Jordyn Emma West

I also had this thought as I was writing their first date that I kinda don’t want him to go bad and want them to just have good dating relationship so ya…

Ya I’m 14 too…almost 15…I didn’t put any details but just that he did. If yo want I can send a docs link so you can see…

@erynne Thank you. I feel like everyone has to deal with this stuff sometime in their writing journey.

I usually use Lord of the Rings or Wingfeather Saga as my reference. Both deal with relationships (even hard ones), and both have smoking and maybe some alcohol, but neither have language, and the men treat ladies with respect. I draw my line in…[Read more]

@arindown

Excellent advice!

@melancholicwriter

This is a rough topic to approach. It’s nothing to be taken lightly for sure. I like your plot line though.

How old are you? I’m only 14 so idk that I would necessarily write something like that because I don’t think I could. I don’t know that I could even if I was an adult.

I can talk to you more when I found out how old you are 😉

@melancholicwriter

That’s some pretty heavy stuff. For me (I’m 17), I try to stay away from all that stuff. Not because it doesn’t happen, and not because Christians shouldn’t address it, but because I’d rather write from an optimists point of view…encouraging good relationships, and leave the pessimist (dealing with hard relationships) to…[Read more]

Thanks for your opinion @zee! I will definitely take it into consideration.

Well, @erynne, if your heroine dies, the romance certainly won’t go anywhere. While I can see how you could find some resolution to the other elements of your story, and still have her die at the end, but a romance aborted just before it gets off the ground would be even more disappointing (to me) than one that never really got started at all.

My…[Read more]

<p style=”text-align: left;”>@zee</p>
Thanks for your opinion!

When I first came up with the idea for this story, I had no intensions for it to have any romance in it, then as I got more detailed with the plot the romance just kind of slipped in. If that makes sense.

I will definitely consider your suggestions, but I feel I were reading a book…[Read more]

@erynne, it sounds like you have the bones of a fascinating story here–however, if your heroine dies before she gets married, I wonder why there’s a strong romance element in the plot at all. It sounds like the main story is really more of a family drama-type story, where the heroine has to come to terms with what she (accidentally) did to her…[Read more]

@erynne

Thanks!  Hmmm, I thought I responded on your art thread…  probably me being scatter-brained… again. 😊  I LOVED it though!!  I thought you did an amazing job, especially with the ocean ❤

Oh yes, of course!!  I completely get it!!!

Ooo, I love that one too!!!  So sweet. 🥰

Yep.  That stuff gets super annoying.  And VERY cringy.…[Read more]

@erynne

You’re welcome for the tips. 🙂

I actually have several different romances going rn. LOL 😆

@emberynus-the-dragonslayer

Thank you for the tips!! They are very helpful 🙂

I’ve had to stop reading a few books over the romance in it, and it really upsets me that that is even necessary.

What is your romance story about?

@erynne

hey. Sorry I’m jumping in her late.

I echo a lot of what @writergirl said.

Clean romance is very very important to me, and as a writer of YA and adult Romance I know that sometimes that gets very difficult. Good ways to regulate your romance could be to have a family member read it for you. If that’s not an option for you, then maybe a…[Read more]

@writergirl101

I’m kind of hoping that this one gets people to cry. That’s sounds absolutely awful, but I LOVE the stories that make me cry and if I can get other people to cry over my stories it means I’m not doing to bad as a writer. 😁 So it all makes sense if you think about it through my prospective.

I totally agree with you on your views of…[Read more]

@erynne

Hey Erynne!  Aw, your story sounds tragic!!!  That might actually make me cry if I ever read it!! 😢

Oh, I totally feel you when it comes to reading/writing Christian romance!  People can be so messed up, and a lot of it shows in their writing.  The fine line between beautiful romance and bad stuff is sooo hard to write.  I don’t writ…[Read more]