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@scribbles WHOOT WHOOT! Kay, that is awesome! What an accomplishment!

This story had such a great setting! I felt the cool, chilly morning air, and I felt the trailer sway beneath me. For some reason, I imagined a really vivid background and, even though you never quite said this, I saw like maybe a slightly dated, coal miners town or a…[Read more]

@happyholly_c First off, hello!!! 😀

Secondly, I am still learning about the showing vs. telling, when-to, how-to, etc. so I’m afraid I’m not much help in that department. I did find quite a few grammatical boo-boos, but nothing major. The writing style kind of reminded me of a Junie B. Jones story.

I find it a little strange that Ben was the…[Read more]

@rolena-hatfield and @scribbles Seriously!! It’s been six years for me too since HS graduation and time FLIES! It’s crazy! My dad once told me that as you grow, time gets exponentially faster. He was so right! It’s scary how fast it goes by.

Rachel, I love the beautiful imagery you use! The language is vivid and paints a clear picture. The…[Read more]

@the-golden-light I loved the Ascendance Trilogy!! And I’m a total sucker for the Chronicles of Narnia. LOTR is classic and amazing. Great taste!

To echo previous recommendations, The Giver is absolutely excellent, a Nebery Medal Winner. It asks some difficult questions and is very well-written. I also highly recommend Lois Lowry’s Gossamer. Erago…[Read more]

@rolena-hatfield and @scribbles Daw, thanks guys. 🙂

@ajaj2000 Um, I’m not sure how to answer that. Sorry :/ Could you explain the question more? I’ll check out the link! Thanks!

@scribbles and @rolena-hatfield

Um, so okay here is a link to the full The Little Fairy. I also put some of the Untitled Mermaid (starts on pg. 15; should be marked in the outline to easily jump down.) draft at the bottom. Please feel free to read as much or as little as you like.

These are both basically first drafts. I know the ending of The…[Read more]

1. Head hung low/head against knees/head in hands

2. Eyes squeezed tightly shut/tear-stained face/face twisted or contorted

3. Arms thrown up/arms wrapped around knees/hands in hair with fingers spread apart and curved

4. Shouting out

5. Shoulders slumped

6. Chin quivering/body trembling

7. Sitting somewhere alone, looking out blankly

8.…[Read more]

@scribbles Wait! Pecans! I want pecans!! Addicted to pecan pie!

@rolena-hatfield I don’t know that I’ve ever had a lemon flavored muffin, but I love lemony desserts!! They’re probably my favorite. (Also a HUGE fan of pecan pie!) I like the cranberries more than the orange, personally, but I’ve never had a straight up cranberry muffin, and the orange does have a nice mild flavor in the background.

Oh my gosh!…[Read more]

@brandon-miller Oh, wow! Blueberry banana sounds like a blast!! I’ve never tried those two together! Yum! Have one for me next time you see her!

@rolena-hatfield Hah! That does sound like an adventure!! My family’s crazy, so we’d have made some memories for sure. XD And, actually, I’ve got to credit my younger sister with the cashew invention.…[Read more]

@scribbles Hehe, I’ve got a couple of those pieces. The ones that never need to see the light of day…ever…ever. *shudder* Ever.

@brandon-miller Rats! *mumbles* Stupid alarm clock…

@rolena-hatfield Hello!! 😀 It’s nice to meet you! I’m glad to hear you’ve made it home safely and I hope you enjoyed your trip! I am absolutely ecstatic to be here! 😀 And, I’ve got the best muffin recipe there ever was 😉 At school, I was famous for them. XD Worked mostly with blueberry, banana (and banana nut), and chocolate chip, but the…[Read more]

@rolena-hatfield Oh my gosh! XD Some say I’m a lil obsessed with Tink. I have a light up Tinker Bell on my shoe (some cool croc accessory my grandparents got me). I lost it once at school and a girl returned it when she found it, knew it was mine XD Everyone at school eventually learned that Tinker Bell was mine. Sadness, though, the dog I’m…[Read more]

@ajaj2000 Thanks! I need it!

@rolena-hatfield Wibbly wobbly timey wimey!!! Let’s go see the stars! 😉

@scribbles Thanks so much for taking the time to stop by! 😀

I’m glad you enjoyed the excerpts from the story. I do have a finished draft, if you’re still interested. It’s still a bit of a draft, but there are a few more characters you haven’t met here and the story may make a little more sense without skipping around.

Thanks for the input! I…[Read more]