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Abrielle started the topic Short story in the forum Fantasy Writers 2 years, 9 months ago
Hi guys! I recently finished a short story (though it is technically a little long for a ‘short story’). I was wondering, would anybody be willing to give me feedback on it? If your willing to read it but don’t have time for in-depth criticism, my big question is, is it worth turning into a full length novel?
Well, here goes.
Crow
The…[Read more]
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RAE joined the group Historical Fiction Writers 2 years, 9 months ago
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Abrielle replied to the topic Character Castle 2.0 in the forum Fantasy Writers 2 years, 9 months ago
Also, sorry. I noticed we had a theme going for the fashion show and I totally ruined it. Apologies.
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Abrielle replied to the topic Character Castle 2.0 in the forum Fantasy Writers 2 years, 9 months ago
No problem! I just got back from a summer camp, so I’ve not had a whole lot of time either. What all are you up to this summer?
Also, Rhianna’s speech was great. It was spot on.
Mara seems like fun. She and Rhianna should get along great (rather, they won’t, but it’ll be great anyways🙃).
Denari
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RAE replied to the topic Research of less-than-desirable topics (wounds, wound complications, etc.) in the forum Fantasy Writers 2 years, 9 months ago
I use Startpage.com for research just because it’s private.
One note: when working with fantasy or sci-fi you can speed up the healing process via herbs like athelas in Lord of the Rings or via tech. You also have liberty to make up diceases like the Black Breath also from Lord of the Rings (though it’s more of an effect like stress which has…[Read more]
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RAE posted an update in the group Sci-fi Writers 2 years, 9 months ago
So I’ve got a problem, I like to plan out stories like crazy and many of them I will never write down but will just be added to my mind’s archives. One of theses stories will be the death of Grathmere, my hidden Antag for Guardian Angels and the following 3 books (What can I say? I wanted a complete story). The problem is, after he is defeated by…[Read more]
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Hi RAE! I have returned. I shall now proceed to pepper you with suggestions good, bad, and downright awesome. (Teasing. I promise I don’t actually talk like this in real life.)
Anyways, about Grathmere. There’s always the standard ‘badguy turns good, saves goodguy, and dies’ trope. However, I’m not sure that this trope would really make much of a…[Read more]-
Grathmere is a hard character to read. He’s a Wondian Nameless Thing making a little harder for me to put on my Character Cloak. He has never tried to kill Leahae, and she didn’t even know he was such a monster until he was defeated for a while my Alpha and the other Assassin Clones. He has almost killed Alpha more than once, on purpose, but I…[Read more]
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My mom thinks a prophet should show up at the final duel and preach forgiveness. Or all three should die.
Anyways… So, did Grathmere accidently give Alpha the disease or was that on purpose? I get that Leahae is a sweet person and all, but if her brother kills Grathmere when she was just beginning to get to know him, it would probably cause…[Read more]-
It’s a tough one. I like the prophet idea but getting one…hard. I also can’t see Alpha breaking down and crying, neither can I see Grathmere. All three…that would spiral into chaos for a Realn clan and a entire kingdom Leahae rules.
On purpose. It does not last forever but when he’s under the effects, he’s helpless. It can. Last hours or…[Read more]
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Alpha doesn’t really have to break down and cry. Neither does Grathmere. They just both need to decide that it’s not a good idea to kill each other right now. That doesn’t mean the relationship is going to be completely healed on the spot, but it can at least open the way for it to begin.
Yeah, that last idea works. But if you don’t like it . . .…[Read more]
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E. N. Leonard replied to the topic Historical Research for Fantasy Novel? in the forum Fantasy Writers 2 years, 9 months ago
I haven’t done this sort of thing myself, but I know @calidris has done some stuff with a twenties style setting. Calidris, what sort of resources have you used?
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E. N. Leonard replied to the topic Character Castle 2.0 in the forum Fantasy Writers 2 years, 9 months ago
My character has been raring to go for this XD
Mara
Where are all these new people coming from? This place is so confusing. I’m honestly glad Frey got pulled away because he made that even worse.
Then one of the new ones starts shouting about revolution, and I can’t help but giggle at her. Apparently the Nightingales are…[Read more]
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Inkhorn replied to the topic Character Castle 2.0 in the forum Fantasy Writers 2 years, 9 months ago
I apologize for not writing a post earlier. This summer is a bit more hectic than usual. 😅
CONROY
“Aha! The army has arrived!” screeched Rhianna with such force that Conroy nearly tumbled off the stage. He yelped, flailing his arms in attempt to regain his balance. He grasped the thick red curtains, pulling them around him to recreate…[Read more]
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RAE posted an update in the group Sci-fi Writers 2 years, 9 months ago
13th Birthday Sabotage
RAENahim Nayhelm was today twenty-one. The Laxorian landscape of tall grasslands was filled with armored Realn as they prepared for the ensuing battle on the old ruin grounds of the city of Laxan. As Nahim’s hands glided through the checks of his weapons, he thought back through all the birthdays he had had o…[Read more]
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Fun! I like.
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RAE posted an update in the group Fantasy Writers 2 years, 10 months ago
Name: Igua Dyke Cloak. (Note: Cloaks never share their true last names except with each other, part of Tradition) masculine
World: The original world of Wond.
Type/breed/kind/whatever-you-want-to-call-it: Man
Profile: green eyes, shaggy brown hair, one side of face and neck has burn scars. 5’3″
Culture/people: Realn, a warrior people who believe…[Read more]-
Hi Rae! Igua sounds like an interesting character. Random thing, but I’m very curious about the aversion to butterknives. Has he got some kind of tragic history involving them?
Also, about him and Skullcrusher, could you throw them into a bit of trouble together? Make them learn each other’s languages under stress and by necessity, if that makes…[Read more]-
Igua does have a tragic past as Nahim does, his father was a Cloak but his mother grew up and raised him in a little town where he got his strange accent and his awful habit of slang. When they get into full swing it’s called another language but hey! It’s faster to say stuff. His mother supported her husband but never became a Cloak. When his f…[Read more]
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Rants are welcome! Hey, your plot sounds good! I have a habit of coming up with a million characters, half a dozen story lines, and then trying to smoosh it all together. You can probably guess that it doesn’t work great. For example, my novel work in progress (though I have a short story I have to finish first):
A. Rhianna, the Loki, is an…[Read more]-
That is comforting that rants are welcome because (beware) Ru Eis has a lot of rants she can cast forth.
Your story sounds intriguing. I’m curious who these people are and their backstories.
I’m a fan of backstories and that is where my plots often come from. For Guardian Angels, when I figured out the fact that his family was dead and how it…[Read more] -
Ru from the now present just poking something in. A common sample of Igua’s slang is, “The effe (ef-ee) woul’e dest.” Translation: “The effect would be devastating.” Now you can see why his Cloak Circle BEGGED him to learn how to speak normally!
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HA thank you for mentioning backstories, I just realized that literally only two of those characters have them. This is still a relatively new story. Also, I made a conscious effort not to make sad characters, who are the ones that really need those. Something to work on!
How many brothers do you have? Do any of your siblings write? I have two…[Read more]-
I have two brothers and no sisters, none of whom write. I have no idea where I got this love for writing since no one that I know of in my family does. I have to write things by hand first either on paper or on my digital notebook from the company Mobiscribe, I just have to write it in good ol’ cursive too since my print has some of the worst…[Read more]
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Abrielle replied to the topic Character Castle 2.0 in the forum Fantasy Writers 2 years, 10 months ago
They’re great Inkhorn! I like. However, Rhianna would be lying through her teeth about it being the best dream ever. She’s not been in it long enough for it to take that prize. You probably noticed that she isn’t averse to telling whopping fibs though, so it’s completely in character.
Rhianna
“…we are trapped here until Lord Castle sees fit to…[Read more]
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Inkhorn replied to the topic Character Castle 2.0 in the forum Fantasy Writers 2 years, 10 months ago
Cahira is my main character while Conroy is a side character. Conroy’s backstory had been pretty underdeveloped for a while, but once I started diving in, it got heavier (more than I intended). 😅
CAHIRA
The dramatic entrance of the young woman diverted Cahira’s attention, which was soon captured by the woman’s declaration of freedom.…[Read more]
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Abrielle replied to the topic Character Castle 2.0 in the forum Fantasy Writers 2 years, 10 months ago
Your characters sound like fun! Conroy seems kinda sad though. Just curious, are either of them main characters?
😁 Thank you! I am very fond of Rhianna.
Now let’s see if we can get Denari in here.
Denari
Ari stood in the doorway of the inn, frowning out at the whisps of fog that obscured the road.
“Eh, young Ari,” the inn…[Read more]
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Livi Ryddle replied to the topic Research of less-than-desirable topics (wounds, wound complications, etc.) in the forum Fantasy Writers 2 years, 10 months ago
Well, after trying six times to post a reply, I figured out that it just doesn’t like me putting links in here. So let’s try again xD
For electrocution, I went to the BRCA (Burn and Reconstructive Centers of America) website. Under “community resources” and “safety”, they have a page with a lot of info about electrocution.
For…[Read more]
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Livi Ryddle replied to the topic Research of less-than-desirable topics (wounds, wound complications, etc.) in the forum Fantasy Writers 2 years, 10 months ago
Test post – three previous ones didn’t post 😛
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RAE joined the group Fantasy Writers 2 years, 10 months ago
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RAE posted an update in the group Sci-fi Writers 2 years, 10 months ago
Hey. It’s RAE. I have been trying to write a book called Guardian Angels, a space story. Can I get some constructive criticism on the first chapter?
1. Laxan
Billowing smoke filled the air. Lava drooled into the city streets. Rock soared into the air to land on crawling Nanian bugs. Ash was mixed in with every shaking breath. They had lost. The…[Read more]-
Hi Rae! I haven’t really ever offered criticism on other people’s writing before. Apologies in advance for anything that comes across as too harsh.
First off, I like it! It’s a cool idea. For some reason, I’m getting Mandalorian vibes (do you watch Star Wars? ).
However, it does feel a little wordy. Would it be possible to get outside of the…[Read more]-
Thanks, I need all the help I can get. My big brother (C) thinks the lego sets are cool for star wars and I have watched some of them. Realn are not my version of Mandalorians though, the Fettians which C made up to be way cooler and worse for storylines (He likes making me figure out how to make up a good story, he likes thinking up the coolest…[Read more]
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Why not? If you post them, I’ll read them. I can’t promise to always posting feedback though, next week I’ll be pretty busy and may not be able to keep up.
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Thanks, though I might not post the 2nd chap for a while since it needs some work which I’ve got to do but after that I’m up to chap 4 in typing and chap 10 in writing. Thanks Abrielle, your replies and words give me courage.
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RAE joined the group Sci-fi Writers 2 years, 10 months ago
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Inkhorn replied to the topic Character Castle 2.0 in the forum Fantasy Writers 2 years, 10 months ago
Name & Age: Conroy; 7 years old
Appearance: 4′ 3″; Asian features but has curly light brown hair with dark brown eyes
Personality: Gravitates to whichever person seems to be in charge. Impulsive with few manners. Enjoys learning, especially about wars. Comfortable speaking to adults but unsure in interacting with kids his age. Quick to notice…[Read more] - Load More
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