What Is YOUR Story About?
May 29, 2020 at 3:04 pm #114061
Sooo…now that we’ve all got to hear a little about each-other’s stories, I was wondering if everyone would like to share some of their characters?😊
Tell us what they look like, why you like them, personality, strength/weaknesses, and maybe a couple random quotes and things.😄
This is going to be fun!
@eden-anderson thanks for starting this thread, hope you don’t mind me inviting everyone to share characters.
Not all who wander are lost.May 29, 2020 at 3:13 pm #114063
Yes! Someone else who doesn’t think action is a necessary for a heartfull story (what’s heartfull anyway?😆 I think I just made it up).
I have that discussion all the time with my brother. When I watched LOTR I loved Frodo’s story, and my very favorite part of the whole movie was when Boromir died.😭 But, my brother was convinced that the battle scenes were the very best.
Also, I love what you said about showing vs. telling.😊 Part of me thinks you are totally right. The problem with telling isn’t telling, it’s how we tell, no?
Not all who wander are lost.May 29, 2020 at 3:53 pm #114069
@arindown I guess I’ll share a bit about my three main characters…
Micah Radcliffe: An analytical, ambitious businessman. Blonde hair, blue eyes, tinted glasses. President of the Roses. Constantly in a power struggle with the other gang leaders of Heather Flights. Micah’s very confident in his own abilities and the power that he holds, which eventually brings him to his downfall. He cares very much for his subordinates, and his social skills are high.
Ethan Radcliffe: Micah’s younger brother, the former vice-president of the Roses. Inherited the Asian part of his family with black hair and dark eyes. Quite the opposite of Micah. Timid and nervous, but very observant. Anorexic due to guilt. Eventually gives out the location of the headquarters and becomes a private investigator for the police in return for his past crimes to be erased. Gradually grows more confident after he breaks ties with his brother.
Shade Seneca: One of the two human experiments left over from an experiment to create a cure for a certain disease (which ties in a lot to the backstory). As a result contracted this terminal illness himself. Has black hair and purple eyes, and is colorblind. Generally wears sunglasses, a hood, and a medical mask to avoid spreading the disease. He isn’t allowed to leave Heather Flights because of the disease. The results of the experiment only created a half-effective drug that requires continuous taking in order to sustain a painful life. Due to the fact that this drug is illegal, no one is willing to buy it from Shade. By this point Shade has figured that even if he’s lost everything, at least he’ll have some money. Often seen with his friend and other human experiment, Caleb Conrad. Shade eventually is blinded by the desire for revenge against the mafia, as the mafia were the ones who funded the experiment in the first place, and now won’t even let him sell the drug on their turf.
"I set a melody upon the scenery I saw outside my window;
It's beginning in my spacy world."
- TKMay 29, 2020 at 4:41 pm #114075Beth Darlene@beth20
Yeah, good idea!
Well, I’ll share Marrill bc she is basically me lol!
She’s 13, has shoulder-length hair (it’s red, which mine isn’t lol!) She’s an only child…okay so a few things that aren’t like me haha! She loves animals and owns tons of them.
And here’s a snippet from her…
Marrill bounced along the dusty road in the back of their Subaru. Her rat was contentedly nestled in her hoodie, while the rest of her pets were in their cages in the back.
Her mind flew over the past few days. After she had come home from school, that perfect Friday was ruined. Turning the corner of her street she had stopped dead in her tracks, the For Sale sign that had stood in front of her home for months now had a big SOLD sticker across it.
She rushed into her house calling out as she ran “Mom? Dad?”
Her mother met her in the hall “Honey, everything’s going to be fine” she soothed, stroking her hair.
The next few hours flew by in a blur for her, she had packed up all her stuff and put her animal cages in the back of their car. Her dad arranged for moving vans, and the next day they had set out for their new house.
She smiled remembering the last hours of her time there, she had texted all her friends (including Ricky) and they met at the library a few minutes later. Everyone had been sad to learn she was moving, and some tears were shed before she finally headed home, Ricky’s mailing address in her pocket.
Blasting music startled her out of her musings, her dad had put on an Eagles CD. She smiled, watching as her dad reached out and grabbed her mother’s hand, “Together” he said and her mom beamed.
Hotel California was just coming on when she drifted into sleep.
The tug woke Marrill. She sat up looking around her. She was surrounded by tall trees, a small house squatted in front of her, it seemed to be beckoning her.
There it was again the indistinct tug.
It seemed to be trying to pull her to the house, she got out of the car and slowly walked toward it. Her mom and dad got out of the car also and called to her “Hold on honey, we need to unlock the door.”
She stopped and waited while her dad fumbled with the lock. When he finally got the door unlocked, he opened it and stepped aside letting her and her mom go in first.
The tug was stronger on the inside, she looked around there was nothing but a painting on the wall of an old man holding a rifle, she ignored the painting and ran up the stairs. There were three stories, she skipped the second and ran all the way to the third.
Two rooms were all the third story held, one to her left, and one at the end of the hall.
Her eyes glued to the door at the end of the hall, and a weird sensation came over her the tug was extremely irresistible now. She started forward, her legs moving without her permission. “Help!” she tried screaming but nothing came out of her mouth.
She came to the door and her hand moved toward the handle slowly turning the knob. Again she tried screaming and again in vain. She was inside the room now but instead of a room, she was inside a forest. And not far from her sat a boy, coffee in hand mouth agape.
Okay, hopefully, that wasn’t too long haha!
Jominkreesa! For the weirdos who know what it means! 😉 I love you guys!May 29, 2020 at 6:25 pm #114083
Hey! Thanks for starting this topic! Super awesome! 🙂 (And it really got me thinking)
Your story sounds so intriguing. And sad. I can definitely tell that it’s going to be very well written :).
It eats my posts like ALL the time so I have gotten into the habit of copying what I have written so that just in case it does eat it, then I can just paste it and try again 🙂
You have written quite a bit on your story! 73k is a lot of words! Great job!
I am already so into this story! 1)Your writing style is super good and 2) Your plot sounds really good!
Please let me know if you post anymore 🙂
Both of your stories sound like they have lots of potential!
I enjoyed reading your character “plans” as well! 🙂 (Shade Seneca sounded very interesting!)
And, also, you are very good at writing premises :). Mine aren’t always so great LOL
I really need to read your story (Ninjanara). It’s been on my “bucket list” for an extremely long time, but I haven’t gotten around to it yet…
Sounds really good! Keep up the great work!
Dual 1st person POV sounds fun! I recently read a book with that and I really enjoyed it. I am hoping to do that sometime in the future for one of my stories 🙂
I love the way you planned out your characters and things they are struggling with etc. 🙂
Also enjoyed reading the little portion of what you have written!!!
Thanks guys! I like just started a story (2 days ago lol). I’ll post the premise. I’m hoping I can actually get somewhere with this one. I haven’t had luck recently…
I’m trying to plan more so that the actual writing of the story flows better. 🙂
Life is short, smile while you still have teeth!May 29, 2020 at 6:34 pm #114084
OK, so here is the basic “gist” of my story 🙂 :
Chloe Loran worked at a daycare till a horrific car accident seriously injured her. Struggling with depression, guilt, and many serious physical issues, she must turn to God for help with her relationships and her physical and emotional needs.
I’ll try to post some of the story asap 🙂
Life is short, smile while you still have teeth!May 29, 2020 at 6:51 pm #114085
@melodyjoy Ahaha thanks! (There’s so much backstory to cover it’s really hard to give a complete description of all the characters)
Ahh your story sounds really meaningful! I would love to read it! Also you profile picture is super cute.
"I set a melody upon the scenery I saw outside my window;
It's beginning in my spacy world."
- TKMay 29, 2020 at 8:14 pm #114087
🙂 Thanks so much!
Yeah, I love guinea pigs! I used to have 2 of them (not anymore, sad…)
Life is short, smile while you still have teeth!May 29, 2020 at 8:21 pm #114089Emberynus The Dragonslayer@emberynus-the-dragonslayer
This is a really cool idea! I’ll try to put a character up soon. 🙂
Sold souls and dead promisesMay 29, 2020 at 8:27 pm #114090Emberynus The Dragonslayer@emberynus-the-dragonslayer
Your characters are so cool! I love Shade Seneca!
Sold souls and dead promisesMay 29, 2020 at 8:36 pm #114091Beth Darlene@beth20
Haha yeah, life! lol, I like the premise for your book!
Jominkreesa! For the weirdos who know what it means! 😉 I love you guys!May 29, 2020 at 8:50 pm #114093May 29, 2020 at 8:52 pm #114094May 30, 2020 at 12:08 pm #114117
@devastate-lasting Wow. What a cast you’ve got.😊 I love it. I like the different dynamics with the brothers, and I love the name Shade. Micah sounds kinda slick…like he knows how to play his game.😄
Also, I’m wondering why the drug dealers won’t sell Shade’s drug. I mean, I know you kinda explained it. But isn’t all “drug dealer” stuff illegal? I might just be confused.😆
Not all who wander are lost.May 30, 2020 at 12:13 pm #114118
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