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anne_the_noob14 replied to the topic Guild War…6? in the forum Announcements 7 years, 5 months ago
@steward-of-the-pen Why thank you! 😀 *takes more than is probably my share of cookies* Happy holidays!
*also applauds* 😀 😀 😀 😀 😀 My brain is too tired to think of another way to express my excitement, so I’ll also say, “Great work!!”
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Evelyn replied to the topic Anyone else doing Theme Mastery? in the forum Parimi Alca Writing Discussions 7 years, 5 months ago
@steward-of-the-pen I admit it… I was me lol. I mean… who else could get away with saying “WINGFEATHER SAGA” so many times? 😉
No, I didn’t sign up. Not this year… maybe next year though! Let me know what you think at the end, okay? 🙂
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PursueWisdom replied to the topic Guild War…6? in the forum Announcements 7 years, 5 months ago
Hi all!!
I’m not sure if you’ve seen this…
BUT WE WERE GIVEN AN HONORABLE MENTION IN THIS WAR!!!
See https://docs.google.com/document/d/1cELNYNDhdM5o1DcXvFwxkTE29p7MnZtcRzRobNuExzY/edit#
I found that Daeus’s feedback was super helpful – so please read it! 🙂
Anyway, thanks especially to ESJohnson (for doing most of the writing) and Darth…[Read more]
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J.A.Penrose started the topic Holiday Announcement in the forum Annual Theme Discussion 7 years, 6 months ago
We have been going for twenty-eight weeks now. Can I just say, that is insane. I honestly wasn’t expecting the guilds to take off like they did, but now, I’m definitely sold to it.
But anyways. I just wanted to tell you that there will be no more lessons from me until 2019. (I know. Huge break.) We’ll be looking at characters, and I think th…[Read more]
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ESJohnson replied to the topic Guild War…6? in the forum Announcements 7 years, 6 months ago
Also, I’m thinking what if Aleksander’s Son attacks before he has a chance to march out? That means the spirits lied and he now has to make a choice for or against them. Any thoughts?
(And @coggleton , I was going for that David/Absalom vibe…[Read more]
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Livi Ryddle posted an update 7 years, 6 months ago
So I’ve been working on a story recently, and I was wondering what you guys think of this part…
Cornelius had been walking for a while now and thirst threatened to get the best of him. He stooped beside the stream and cupped some water into his hands to drink.
Dang. This water tastes weird. Not bad, but weird.
Smacking his lips, he started…[Read more]
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Ooh, intriguing! 🙂
Does it seem more female or male? Hmm… It feels like it could go either way… it doesn’t feel like one or the other yet, reading through.
Once you pick one gender though, you probably will want to add a quick description in this clip to signify that. -
Oh ho, this seems good *rubs hands together in anticipation*
My mind automatically thought the sprite was male. I could visualize it being all dramatic: ‘Who DARES to summon /The Great Water Sprite/!?’ etc., etc.
And I agree with @evelyn. Once you decide, some description would be helpful 🙂 -
I don’t think it necessarily seems more male or female. Make it a dude though, I feel like all the sprites I read of in stories are girls =P
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@evelyn True.
@obrian-of-the-surface-world Maybe I should paste in the rest of the story. (Below) Me and my friends took turns adding a sentence or two to the starting sentence to write the first couple pages, down to where he knocks himself out, and then I write the rest. It’s kinda a mess right now, and I’m still working on editing it, but maybe…[Read more]-
I’m sorry, lol. I didn’t realize I made so many typing errors!
” he knocks himself out, and then I WROTE the rest.”
“The wad OF money appeared in…”
I think that’s all the ones, lol. I’m not usually this messy!
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Wow. That is hard to determine where any cues might come from because it shifts too many story threads into random directions. Not sure still if I can get a gender decision on the brief part where the Water Sprite shows up. Do you have a backstory in mind for the Water Sprite? That might give you a better idea of which traits might lend…[Read more]
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@anne_the_noob14 No problem! 🙂
By the way, next time it might be easier to start a thread in the Parimi Alca writing discussion section… it’s easier to read and respond to long messages that way. 🙂-
@evelyn Ah, you’re right! Lol I didn’t think of that soon enough 😀
@obrian-of-the-surface-world Right. I haven’t yet thought up a backstory for the Sprite yet. And yes! It does help 🙂 Thanks!
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@anne_the_noob14 I think that this seemed more like a girl. If you want it to be more masculine, though, maybe mention a deep/male voice or something? (I’m sorry it’s taken me forever to see this 😛 I got super behind on emails!)
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*thumbs up* It’s ok, lol. Holidays are always busy for everybody 😛
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Beth replied to the topic You Have Arrived at Parimi Alca! in the forum Announcements 7 years, 6 months ago
@silverclaw-bonnetfolly and @steward-of-the-pen Hello, and thanks! 🙂
Steward of the Pen. Unfortunately, no, I don’t ride horses– my family moves around a lot and we’ve never really been in a good place for riding.
@evelyn. It’s alright. 🙂 I’m not offended. *hands you pizza and tissues*
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J.A.Penrose replied to the topic You Have Arrived at Parimi Alca! in the forum Announcements 7 years, 6 months ago
Just dropping in to say, welcome to our new Parimi!
Everyone make sure we give a stellar welcome to our newest…[Read more]
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PursueWisdom replied to the topic Guild War…6? in the forum Announcements 7 years, 6 months ago
@esjohnson @steward-of-the-pen
Just a quick update from me: I just finished reading through/commenting on the draft. 🙂 Yay!
Anyway, thanks for doing such a good job on this! I see that we have another 800 words to go, so perhaps we can focus on some more character development and fixing some other things as well.
We need you! :)…[Read more]
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Evelyn replied to the topic Lesson 27 : Raving About Pacing in the forum Annual Theme Discussion 7 years, 6 months ago
@steward-of-the-pen Should have seen that one coming. xD
@sarah-vdh Hey I’ve read that book! 😀
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PursueWisdom replied to the topic Guild War…6? in the forum Announcements 7 years, 6 months ago
Hi all! I just wanted to take a second here to remind all of us Parimians to review/comment/edit/whatnot on our guild’s draft that the very talented ESJohnson and Darth Pen worked on. 🙂 I see a few of us have already commented which is wonderful; if you haven’t, please look it over so we can make it the BEST!! 😉 (In other words, we need you.…[Read more]
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anne_the_noob14 replied to the topic You Have Arrived at Parimi Alca! in the forum Announcements 7 years, 6 months ago
@obrian-of-the-surface-world Thank you! I love the movie!
“Some of the best people I know were and are homeschooled. One of them is a CEO and founder of a Marketing Firm in Dallas. Many millionaires and entrepreneurs in your group as well.” 😀 😀 Coolness!
@evelyn 😀
Ah, ok. I need to read them sometime. It seems as…[Read more]
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OBrian of the Surface World replied to the topic You Have Arrived at Parimi Alca! in the forum Announcements 7 years, 6 months ago
Thank you @steward-of-the-pen,
You’ve provided some brilliant and thoughtful responses. I am thrilled to be in this Guild with you.
May the Lord continue to bless you in your gift and life.
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J.A.Penrose started the topic Lesson 27 : Raving About Pacing in the forum Annual Theme Discussion 7 years, 6 months ago
Hopefully by now, (sorry newbies) you have got a fair grip on Pacing and Suspense.
Today, you have a super easy task. Name one text, (try to use one that you haven’t before in these lessons) and show how it used pacing and suspense well. Try to be spoiler sensitive!
To help clarify, a text can be a book, poem, movie, song, play, video game,…[Read more]
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ESJohnson replied to the topic Guild War…6? in the forum Announcements 7 years, 6 months ago
Here’s some more! I’m going with the whole light/darkness vibe from my prompt, the vision/dream that the rest of you suggested, and the sacrificial King theme that @steward-of-the-pen came up with. 😉
The Kingdom was going to pieces. The only shred of normality that he had left was his Capital, his son intent on wrenching the Kingdom from his…
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ESJohnson replied to the topic Guild War…6? in the forum Announcements 7 years, 6 months ago
Okay, everyone, how about this? The first few paragraphs are coming together!
(And @silverclaw-bonnetfolly , I may be able to incorporate some of your ideas! WHEEE! 😊😊😊)
Father had always told him that there were only two things in this world–light and darkness.
When he dreamed he saw neither.He saw blood and skin and bones, porcelain s…
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ESJohnson replied to the topic Guild War…6? in the forum Announcements 7 years, 6 months ago
@steward-of-the-pen that’s amazing! I’m still interested–I’ll get to work ASAP!
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PursueWisdom replied to the topic Guild War…6? in the forum Announcements 7 years, 6 months ago
…. so are you thinking along the lines of the king sacrificing himself? Or?
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PursueWisdom replied to the topic Guild War…6? in the forum Announcements 7 years, 6 months ago
Hmm… nice idea!! I’ll need to chew on this for a while. 😉
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Ariella Newheart replied to the topic Guild War…6? in the forum Announcements 7 years, 6 months ago
@esjohnson @steward-of-the-pen @pursuewisdom I’d be happy to help with the first draft, but my schedule is crazy so I don’t know when exactly I’ll be online. Someone please tag me when we’re planning to write it and if I see in time I’ll get on the doc to add my thoughts. 🙂
We might as well start discussing the precise details of the dream n…[Read more]
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