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A Villainous Poem

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    Anne of Lothlorien
    @anne-of-lothlorien

    Hey guys! *waves* So about a year ago I wrote a little bit of a poem directed at the villains of stories, asking them if they were happy with who they were and what they did. Then recently I wrote the villain’s answer…

    Here’s the first part, the question put to the villain.

    ***

    Blood stains in the shape of men
    on the marble floor,
    and the cries of anguish
    from the families of the dead.

    Thorns in your crown,
    poison in your cup,
    each step to your seat
    marked in blood.

    Life and love stolen from the eyes
    of those you love the most
    and your own heart,
    still beating, but torn out.

    Can you stand under the weight
    of what it has cost you?
    Are you happy
    now you have your throne?

    ***

    And now here’s the villain’s response…

    ***

    My throne is pieced together
    from remnants of kingdoms overthrown,
    and you ask if I think it is comfortable?

    The great hall is decorated in
    the black of shadowed betrayal and dried blood-red,
    and you ask if I like the colors?

    I have no place to go but a castle
    haunted by the ghosts of the betrayed,
    and you ask if I enjoy the company?

    Fear is the only way I can rule,
    by ending those who speak out against me,
    and you ask if I am happy?

    Foolish man.
    You have no real idea of what it’s like…
    But the answer’s simple, really.

    Yes.

    Yes, my throne is quite comfortable;
    I had it custom made.

    Yes, of course I like the colors;
    I picked them myself.

    Yes, the company is delightful;
    we’re old friends now, the ghosts and I.

    Yes, I’m happy; why would I not be?
    I’m on top of the world
    and nothing can bring me down.

    ***

    What do y’all think? Any thoughts? What was your original idea as to what the villain’s response would be?

    I'm short, I like words, and I love people.
    No, I didn't draw my profile pic.

    #143457
    Rose
    @rose-colored-fancy

    @anne-of-lothlorien

    I joined this group just so I could reply to this XD

    That was fantastic!! It’s such an intriguing subject, and it took quite a turn!

    I love how you accentuate the villain’s cruelty, and the first part has a certain melancholy about it, like you expect the villain to regret it.

    And then the first half of the reply once again accents the fact that the villain knows what the price of their actions was, and you expect them to be repentant, and then in the last part you can see they genuinely do not regret it, and it was a surprise, but it made the poem far more impactful! I LOVE it!!

    Without darkness, there is no light. If there was no nighttime, would the stars be as bright?

    #143460
    Noah Cochran
    @noah-cochran

    @anne-of-lothlorien

    Okay, so I’m here for the same reason Rose is…but seriously Anne, that poem was amazing. I especially loved the question put to the villain, it actually made me want to keep reading it. Absolutely fantastic.

    The villain’s response if exactly as avaricious as it should be, and it shows the nature of a heart darkened with the narcissistic attitude of man.

    Keep up the poetry! 🙂

    #143528
    Anne of Lothlorien
    @anne-of-lothlorien

    @rose-colored-fancy

    Aw, you came over just for me? 🙂 Thanks!

    Yes, I was going for it seeming like there was a possibility he hated what he did and was sorry, but then ultimately he has no regret. 😀

    I'm short, I like words, and I love people.
    No, I didn't draw my profile pic.

    #143529
    Anne of Lothlorien
    @anne-of-lothlorien

    @noah-cochran Thanks for stopping by and thanks for the compliments! 🙂 I’ll definitely keep up the poetry.

    I think there’s a multitude of villains presented as the ‘misunderstood’ character, someone trapped in their evil choices who would change if you just understood them and showed them love… while I still love those villains, I wanted to show that there are some villains that truly have no regrets as to their choices.

    I'm short, I like words, and I love people.
    No, I didn't draw my profile pic.

    #143532
    Noah Cochran
    @noah-cochran

    while I still love those villains, I wanted to show that there are some villains that truly have no regrets as to their choices.

    I can’t agree with that enough Anne, some people are just evil and narcissistic, and that is all there is to it.

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