Ariella Newheart

@elisha-starquill No problem, lol!

I’ve started mine and have no clue where I’m going with it XD I won’t be able to finish it for a few weeks or so, but I have one started XD

And oh my gosh both yours and @ariella-newheart ‘s were AMAZING!!!

@ariella-newheart @elisha-starquill WOW guys. You both did an amazing job! I really enjoyed reading them. 😀

@steward-of-the-pen and @anne_the_noob14 – Glad you guys like the prompt! I’m excited to see what you do with it! 😀 (And thanks for looking up flash fiction word count, Livi. I’d have gone waaaaay over. :P)

@evelyn – Me too! I thought this would be a fun place to practice. Lol, yes, that happened to me as well, and unfortunately that short story…[Read more]

@anne_the_noob14 @elisha-starquill @steward-of-the-pen   @ariella-newheart

So sorry that I have been gone so long. My life has been crazy recently. I had mid-terms (high-school), basketball tournaments, Thanksgiving vacation without internet access. *rips out hair over memory*

Anyways, I am back for now.

I love what y’all have done so f…[Read more]

@ariella-newheart Ooh… midterms. Fun! XD *tilts head to the side* This is high school midterms, correct? Or not? My dad teaches college and he just finished finals week.

@ariella-newheart @elisha-starquill@steward-of-the-pen

Submit thy word…[Read more]

@ariella-newheart *grins* Thank you! I was kinda in the mood for creepy writing when I did that… And I enjoyed it 😛

*grins again* Me too!

*nods* He doesn’t see fit to push his luck, and he really hates when people misuse their various power.

Yeaaahh… He sometimes has those kinds of thoughts. Not often, and they’re never meant to be…[Read more]

@elisha-starquill

@ariella-newheart – That’s a cool name! And I also love the name of your language.

Thank you! 🙂 Great job with your entry, by the way. This part was especially poignant to me:

And the thought of two people feeling alone when they were right next to each other was ridiculous.

@anne_the_noob14 – Your entry was both intense and chi…[Read more]

@ariella-newheart   AAAAAAAAA *starts crying*   I… *sniffs* I made Caedon… I MADE HIM CRYYY WAAAAAAA I’M SORRYYYY AAAA *hiccups in-between sobs
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Ok so actually that did make me tear up lol. You displayed Caedon’s emotion very well and it rubbed off on me 😀

Heeeyyyyy guys look I’m actually gonna write something here for once :D…[Read more]

@ariella-newheart

So glad it helped!

I also agree with Elisha about the characters. Though I definitely caught the hint that those characters are important and expected to see them again later on, they were a bit confusing. I don’t know much about flashbacks and when/how to use them well, but I think that could be a great help.

I don’t know if…[Read more]

@ariella-newheart – That’s a cool name! And I also love the name of your language. 😀

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Caedon smiled, as if he knew something Racleva didn’t. “Solina isn’t a country. It’s a city. The capital city of Reimira, to be exact. It used to be a monarchy, but now the Reimirian Council makes most of the decisions. My—”

He stopped abruptly, c…[Read more]

@ariella-newheart – I just re-read a few of the first chapters, and in addition to agreeing with what Steward already mentioned, I personally thought the characters from the start were a bit…confusing.  I think it would be clearer if you explained how they all know/met each other early on and provided a little bit more backstory (flashbacks, as…[Read more]

@ariella-newheart The Hall of Fame was actually my mom’s idea, and I loved it! It’s funny how attached I got in two weeks or less to some of those characters we made. XD

Aww, poor Caedon!

@ariella-newheart

If I can, I’ll read the first few chapters again tomorrow so I can give you some better feedback. However, I already have a few thoughts, so I’ll share them right now. 🙂

First, I loved the start to your book. The first chapter would be a gripping hook even if the prologue was dropped, which is really important. (I’ll defer…[Read more]

@elisha-starquill

@ariella-newheart – Glad you’re feeling better! By the way, what does Caedon’s name mean?

Caedon’s name means “white mountain” in Ali’Narae. 😀

@anne_the_noob14 That scene with Lucas disappearing was so sad!!

@steward-of-the-pen Oh my goodness, the Parimi Alca hall of fame!! It’s all of our past guild war entries! And yes,…[Read more]

@ariella-newheart @anne_the_noob14 @christlover @elisha-starquill

I’m back! xD Sorry it took so long, here’s what Runawin was up to while everyone was eating…

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Runawin ducked into the tunnel, her jaws stretched into a smile at the sight of the warm firelight. But as she took another stride onto the shadowed tunnel floor, her paws met air.…[Read more]