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Clean\funny exclamations?

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  • #153156
    Jasmine
    @jasmine

    I recently was trying to find exclamations for my character’s dialog and was wondering if any one had any pointers?

    I think good exclamations can add comic relief to a story, but I have no idea how to find any that might work in a fantasy story. “Holly guacamole” doesn’t exactly fit in with the time line

    So if anyone has any ideas (especially funny ones) they will be greatly appreciated!

     

     

    P.S.

    No rude or vulgar speech. Please keep it clean.

     

     

     

     

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    #153158
    Rose
    @rose-colored-fancy

    @jasmine

    *Happy gasp* JASMINE!!!! I MISSED YOU!!!

    It’s been so long since I saw you around! How has writing been, how are your characters, what have you been up to!?

    Okay, to slow down… XD Lemme see, for situations like these I never quite know what to do but I am very partial to exaggeratedly dramatic insults like “I hope a jackal pees on your desendants’ graves” (May or may not have used that one XD)

    Other things you could think about. If you have any fictional concepts/mythology in your story, you could use that! Like make up a little backstory for the story they come from, and go with that! Like say you have a special kind of fictional mineral with some power, people might use its name as an exclamation!

    I suggest not really using common objects unless you’re really trying to be a bit ridiculous XD I mean… if you commit to it you can have a character exclaim “Scones!” if you really want, but I don’t necessarily recommend it unless it’s really in character XD

    Some people do genuinely do that, I have certain friends who call people ‘tortellini’s’ unironically so *shrugs* depends on your character!

    You can also just… smash some sounds together, like Brandon Sanderson did for Skyward, he just made up the word “scud” and applied it all over. That works!

    If you do make up words, you might want to make up multiple of different intensities, just to convey the nuance of that and so you don’t overuse one word!

    Anyway hope this helped!

    Without darkness, there is no light. If there was no nighttime, would the stars be as bright?

    #153159
    Jasmine
    @jasmine

    Anyway hope this helped!

     

    It did, thank you! 🙂

     

    It’s been so long since I saw you around! How has writing been, how are your characters, what have you been up to!?

    A ton of editing, lol. It’s really great to hear from my story-embers peeps again! How has character castle 2.0 been going?

     

     

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    #153168
    Brian Stansell
    @obrian-of-the-surface-world

    Hi Jasmine (@jasmine),

    Oh, girl!  This question is probably going to get me in so much trouble for my answers…but, here goes…

    Insults:

    Fool – That guy is two sandwiches shy of a picnic.

    Ugly – She had a face that could curdle milk.

    Smelly – That smells like the south end of a northbound mule.

    Too Young – I have cheese older than he is.

    Cowardly – He has the spine of a willow branch.

    Sickly – She looked like death warmed over.

    Pale – He had the complexion of a cave dweller.

    Unwanted – That’s about as welcome as another bucket of water poured into a sinking canoe.

    …I’m sure I’ll have others. 😋

    Brian Stansell (aka O'Brian of the Surface World)
    I was born in war.
    Fighting from my first breath.

    #153169
    Jasmine
    @jasmine

    Fool – That guy is two sandwiches shy of a picnic.

    😂

    I will use this, lol

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    #153170
    Brian Stansell
    @obrian-of-the-surface-world

    Hi @jasmine , here are a few more…

    Sour expression – She made a face that could pickle a cucumber.

    Dim-witted – If brains were gunpowder, he wouldn’t have enough to blow his nose.

    His ears are so close together, a single thought can barely pass through the narrow hallway between them.

    Cold – She had the warmth of a snow pea.

    His heart is so cold icicles flee from its cold darkness seeking a place to get warm.

    Bad voice – She sings like a bird…[pause]…caught between the claws of a cat.

    My mule’s braying hits more notes on key within a minute’s time than I’ve ever heard suffering through an hour’s worth of her caterwauling.

    What a miserable minstrel!  Here!  Make use of this sponge and stop his mouth with it.

    Complainer – I wish I could hone my saber to an edge as sharp as her tongue.

    Talkative – I might just take an auger to the drum in my ear, rather than play the audience to that prattler a moment more.

    Nonsense – He was never one to talk much sense until his liver swelled with at least a pint full of ale.

    Filthy – His clothes were rancid and home to thriving and boisterous colonies of lice who threatened to evict him for sullying their neighborhoods.

    Wishing ill – Why don’t you find yourself a hole somewhere and fall into it!

    Exclamations:

    Warts and Toadstools!

    Bracca! (Watership Down by Richard Adams)

    Pig’s Gullet!

    Swamp feet and hogs wallop!

    By the mast and moon!

    Gutter snipe!

    Cursed concoction!

    Squealing wobbly!

    May the fogs peel your eye of sight!

    Body rot and pestilence befall you!

    Driveling fool!

    Sulfurous slimeball!

    ———————

    Does any of this help?

    Brian Stansell (aka O'Brian of the Surface World)
    I was born in war.
    Fighting from my first breath.

    #153178
    Rose
    @rose-colored-fancy

    @jasmine

    A ton of editing, lol. It’s really great to hear from my story-embers peeps again! How has character castle 2.0 been going?

    Oooofff s a m e so many revisions 😭😭😭

    Ah yes, CC2.0. There has been a changing of the guard of sorts, I am the only member left of our old group back when we wrote iirc😢 (Excluding Cathy/ @this-is-not-an-alien  who doesn’t actively participate but still hangs around, reads some of the stuff and causes chaos as is her due XD) Though, it’s still a lot of fun with all the folks that started sooner or later! Lord Castle has kept his personality and name, he’s still wreaking havoc XD I have characters from my other WIP in there now, I ran out of characters in the WIP you remember XD

    What project are you currently working on?

    Without darkness, there is no light. If there was no nighttime, would the stars be as bright?

    #153204
    E. N. Leonard
    @e-n-leonard

    @jasmine

    When I’m coming up with exclamations, I usually draw from the story world and the character’s life. My favorite right now is probably “What the stupid flopping fish?”  (My character was a fisher)

    Sconeses, Precious? Seriously though, I’d be sooo disappointed if someone exclaimed SCONES! and there weren’t any 🙁

    Brian and Rose’s suggestions are all really good (and funny!).

    We are called to be lights in the cosmos.
    May your inkwells never run dry!

    #153205
    Blooming Grace
    @lady-grace

    “Ninny-hammers! Noodles! My beautiful rope!”  ~Samwise Gamgee


    @e-n-leonard

    A long-hidden tale may hold the answers-and the healing-they so desperately seek.
    ~Set the Stars Alight

    #153296
    Rusted Knight
    @rusted-knight

    Tim Hawkings-Alternative Cuss Words.

    its worth watching for this.

    The Devil saw me with my head down and got excited. Then I said Amen

    #155592
    Jasmine
    @jasmine

     

     

     

    Thanks for the inspiration guys! 🙂

     

     

     

    Seriously though, I’d be sooo disappointed if someone exclaimed SCONES! and there weren’t any 🙁

     

    Me too, actually. XD

     

     

     

     

    What project are you currently working on?

     

    Same one I was working on when I was doing character castle 🙂

    The collaborative story I’m doing with my friend

     

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