Anna S.

@katie02

Yay, I’m so glad my suggestion helped! 🙂 And yes, I would definitely want to keep reading! (I’ve read a lot of books from that time period too, so I can totally relate with it becoming your style 😉 ) I saw that you mentioned The Hidden Hand in your introduction thread. It’s one of my favorites too! Your book so far reminds me a lot of…[Read more]

@Claire-h

Oh, and I forgot to mention that I do read a lot of books written in the 1800s and early 1900s, and that’s kind of become my style. 🙂 I don’t know if it’s annoying to most modern day readers, but I was hoping since the book was set in that historical era, that people’d be okay with it.

Thanks for your opinion @zee! I will definitely take it into consideration.

Well, @erynne, if your heroine dies, the romance certainly won’t go anywhere. While I can see how you could find some resolution to the other elements of your story, and still have her die at the end, but a romance aborted just before it gets off the ground would be even more disappointing (to me) than one that never really got started at all.

My…[Read more]

@claire-h WOW, thanks so much! This was super helpful.

I think one of my problems was that the Frys where so entertaining that I didn’t want to make light of the guy being shot and missing, and I overcompensated on the melodrama, whoops. I toned them both down a little now. I do want the story to be somewhat realistic, although I do have a fairly…[Read more]

@katie02

Thank you for sharing your work! I know it takes a lot of courage sometimes. 🙂 I really enjoyed this snippet! Great job with the characters …and the mysterious happenings. Mr. and Mrs. Bill Fry are so entertaining. XD So here are the few thoughts I had:

First off, this story reads like it was written in the 1800s. Have you read a lot…[Read more]

<p style=”text-align: left;”>@zee</p>
Thanks for your opinion!

When I first came up with the idea for this story, I had no intensions for it to have any romance in it, then as I got more detailed with the plot the romance just kind of slipped in. If that makes sense.

I will definitely consider your suggestions, but I feel I were reading a book…[Read more]

@erynne, it sounds like you have the bones of a fascinating story here–however, if your heroine dies before she gets married, I wonder why there’s a strong romance element in the plot at all. It sounds like the main story is really more of a family drama-type story, where the heroine has to come to terms with what she (accidentally) did to her…[Read more]

@erynne

Thanks!  Hmmm, I thought I responded on your art thread…  probably me being scatter-brained… again. 😊  I LOVED it though!!  I thought you did an amazing job, especially with the ocean ❤

Oh yes, of course!!  I completely get it!!!

Ooo, I love that one too!!!  So sweet. 🥰

Yep.  That stuff gets super annoying.  And VERY cringy.…[Read more]

@erynne

You’re welcome for the tips. 🙂

I actually have several different romances going rn. LOL 😆

@emberynus-the-dragonslayer

Thank you for the tips!! They are very helpful 🙂

I’ve had to stop reading a few books over the romance in it, and it really upsets me that that is even necessary.

What is your romance story about?

@erynne

hey. Sorry I’m jumping in her late.

I echo a lot of what @writergirl said.

Clean romance is very very important to me, and as a writer of YA and adult Romance I know that sometimes that gets very difficult. Good ways to regulate your romance could be to have a family member read it for you. If that’s not an option for you, then maybe a…[Read more]

@writergirl101

I’m kind of hoping that this one gets people to cry. That’s sounds absolutely awful, but I LOVE the stories that make me cry and if I can get other people to cry over my stories it means I’m not doing to bad as a writer. 😁 So it all makes sense if you think about it through my prospective.

I totally agree with you on your views of…[Read more]

@erynne

Hey Erynne!  Aw, your story sounds tragic!!!  That might actually make me cry if I ever read it!! 😢

Oh, I totally feel you when it comes to reading/writing Christian romance!  People can be so messed up, and a lot of it shows in their writing.  The fine line between beautiful romance and bad stuff is sooo hard to write.  I don’t writ…[Read more]