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@emgc Thank you for your feedback!

Yeah, those are some very good pointers and helpful advice! I’ll definitely be using them.

I usually find that giving descriptions about characters in short stories is a little bit overboard, but I guess you’re right; I could probably just describe them a little bit. And I probably should have just introduced them at first instead of revealing who they were through dialogue. That would clear up the confusion.

Thanks again for reading, and I’m glad you liked it!