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Ahhh you named them Darnay ….. *Tale of Two Cities feels*

Anyways.

Nice job. I actually haven’t tried to write a ‘normal school scene’ before, I don’t think. I haven’t read one in a long time, either, so that was a nice change.

-Character development – I get a good enough sense of what they’re like, though it’s too early in the story for me to know. i think it’s just right for a first chapter. (Though…are Alex and Kyle those two people on the newspaper? Because it seemed kinda obvious, if they were. But the foreshadowing works.)

Setting/Worldbuilding- I’m guessing they’re in like the suburbs/city? A nice neighborhood in the 21st century? That was what I got, anyway.

Plot- The story flows smoothly, though I was a little confused about who tripped whom in the first part. Also, I’m used to breaking up my writing into a lot of paragraphs, so reading huge chunks at a time was kinda hard for me.

All in all, I like it. I do want to find out what happens next.