Story_Guardian

@rose-colored-fancy

Khalon can make the first move if that’s fine with you. If what I post is not going to spark an interaction with Aydin, just let me know. Oh, and by the way, Khalon is no longer blowing his trumpet and has cautiously inched around Qatar.

KHALON

Khalon breathed deeply. He had not ten minutes in this place and was already b…[Read more]

@rose-colored-fancy that was actually completely unintentional!  I wasn’t even thinking about that when I wrote it, but oh my gosh it actually makes sense

Huh.  When I was first thinking about it, I thought he and Skia would both feel awful about it, because they’re no longer “useful.”  But that’s actually pretty interesting!  Maybe he wou…[Read more]

@inkhorn

That’s hilarious that you names one of your characters Khalon. And I would love to have Khalon interact with Aydin. I would like to see how he would react to a traumatized ex-assassin.

Awesome! I’d love to see their reactions too XD Do you want me to make Aydin make the first move or do you have any ideas? (It’s out of character for A…[Read more]

@rose-colored-fancy

That’s hilarious that you names one of your characters Khalon. And I would love to have Khalon interact with Aydin. I would like to see how he would react to a traumatized ex-assassin.

@noah-cochran

They did eventually salt the roads, but left the house at like 6:50 in the morning, so they didn’t have much time to do it before we were driving.

Huh, that’s odd! With us they usually salt it the night before. I’m glad it was cleared up though!

Technically, you write faster than I do, I just force myself to get up early and put in t…

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@inkhorn

Okay so something really funny happened XD I was naming a minor side character (He’s just there to fill a background role, he’s barely a character XD) and I was running through a list of names and picked Khalon because it sounded cool.

I had the faint idea that it sounded familiar but didn’t remember about your character until a while…[Read more]

Same!  I wrote in third person a lot, and I don’t think I started trying out first person until I wrote Saskia’s first POV.  It’s way easier to get into your character’s heads, but descriptions are harder, at least for me.  But that’s one of the beautiful things about this game!  It’s all about experimentation and learning 🙂

Yikes!  Are you…[Read more]

@mamaauthoress growth is growth, even if it occurs at the rate of a redwood tree lol

Aww man!  Well if SE ever lets you, I would love to see some!

Idk Ruan, are you sure about that?

Ruan’s quite physically intimidating, right?  At least, that’s the impression I have!  Something tells me he’s kind of oblivious though…

Really?  I’m gla…[Read more]

Basil:

“I … come from a den of thieves,” the man mumbled, eyes downcast. “I was raised in a village full of immorality and crime, the son of a single mother.”

I narrow my eyes up at him.  He sounds embarrassed, no, ashamed.  But of what?  I thought all areas of human habitation are full of immorality and crime.  And isn’t it normal to be the chi…[Read more]

So, if two guards have Jake between them, and at the beginning of the scene, Jake is unconscious, his body would be hanging slack between them, lower than their waistline.  Any striking to be done would be below the guard’s waistline with Jake’s body angled down to a slant to the floor.  A knee to the stomach would require one of the guards to rel…[Read more]

“What’s your opinion?”

Nithel’s blood ran cold a moment when he heard those words, upon realizing they were directed at him.

The dragon rumbled, “We should move on.”

The thing’s presence was unsettling, but Nithel thought the phrase had saved him from answering. Nithel slowly stood with his new bag, sheathing his knife.

“Noted.” Alessio looke…[Read more]

@obrian-of-the-surface-world

Thank you for the tip! I was thinking something was off with that scene! If one of the guards hit Jake in the stomach with his knee, would that work?

I just love how Story Embers has writers and authors of various age groups!

Hi @scoutfinch190

I noticed something here…

Think about the physical proximity of the two guards that would be on either side of him.  Punching their captive in the mouth would make more sense if he was upright and facing them, or pinned to the wall.  At best, a guard might give him a grazing blow down the side of his jaw, but that would b…[Read more]

(I’m gonna add this into part two) The reason the prisoners are working manually is because the dirt holds a flammable material that may ignite if they used heavy machinery.

@joy-caroline

(I remembered telling you about this so I wanted to tag you as well 😁)

Here’s part two!

@this-is-not-an-alien @obrian-of-the-surface-world @Gracie-J, @lissie-w, @fitz, @jbstanhope @rose-colored-fancy

(I block quoted the beginning because I’m considering removing it)

A brief FYI: a character does say ” if I’m to go to h—, I’ll take some with me”, I know some people are sensitive to the use of the word ‘Hell…[Read more]

@this-is-not-an-alien @obrian-of-the-surface-world @Gracie-J, @lissie-w, @fitz, @jbstanhope @rose-colored-fancy

Here’s part two!

(I block quoted the beginning because I’m considering removing it)

A brief FYI: a character does say ” if I’m to go to h—, I’ll take some with me”, I know some people are sensitive to the use of the word ‘Hell…[Read more]

@this-is-not-an-alien

Hi! sorry that part two’s been taking so long, I didn’t eralize how much i needed to change for the benefit of the storyline…🤦‍♀️ And… it’s not easy being a professional procrastinator.

Ooh, what tragic symbolism did you set up for?

Yeah, the over-analysis of symbolism in books i can understand, but it’s still…[Read more]