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Ooh, that was intense. It worked well for a prologue.

-Intriguing – definitely intriguing. I want to see what happens.

– Character – I honestly don’t think that character descriptions are all that necessary in a prologue. You did fine.

– Plot -Yes, the story flows well. I got what was happening.

All in all, I really want to see how this world works and what happens. Sorry if this critique is kinda short- maybe after I see your next piece I’ll have more to say.