Noah Litle

@eden-anderson

Don’t be embarrassed. I’m the one at fault for not making that clear. 🙂

Do you think you could nail down what about him made you think he was so old?

@kate Pounded —  Beaten — What’s the difference? I end up as a pulp either way. XD *meanwhile:* *wondering how you waltz to music that is obviously in four* *walks away baffled*

@literatureforthelight Thank you for not pounding(beating?) me to a pulp.

@eden-anderson I thanked him for you. 🙂

@daeus-lamb So.. do we get to read the other entries?

@eden-anderson Thanks for tagging me.

@bama-rose

Hey, sorry it’s taken me so long to get here.

Right now I’m critiquing something for another friend of mine, but I’m hoping to get that done sometime this week. Hopefully today.

After that I can be here. I have to warn you though, I tend to be rather blunt.

Is it a complete story? Or is it just…[Read more]

@eden-anderson

Okay. XD

Yeah… Worthy and Match are both 17.

I’m having a hard time imagining Worthy going through that at 50. XD

Abul and Diomedes are around 50.

*groans, trying to recover from being beaten into a pulp*

I don’t believe it! How did we do this?

This calls for something a little more grand and triumphant!

Rhapsody in Blue

My little brother suggested this song as more appropriate: Yakety Sax. You’re welcome. XD

I can’t wait to read the other entries.

@brandon-miller and @kate Thank you so much for submitting the piece.

Thanks to Daeus Lamb for judging the contest.

And thank you to everyone who commented and suggested edits:

@corissa @sesi @germaine-han @chalice @bama-rose @eden-anderson and especially @literatureforthelight @kate , who did the most edits. Misty wouldn’t be what it is w…[Read more]

Alright. I have to go to work.

Thank you all for your input so far. You guys keep editing if you can. I’ll probably be back tonight.

@kate Are you going to be submitting it? What time does it need to be submitted?

Whoever’s submitting it, be sure and take “Draft 2” off the title before submitting it. Or am I the only one who can do…[Read more]

@kate @corissa @bama-rose  @msqueen8  @raemarie  @eden-anderson  @r-m-archer  @germaine-han  @sesi  @chalice  @literatureforthelight

Hey, where is everyone? I’m working on the document right now. I would appreciate it if anyone could help.

Last day, guys. Let’s get this polished up.

Okay, guys. I went through it, and approved most everything. I left some things with comments, and some things I left for later. I’ll be back tonight to work on it some more.

@kate @corissa @bama-rose  @msqueen8  @raemarie  @eden-anderson  @r-m-archer  @germaine-han  @sesi  @chalice  @literatureforthelight

Just in case:

Misty Draft 2

@kate That’s alright. Thank you for going through it. I’m skimming your comments now.

I’ll probably approve most of your edits. I’ll go through tomorrow morning and evening and try to do most of the heavy editing/approving/rejecting.

What do you think about the chords?

Alright, guys. Second draft is here:

USE THIS LINK→ Misty Draft 2 ←USE THIS LINK (Just so you don’t get it confused with the  first draft. 🙂

I’ve got to run, but I’ve put some comments on already. Also, I won’t be working on it until Sunday.

@kate Any idea when the exact deadline is?

Whenever it is, it’s just a few short days, guys. Be sure…[Read more]

@eden-anderson Please do! Thanks so much. I really appreciate your time.

You’re not the first person to bring up the story world. I’m not entirely sure how to show it clearly, without getting into a bunch of telling that would pull you out of the character’s head. Maybe I could have an omniscient intro? Or maybe something like a narrator?

Just…[Read more]

@eden-anderson

I’m curious to know how the genera changes your opinion of it.

Here are some reasons you shouldn’t be afraid of critiquing other people’s work:

1) Knowledge and experience don’t matter. I personally would value a well thought out critique from a non-writer. Ultimately, we want to put our writing in the hands of non-writers, why…[Read more]

Thank you, @kate @sesi !!

@kate Would you be less likely to skim it if the chords were written out (example below) or were you talking about skimming another part?

Ebm7 = E flat minor seven.

F#maj7 = F sharp major seven.

@eden-anderson

Thank you!!!

It’s fantasy. Or it could be alternate history.

Kind of like San Fransokyo from Big Hero 6. But different. If that makes any sense.

Does the genera change your opinion of it?

@jzhurricane

Thanks! I’ll try and get to it as soon as I can. It might take a few days.  Working on our Guild war submission right now. I mean, I’m supposed to be. XD

I will try my best to get you some feedback before the end of next week (the 21st).

@eden-anderson Thank you! Are you a musician?

He’s dreaming the whole thing, and then the last part (in third person) is real life. I added an intro so that’s a little more clear.

And @chalice, thank you!

Before I get too carried away, one thing I would really like to know: is there too much music theory?

If everyone could just tell me yes or no on that one, it would help me a lot.

Thanks.

@kate @corissa @bama-rose @msqueen8 @raemarie @eden-anderson @r-m-archer @germaine-han @sesi @chalice @literatureforthelight

Alright guys, rewriting. Feel free to keep editing until I post the second draft. I’ll be referencing it as I rewrite.

Thank you, @germaine-han @sesi @chalice and especially @literatureforthelight for all your help.

Here we go again. 🙂

@kate @corissa @bama-rose @msqueen8 @raemarie @eden-anderson @r-m-archer

@jzhurricane

I would be happy to give you some feedback.

I think you did alright with the Synopsis for what it’s for.

The way I’ve done it here, is to copy the document and paste the whole thing onto a Google doc file. Then share the link here. And if you want us to comment or suggest edits, you’ll have to choose that option when you get the…[Read more]