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@melodyjoy Right now it’s a short story, but it could turn into something longer. We’ll see! I’m getting more excited about it as I work on it more!

@claire-h I’m curious about her backstory too… 😁

@vic

I love how you are developing both Liz and Diane’s personalities… And ooh, now I’m curious about Liz’s backstory. 😉

@vic

Cool and cooler! Keep up the good work! I really love Diane!! She’s so sweet!

@vic

AND I just read your 3rd portion! **Thumbs up**

I liked how you portray Diane’s character and personality. You do a great job of showing how she is really shy and quiet/reserved 🙂

Is this going to be a long book-type story, or is it going to be a short story? Just wondering’ (cause I love your work so far! 🙂

MEL

@vic

Hello! I really enjoyed reading the second portion of your story!!! Great job!

One thing I enjoy when reading your story is that even though you are writing in 3rd person, I almost feel like it is written in 1st because you help readers picture her and know what she is thinking and going through.

MEL

@sam-m @emberynus-the-dragonslayer @melodyjoy @claire-h@anne_the_noob14 @joshuapior

Let me know what you think. Still don’t know exactly how this is gonna end. 😏 Next scene is under construction and will be up soonish. Maybe by tomorrow but I’m working so it might be Monday.

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Her doorbell rang and Liz jumped. Calm down! she scolded h…[Read more]

@anne_the_noob14 I have no knowledge about beekeeping, lol! Notice I don’t explain anything about what she needs to do… 😆 I just wanted to include details about her “normal” life. Though, I have no idea if she could actually do legit beekeeping with a travel itinerary… do you have to take care of them every day, or can you kinda leave them t…[Read more]

@vic

You have a wonderful way of expressing things with your words. I really enjoyed reading the new portion! Great job! I especially liked the part about detracting attention by attracting it in a totally different way. Super cool. 👍:D

@vic

Nice!! I love it!

Random thing: She’s a beekeeper?! 😀 My mom has kept bees for about 9 years? Give or take? So anyways I always find it cool to come across characters and “real” people alike who at least have some correct knowledge of bees 🙂

@vic Thanks, Vic. 🙂  I enjoyed this section and I’m looking forward to seeing how the story continues. I’d love to find out the backstory of how Liz became an assassin and learn more about Dirk! 🙂

@vic

Awesome part!! I love your writing style. The description is so good! Looking forward to more parts 😉

@sam-m @emberynus-the-dragonslayer @melodyjoy @claire-h @anne_the_noob14 @joshuapior

Sam, you just go right ahead and write your story. Don’t worry about where I take mine!! 😉 That being said, here’s the next part. There’s some clarity about theme and purpose now, but it’s still more of an as-I-go project. ☺️

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Liz stared at h…[Read more]

@vic

Also, you mentioned how you had the scene in your head but didn’t really have a plot or purpose. My story I am working on right now kinda has the same issues. I had a really awesome (sorta lol) first scene and I got that all written and I also have some other cool parts that I can’t wait to write later on in the book but transitioning is…[Read more]

@vic

I really enjoyed reading your story! I love your writing style. The suspense and mystery of the story and the way you wrote it kept me “on the edge of my seat” 🙂

I think it is so awesome how so many people on SE play the violin. I do to. I enjoy playing it. Another reason why I love this story, because I can relate to just a little part of…[Read more]

@vic

I really enjoyed reading your story! I love your writing style. The suspense and mystery of the story and the way you wrote it kept me “on the edge of my seat” 🙂

I think it is so awesome how so many people on SE play the violin. I do to. I enjoy playing it. Another reason why I love this story, because I can relate to just a little part of…[Read more]

@vic

Ok that was EPIC!! I love this kinda thing! I love reading stuff that gets my blood pumping. And killers with musical instruments is totally my thing 😆 LOL

I likeall of @claire-h ‘s suggestions. 🙂

@vic This was really cool! I enjoyed your vivid writing style. I also thought it was cool how she’s an assassin and a violinist.

Here’s a thought I had for a direction that you <i>could</i> take this: maybe Liz is a an assassin whose boss gives her assignments and she kills people without really knowing them. Then she ends up killing someone she…[Read more]