Charis Etter

Your story sounds very intriguing. I want to read the whole thing when you’re done, if you don’t mind.

Adelaide is a sympathetic character. I would suggest mentioning her reasons for forming a rebellion closer to the beginning, though. I didn’t understand why she was doing anything until that was explained at the end of chapter one. And if a…[Read more]

@theclumsy_lamplighter (tag anyone else who was curious)

I am so sorry it has taken me forever to get back to this. School and work were crazy, but I’m back now! Ok on to the female descriptions:

Nova: Black hair, pixie cut, long bangs hang to the side of her face; 5’3”; reddish-brown eyes; muscles from training her whole life; Asian com…[Read more]

@the-fledgling-artist That looks awesome! Thanks! I love it!

@thetessinator Lol glad you like it. And go for it! Creativity is meant to be shared.

@theclumsy_lamplighter I’ll get you the female descriptions as soon as I can. I’m not a place right now where I’m able to access the document with all the descriptions.

@the-fledgling-artist That looks awesome! Thanks! I love it!

@thetessinator Lol glad you like it. And go for it! Creativity is meant to be shared.

@theclumsy_lamplighter To me, the beds were normal. I think y’all Americans have beds that are too soft sometimes. But if you imagine throwing a thick blanket on a hardwood floor, that’s kinda all it was.

The food was so much better than the Westernized versions people make here. They had so many more spices and flavours. We make some at home…[Read more]

Hey Y’all! I’m new here! I usually watch forums for a few days before adding my own comments but I figured I’d try to be friendly(-er)…

@theclumsy_lamplighter I’m American. I currently live in Colorado, but we lived in NE Asia for 12+ years as missionaries. (I am perfectly happy to answer any questions you have about any of my childhood lol. Also, if you’re really curious, I started a blog about it that I update periodically: https://tckcultureshock.wordpress.com)

Quick…[Read more]

@the-fledgling-artist Jørgan Alioth would probably dress in a cotton shirt of some kind (I never imagined anything but the color really–he is a farmer so probably not anything very form fitting, but pretty much up to your imagination) and pants with pockets and of a color that might hide stains and dirt easily (again, style is up to…[Read more]

should I put these on the other conversation?

Here are some ideas just to start. Let me know if you have questions or prefer female options better.

Male options: It is a futuristic SciFi Dystopian world that involves space travel so feel free to add that into any designs.

Jørgan: 17 years old; Dirty-blond hair, longish crew cut (usually a bit of a mess); blue eyes; 5’11”ish; muscular from…[Read more]

@the-fledgling-artist @theclumsy_lamplighter Sorry y’all, I couldn’t find the other post *oops*. There is no time crunch whatsoever. I write in my spare time too and skip parts I can’t think of on the spot (usually descriptions) so I can go back to them.

Should I give you some basic descriptions here or how does this work? (Sorry I’m new and…[Read more]

@kari-karast

As my sisters age, I will probably write older things too. At the moment, though, I try to stay within their maturity and emotional understanding and allow them to maintain a childhood innocence while they can.

@theclumsy_lamplighter 3 bedroom house but we converted half the basement into a 4th bedroom lol. Plus the oldest sister is married so she doesn’t need a bedroom. But yes, it was definitely crazy growing up.

Thanks! I grew up in China and Korea so I love their culture and language.

@valtmy That’s a good analysis. I was thinking something along the lines of  the Secret Agent Dingledorf series by Bill Meyers. The protagonist is more of a #2 character, but the villain is more #3. The protagonist will get home from school and then go fight crime (hence his #2 persona), but the villain (I think) is seen trying to go shopping or…[Read more]

@theclumsy_lamplighter I’m the third of six girls lol there’s a lot of us (just wait til I start having brother-in-laws **cringes** it’s hard enough to keep track as it is)

I’ll check it out!

Great topic! I spent a bit of time trying to think of another category, but I think you’ve pretty much covered it.

I would love to read some of your #3 stories. I like those, but sadly there aren’t many that are written well enough for me to be able to read them. I do love the comedic aspects of it, though. I haven’t found many well written…[Read more]

@kari-karast

That’s another good idea. The reason for the torture scene is that 1) I need the villain to get certain information that she will eventually provide and 2) I need her to lose the eye so she can have a cyborg one for later scenes.

Since I am writing this with a 10-12 age level in mind, I’m probably not going to show so much pain, but…[Read more]