Tudor Turcu

@vivian-grant Those are sooooo helpful, I appreciate it so much!!

I’d love to read your story! What’s it about?

@esther-sears

I was wondering something. I recently posted the first half of a short story of mine, and though someone read it I was wondering if you would also like to read it before I post the second half?

@esther-sears

You’re welcome! This was a neat brain challenge, and fun besides.

1. There’s the sentence near the beginning ‘As Bjorn and I walked up, I could see that the house was two stories, one of the only ones in the village.’ It’s a little choppy, and it interrupted the flow of the narration. Possible change: ‘As Bjorn and I walked up, I…[Read more]

@vivian-grant Thank you sooo much!! It means so much to hear you say that ^_^ I’m glad to hear you didn’t know what was going to happen right away 🙂

Yes, you are pronouncing Bjorn correctly 😉

That’s a very good point about the ships! Thanks 🙂

Would you mind commenting on the grammer mistakes in the document? I definitely want to get those…[Read more]

@esther-sears

I just finished it. I am rather blown away. The ending was immensely powerful, and well-delivered. Sylas’s descent into maddening jealousy was satisfying, and didn’t feel contrived. I don’t see any blaringly obvious problem with Moira. Early on, it was a 50-50 percent chance that she would go either way, but as Sylas became…[Read more]

@vivian-grant If you can pay special attention to setting, and the girl character (Moira), that would be super helpful!! Although anything you notice and can give me feedback on is great 🙂

@esther-sears

You’re welcome! What do you want me to take note of– character development, plotting, both?

@vivian-grant Yaaaayyy!!! Thank you so much! 😀 Now, it is more or less a tragic love story, so as long as you’re prepared for that… 😉

Here’s the Google Doc!

@esther-sears

Hello! My name is Vivian. I joined this group a couple days ago. I would be willing to beta-read your story! 🙂

@shannon

Yeah, it definitely does. I look forward to the finished version 🙂

@shannon

That sounds great 🙂 I really like the plot for your story.

Glad to be of service 😉

Oh, this sounds really cool! I really like how your plot sounds so far. 🙂

I’ve yet to actually start it, but I’ve been toying of writing a WW1 novel from the perspective of a German soldier. (My mother is German, so she knows a lot more about the history from the German perspective than most people. I think it would be pretty interesting to…[Read more]

@shannon

Let me just say it’s been ages since I heard from you last! Secondly, love your idea! And your themes seem great. What was the gist of your plot? That might help me a tiny bit with your question.

I’m also writing a WW1 book so we can be WW1 writerly buddies 😛