Maya Joelle

@calidris

I actually had an idea that I could sub in Kit for that interaction instead, because he’s way more…umm…assertive than Val, with the added bonus of his own puffed up ego.  I think it would be funny to see them clash XD

Ooooh, that’s a good idea! I would love to write her reaction to him since she’s not really big on people seeing her as an equal.

@inkhorn I’d love that!

I actually had an idea that I could sub in Kit for that interaction instead, because he’s way more…umm…assertive than Val, with the added bonus of his own puffed up ego.  I think it would be funny to see them clash XD

If you’d rather work with Val, that’s totally fine too!  It would be a good exercise in a…[Read more]

@wingiby-iggiby

Looks like everyone had awesome answers, so I’m just popping in to recommend Abbie Emmons on YouTube for any writing/editing tips. She’s super helpful and straightforward and most (I’ll say most because she does use movie examples from films I would not watch XD) of her stuff is clean.

Kit:

My shoes clatter in the thick silence as I sprint towards the light ahead.  Compared to that last challenge, this honestly seems pretty good.  And that last challenge is really the last thing I wanted to remember, so that’s why I’m choosing to focus on our lovely dinner instead.  Specifically, that time Val said my hair looked soft and si…[Read more]

@wingiby-iggiby

*Hurtles into the room surrounded by a cloud of pink glitter*

BROOOKEE!!!! WINGIBY!!!! I MISSED YOU!!! *Gives you a huge hug*

I missed you so much, it’s so amazing to hear from you again! You have to tell me all about how your project is going!!

Your characters are not talking back, are they?

… It’s Liorah, what were…[Read more]

Hello @wingiby-iggiby

R. M. Archer put some really good advice in here, so I’ll just tack on this tidbit:

If you know that your first book needs major edits, definitely tackle that before you move on to the second. It’ll set the second book up with a better foundation in such a situation.

And I’d be happy to beta read your novel 🙂 I love beta…[Read more]

Hey! Welcome back!

You might not like this answer, but I’d say it’s whatever works best for your story. With some series, it’s definitely better to edit the first book first. I have a duology I’ll almost certainly refine book 1 in before I write book 2, or at least before I expect book 2 to offer a solid foundation to work from. Meanwhile, my…[Read more]

Crorie was briefly surprised that she said that out-loud. However, there was no taking it back. If she was going to be punished, there would be no escaping it. However, Leana was rather calm about it. She didn’t lash out.

The door opened.

Arsene peeked his head through the door, with a talon knife in his hand. There was a brief pause, as he…[Read more]

When the armored fighter left, Hades decided to get whatever rest he could get. He was unaware of what Beskar steel was, but he knew that it was not invincible. Even if he couldn’t penetrate it the armor itself, certain areas like the joints and neck likely consisted of a weaker material. Still, he didn’t want to test that theory, unless he had…[Read more]

CON

Con watched as Hades launched the pommel of his knife into his codpiece. It struck, but did nothing. This was then followed up with a kick to the same spot, which also did nothing.

“Your
armor may be resistant
to the energy of my
sword, but how many
physical blows can it
take?” Hades commented

“A lot,” Con replied as he pulled out a boo…[Read more]

Ooh, those were all so great and fascinating!

Here’s one for Mara:

As I lunge toward the giants, the floor disappears. In fact, everything disappears. Only a white mist whirls around me while I twist weightless in the air. Is this whole thing just a bad dream? It’s all too fantastical to be real.

Or not. Being thunked on the floor hurts ple…[Read more]

@inkhorn

Thank you! I can’t blame you XD

Also I loved your piece! Cahira sounds like quite a character, I can’t wait for her and Frey to interact XD I think he’ll annoy the heck out of her.

Okay time for Frey to meet his future self I guess! Also going to attempt to write this in second-person present because that’s… the weirdest tense I…[Read more]

Sir Scary somewhat obligingly sat down so Alessio flopped on the blankets as like someone falling to their death to a heroically resigned playlist. Which was going to be safer; burying himself under the blankets to be as invisible as possible or pushing the blankets out of the way so he could react faster? This was stupid postulation: if anything…[Read more]

Cahira:

The horns blare outside with that unrelenting force that I know will eventually pull every human in the city from their bed, except for me. I’m already awake and out of bed.

I meticulously study my reflection in the mirror. My birthmark is dull after powdering it but still visible which is quite irking for someone of my significance.…[Read more]

Okay yessss here we go! I’m excited! Fair warning, I may mess around with some weird tenses or points of view. I missed experimenting with those in here XD

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I grip the steel rails of my wheelchair and push, the motion as familiar as breathing by this time. It’s too cold for an April morning, the fog bunching thick around the tall…[Read more]

Val:

I suck in my breath as the giant rips his sword from the Castle’s chest.  The Castle’s lifeless form crashes to the floor.

Now what?

Are we free?

The ground shakes as the the body crumbles in a cloud of white dust.

“A worthy battle, Saevus.  Well done!  I suppose you’ll all be wanting your reward?  Very well then!  I’ll grant you all a …[Read more]

@ethan-leonard

Yessss awesome!

@everyone

I suggest we ‘resurrect’ Lord Castle so we have an antagonist again, so he just reappears in the form of the castle again, shuffles the rooms around and has all the existing characters reappear in a new room! That way all the new characters get a fresh start. Will that work or are there any other…[Read more]

Hey guys, sorry I haven’t been on lately. I’m gonna finish up here in one go hopefully…

Saevus ducked a blow from Lord Castle, and then returned the blow in like manner, only to be stopped by Castle’s blade. Swinging in again, Lord Castle parried Saevus’ blade, who immediately followed with a massive combination. Saevus brought down a vertica…[Read more]

“Ninny-hammers! Noodles! My beautiful rope!”  ~Samwise Gamgee

@e-n-leonard