Pearl F.

@eitan

I’m sorry you had to start over. 🙁

Okay, pre-prologue has disappeared. 🙂  The Roman scene it is.

I watched the video you linked, and might again. (:

Another, smaller problem I had with the pre-prologue is the POV. As a general advice – don’t use omniscient POV.

So, you likely don’t want me to do this in the prologue (: First chap…[Read more]

Oh, I wrote a whole comment and then the electricity fell…

Your writing is really good! Descriptions, punctuation, etc., you do it great. Good job!

You’ve also portrayed good the relationships in the family. Malachi sounds like a real elder brother, and I say it as an elder brother 😉

The main problem with the pre prologue is that……[Read more]

@beth20

I think this is the one you already read. *embarrassed look* I haven’t edited yet. Sorry.

I’ll make sure to read this lol!

Your story idea is amazing!

Wow! And awesome!

I have a book with that article in it. Amazing that you’re making a story from it! I really think it was real. They’re not the only ones who saw such creatures (though farther back a ways.) In 106ish BC Marcus Tulliues Cicero wrote about flying snakes, and where they lived. In the same paragraph that he talked about the ibis…[Read more]