Linyang Zhang

@daeus-lamb So basically this character is the Crown Prince of basically everyone. His personal motivation and goal is to show the Magic Users that the reason why they can’t have a happy ending is because of their wicked deeds. He plans to do so by performing evil acts so that when he’s punished, he will be an example to all, so that no one will…[Read more]

On that note, I would like to ask, is it okay to portray through a story what God isn’t? Like I have a character whom I would have to describe as as my ‘Christ-figure’, except he’s completely evil.

@emgc Thank you for your feedback!

Yeah, those are some very good pointers and helpful advice! I’ll definitely be using them.

I usually find that giving descriptions about characters in short stories is a little bit overboard, but I guess you’re right; I could probably just describe them a little bit. And I probably should have just introduced…[Read more]

Hmm since the doc is also on view-only for me, even with the new link… Maybe try describing more of the surroundings? How someone from back then? Like the Mona Lisa doesn’t know what a sink is, probably. Or a camera, or those red lines across the door…

Hmm yeah plotting is always good. What I usually do is just plot out major events in each book and then as I write each chapter/scene I just let things take their own course. Often very unexpected things happen, but they add to the plot. 🙂

@warrenluther04 Yes, staying up late is…interesting. Often when I’m tird I can’t function at all, but one time I didn’t sleep for 36 hours straight, so…

Cool. I just assumed it had to do something with your lion pic or something.

@emgc Oh, I’d love to add you as a buddy…if I had an account.

I don’t have an account because it’d be pointless for me to handwrite and then have no way to transfer it.

*sigh*

If I ever do get an account, I’ll tell you.

By the way, what does your username mean?

At the end of the scene, her goal has shifted to getting her memory back, and that leads her to seek for power. then her friends are basically left without her as leader.

Oh, I tagged myself and those tags didn’t work…eep.

Ahhh you named them Darnay ….. *Tale of Two Cities feels*

Anyways.

Nice job. I actually haven’t tried to write a ‘normal school scene’ before, I don’t think. I haven’t read one in a long time, either, so that was a nice change.

-Character development – I get a good enough sense of what they’re like, though it’s too early in the story for me…[Read more]

Ooh, that was intense. It worked well for a prologue.

-Intriguing – definitely intriguing. I want to see what happens.

– Character – I honestly don’t think that character descriptions are all that necessary in a prologue. You did fine.

– Plot -Yes, the story flows well. I got what was happening.

All in all, I really want to see how this world…[Read more]

Oh my goodness, I was so busy I completely forgot that this was to be deleted. I’m really sorry I didn’t get to critique this.

Alright, Allison. I just read your story.

It was pretty good, though there’s definitely room for improvement. Your characters have strong personalities, and I like the way you kept on repeating that phrase, ‘Murderer, monster…’.

Your story flowed a little too fast for my taste, but I got all of the details. After all, it’s just a short story.…[Read more]

This week:

-Transcribe

-Take test

-Critique

-Write two pages every day

@emgc I’ve got a notebook all picked out, and eight new pens waitng for me to use them. Even if I don’t win, I’m still going to challenge it. 😉

Ah, yes. I often finish writing books, but just as often, forget to type them. or put it off. Or forget to.

Finally I’m getting around to everyone’s pieces. I want to finish critiquing for September before I post October’s.

First of all, I just, simply love this piece that you posted. It’s..just…so…I don’t know…I just really like it. You kept the story flowing, and made me want to keep on reading, to find out what happens next.

Flow- It flowed…[Read more]

I did it last year, but I failed miserably…but I did get a good head start on a novel. I planning on doing it this year and hoping to win, if I can finish my current novel by October 31st. (Only need to write two pages per day for that.) I don’t actually use the website for doing it, I just calculated that filling one of my notebooks in my…[Read more]