sense.)

@the-fledgling-artist I don’t know much about poetry but I gotta say the second one really touched me. Beautiful!

@the-fledgling-artist Thanks, I’ve been working on it. 🙂

@the-fledgling-artist *LE GASP* OHO! Avery!

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I love them! The second one in particular is gorgeous! What a lovely message!

When I have a bit more time I’ll take a closer look. Just wanted to let you know it’s on my radar. 😉

Kor stared at the… thing that had appeared in a giant cloud of… something sparkly. He sneezed again, whatever the sparkly stuff was, it was sticking to him and he didn’t like it. And neither did his nose apparently. Then a strange sound assaulted his ears. It was West, coughing.

Korzen looked at him worriedly. “Are you okay?”

West nodded,…[Read more]

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He looks good to me. Though I would agree with @sarah-inkdragon about the boots. But I love his eyes. I think they definitely add to his reserved aura, but they also seem knowledgeable and kind. Plus, they’re blue…so yeah. 😉

@sarah-inkdragon

That color list is super cool! I’ve thought about it some how the colors and…[Read more]

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So, I’ve actually been researching color theory and how it relates to people’s perceptions of characters(and people in general XD), and I found this cool little list of colors and how they make people view the character in both negative and positive ways:

Black
Positive: Reliability, classiness, formality,…[Read more]

@lin, @evelyn, @k-a-grey, @the-fledgling-artist, @eden-anderson… (I think I got everyone)

I’m so glad you are thinking of poetry! That in and of itself is payment enough (though I will take some hedge-hugs or normal hugs!). Evelyn gave you some excellent advice, so some of what I’m saying will be copying her with different words (sometimes you…[Read more]

@kari-karast I have to remind myself not to slouch when I write him!! *cries* I find myself taking his stance when I’m thinking about him.

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Scarlet barely had his eyes open when the creature approached. He regestiered it hitting him in the head, but it vanished before he could figure it out. Suddenly his hand began glowing, a intricate c…[Read more]